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I love that fanfiction !!!!!!! And Daryl is my favourite character in ANK fanfictions , I always looking for story where Daryl is appear so that is PERFECT .. please keep going :D

I really love this story! Daryl is so beautiful and compassionate and I love that Katze is feeling himself again.absolutely fantastic so far- dieing to find out what happens next

Hi! I like the story so far. The only "flaw" I noticed was Katze eating a lot when having been straving--I heard that a body that hasn't had food for a while usually won't digest well and you have to build back up--sort of like how vegitarians get sick if they eat meat since the body can no longer digest food. Anyway, I really don't care that you have Katze eating a lot--I like the idea of him getting better fast. As for the writing, I think you are too hard on yourself. I teach composition at a community college--I teach a lot of remedial writing, so to me the writing read well. I wasn't reading for errors, but I didn't notice at wrong words or run-ons, etc. which you get in some of the writing on AFF. It's hard to edit your own work anyway since you tend to read for content--it seems like whenever I reread a chapter of mine I always catch at least one more error. Anyway, this seems like a good continuation of the story--I was so upset at the unhappy ending, so I'll be happy if at least Daryll and Katze find some happiness! I'm curious to see what's up with Raoul and why he wants a harem. I hope you continue this! Thanks for posting!

I like your story - I'm a Katze-Fan. I especially like your Daryl. The original Daryl presented always a problem to me because the character of the radio-drama doesn't fit to the picture of the anime. I prefer the radio-drama-Daryl and your character design is close to it's.
Please take yourself all the time you need write the story - it is worth waiting.
(I wish I could help you with a Beta but I have the same problem. )

I noticed the better structuring - I found the reading much easier.

I don't think you're going too slow - I like everything you've written and I appreciate a story that unfolds slowly, explaining the circumstances well and building up the plot. (Too many authors - me, included - rush into smut.)

I'm getting fascianted by Raoul's strange pets. Must be something that will be explained later - which makes me want to keep reading!

Well done.

Heh, I might review your story even ten and more times if that's what it takes to support it. ;-) So, I just wanted to say that you keep the level and I'm tremendously glad that you continue (I was already starting to worry that you quit). Good that we got the corrected version this time, it helps a lot. (You might wonder why some people pick on your grammar while they don't pick on some other, definitely worse written stories. For me, I do it because I think for those stories there is no hope, so there's not even a point to pick on anything about them. Your story is good and it only takes a little to make it even better.)
You asked about Emporium as a place for the pet show. I'm not sure if you are aware that this particular place is not canonical. It appears only in Taming Riki. Just to let you know. But sure, that's as good a place as any other. I guess Parthea could do as well. And Mistral Park, and Apatia.
As for capitalizing blondies, I've got the same problem. ;-) But I guess we should capitalize this word after all (I still haven't changed it in my fics, but I will - some day).

Hey you're finally back and updating, I was beginning to worry that you had given up and abandoned us glad to see that's not the case.
Thank you for responding to my review it's nice to have an idea of what you think of the relationships between the different classes, it helps gives me an idea of where you're coming from and perhaps what I can expect from the story.
Anyway I can't wait to see what's going to happen now I'm even more curious about what's going on with the pets.

more please.
i would voluntear to beta, but my time is zero, my inspiration null and my gramma and spelling is far away from anything acceptable.
so:sorry
but if you can, more please.

Going back to the first chapter the part that struck me was when Katze was looking Daryl over for injuries. I know Blondies can be strict or demanding but I've never thought of them as violent. I realize of course that you could still take this story in any direction you want but so far I'm glad Raoul isn't a bad master. I thought that the job for Katze might have him working with Raoul but that's just because they're my favourite pairing (I blame Lena's stories).
On the other hand the relationship you've shown between Daryl and Katze has been a nice touch. The conversation between them in chapter two did a good job of showing not just their friendship but also how much Daryl respects Katze and his opinions. At this point I'm definitely curious about what your planning on doing and since I love Katze it'll be interesting to see what you do with him.
Sorry I didn't review earlier but I wanted to make sure you were going to continue the story so many writers disappear after even just one chapter. It was nice to read that you have planned out a plot and know the direction you want to take. As for any mistakes I didn't see any major ones, take your time and don't worry about rushing just make sure your happy with the result. That being said I can't wait for more!

Plain pets, eh? That would set me to wondering, too.

I really like your story so far - and will be looking for updates.

Would like to make a suggestion, though. Start a new paragraph each time the speaker changes. It correct grammar - and makes the story so much easier to read.