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June 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh look, a Girls Bravo fic that doesn't suck!
I only have a bit of constructive criticism. I noticed a few times, especially in chapter 5, that you have a bad habit of changing tenses mid-story. That threw me off a few times, but otherwise isn't that huge of a problem.
5/5, awesome story!
I only have a bit of constructive criticism. I noticed a few times, especially in chapter 5, that you have a bad habit of changing tenses mid-story. That threw me off a few times, but otherwise isn't that huge of a problem.
5/5, awesome story!
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April 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
just thought id say nice fic i love the story and the anime keep the updates coming ^.^
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December 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great! Can't wait to see it!
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December 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You...have a point. Thanx. i WILL have the next chapter up before this weekend is over! *evil laugh*
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December 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It's about damn time someone else wrote a GB fic!
As for the story itself, it seems to have a lot of promise. It'll be interesting to see how you can keep Koyomi in character and still have her doing someone. I had a large problem trying to do that.
The only complaint I have is your review whoring. The whole story should never be kept hostage just because you feel that you need someone to review it. I've had numerous stories with multiple hits (some 1000+ hits) and no reviews. Write fanfic because you feel moved to, don't do it just to stroke your ego.
As for the story itself, it seems to have a lot of promise. It'll be interesting to see how you can keep Koyomi in character and still have her doing someone. I had a large problem trying to do that.
The only complaint I have is your review whoring. The whole story should never be kept hostage just because you feel that you need someone to review it. I've had numerous stories with multiple hits (some 1000+ hits) and no reviews. Write fanfic because you feel moved to, don't do it just to stroke your ego.
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December 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Update!
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December 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Same as last time people, i need to see some reviews b4 the next chapter.
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November 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
looks good please keep writing
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November 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good so far and better use of words than the guy who writes the other ones
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November 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
What's this? Another GB fanfic! First time in...forever. Looking forward to more!