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April 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was really beautiful and definitely hit on the psychological issues with abuse and why it's so hard to leave behind. Excellent job.
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January 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 7: i'm not surprised. up until this point my mind kept going "is it Omi or Yohji?..." (after u mentioned the blond that is -before that, i thought it might be Aya)
being Persia would tend to fuck someone up, & then of course there's the way he was raised -a Takatori indeed.
being Persia would tend to fuck someone up, & then of course there's the way he was raised -a Takatori indeed.
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January 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
very good story. & a good way to vent frustration & anger too, i imagine.
i've been used & even raped, but i still can't fathom that kind of violence....
i've been used & even raped, but i still can't fathom that kind of violence....
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January 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I liked the characterizations, and admit you really had me taken in -- I had expected it would be Yohji who beat up Schu. Your desription of the domestic violence victim is really good -- behavior, reactions, etc. I think i would like to suggest that you add a warning faor character death, though. (If you haven't already) Good style too - not too much internal voice, just enough to make it clear how they think. Keep up hte googd work.
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December 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Omg. Thank goodness it wasn't Yohji! I was almost crying for a moment there! And then you said "Takatori" and I was like "Well, at least it wasn't Yohji." Then again, Omi fans may not like it, but. Blah.
Hehe. That was really well written. You seriously had me thinking it was Yohji. Woosh!
Hehe. That was really well written. You seriously had me thinking it was Yohji. Woosh!
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December 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
nice! u kept the suspense throughout the story. i was shocked that it was omi though but well written
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December 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Now that was a twist. Thank you for writting such a good story. I am sorry to hear about your friend, may they find themselves in a better place.
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December 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You ahhhhhhh!!!! I want to who it is. I can hardly wait for your next chapter. *runs away in tears to hide in a corner, mummbling about want to know who it is*
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December 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Cries. I want to know who it is!!! I can't wait to see what happens next. I can see Shu-Shu freaking if he finds out that he is there though.
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December 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please keep writing? I'm intruiged.