rate_review Reviews

Ah! Keep writing this. I'm so glad that you picked it back up, beta be damned. I want to see an update very soon because I have to know the root of the confusion.

And in lieu of any other contact info on this site, I'm responding to your review through this review. I just did a little happy dance when I received your response. You are the first to actually get that Crawford/Schuldig story. You're the ideal reader. You handled the story with great care while giving the absolute best criticism. Where were you when I was writing it? Find me on lj or get in touch through the.two.point @ gmail.com . Ah! You got the Beneke thread. At last!

I love this story! I was fooled, too, thinking it had been Yohji at the club. Either his twin or Schuldig messing with Aya's head so he thinks it's Yohji. Or ... something clever you thought of. I love stories of Yohji & Aya getting together, and this one is off to a great start. Your writing is doing well with no beta. Would love to have you continue it. Thanks for posting!

Chapter 2--This is now getting scary. Aya is showing so much emotion to Yohji, and Yohji just doesn't get it yet. Angry, pissed off, violent, vengeful: these are emotions he is used to seeing in the redhead, but ... hurt? ... tears? ... anguish? ... scorned? ... insulted? These he is not prepared for, these he is surprised by and confused by. Please, Yohji, buy a clue--Aya wants you but now you've made him feel so dirty and used. Maybe you feel something for Aya too but you've gone a whole month without telling him. Dig your way out of this one! I'm with you, Aya! Grrrrrr! (Hello, author? I'm still interested in your story. Keep up the good work!)

*HUGS YOU* Nice, love! Keep going!

This is really so sad. Aya thinking Yohji only wants him as a whore, and Yohji thinking Aya only wants him as a trick. Could it be that Yohji only wants to keep Aya from going to other men and truly being a whore? I don't know where you're going with this but I'm along for the ride! Fast paced, written in a short of shorthand, leaving us the pleasure of filling in the gaps with our imaginations.

This sounds like a fic called 'Shells of Glass' that I read, but Aya wasn't in love with Yohji and he died quite sadly in the end. Don't make me cry! I hope Yohji is in love with Aya and finds some way to show it.

P.S Thanks for the review:)

Poor Aya! I can't wait for the confrontation. More soon, please?