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November 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I think you did grate with the sex seancs. please contoune it thank.
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October 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I loved it, keep it up
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April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
the more I read this story, the better it gets!
please, write more of this story.
please, write more of this story.
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March 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Woohoo! Shinji in panties! HAHA! HAHAHA! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA...!!!
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November 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, since you were kind enough to critique my work, I thought I would return the favor.
I see that, like me, you favor the Shinji/Rei pairing. There's a lot of Shinji/Asuka out there, and admittedly a lot of
it is good, but this just seems like a more natural couple to me. I mean, the early episodes spend so much time
developing Shinji and Rei's relationship, and then Asuka suddenly appears and the writers loose all interest.... oops, I
think I just gave away part of the ending of my own story there.
You're obviously more comfortable writing sex scenes than I am. I first came up with the story idea for 'Angel of the
Heart' (what if every character were given one wish?) and quickly realized there was no way around it turning into a
lemon. Hopefully, reading all these stories, including yours, will help me in the future.
Wow, I'm not really talking about your story very much in this, am I? Sorry, I would have just sent you a simple
thank-you e-mail for your feedback, but your e-mail is unlisted (Mine is ikarifan23@yahoo.com, in case you care). Thank
you for pointing out how much Shinji's sudden knowledge bothered you; I'm sure other people were put off by it.
Not to worry, all will be explained in time. That goes for the disapperance of Hikari's soul, too.
Anyway, great job on your own story. Keep it up!
I see that, like me, you favor the Shinji/Rei pairing. There's a lot of Shinji/Asuka out there, and admittedly a lot of
it is good, but this just seems like a more natural couple to me. I mean, the early episodes spend so much time
developing Shinji and Rei's relationship, and then Asuka suddenly appears and the writers loose all interest.... oops, I
think I just gave away part of the ending of my own story there.
You're obviously more comfortable writing sex scenes than I am. I first came up with the story idea for 'Angel of the
Heart' (what if every character were given one wish?) and quickly realized there was no way around it turning into a
lemon. Hopefully, reading all these stories, including yours, will help me in the future.
Wow, I'm not really talking about your story very much in this, am I? Sorry, I would have just sent you a simple
thank-you e-mail for your feedback, but your e-mail is unlisted (Mine is ikarifan23@yahoo.com, in case you care). Thank
you for pointing out how much Shinji's sudden knowledge bothered you; I'm sure other people were put off by it.
Not to worry, all will be explained in time. That goes for the disapperance of Hikari's soul, too.
Anyway, great job on your own story. Keep it up!
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October 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great story, but you need to work on your tenses. You keep switching between past and present;
Shinji smiled and quickened his pace, adding a little more strength to his thrusts. -Past
This feels good for him too. -Present
Aside from that and some grammar, keep up the good work.
Shinji smiled and quickened his pace, adding a little more strength to his thrusts. -Past
This feels good for him too. -Present
Aside from that and some grammar, keep up the good work.
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September 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Over all was Pretty good, Also Was very nicely Paced but to me F/F Got Repitive, but not Terrible
Ideas for Next chapters maybe? Use another male other than shinji, Dunno if Touji or another Person would work but Possibly something Diffrent
Ideas for Next chapters maybe? Use another male other than shinji, Dunno if Touji or another Person would work but Possibly something Diffrent
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April 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
awesome keep up the work
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April 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ht fic but why te 2nd hapter is the same??? update soon pls
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February 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Update soon. BTW will it be a Rei/Asuka/Shinji lemon?! That would be cool. Nice work so far. Can't wait to read the rest