rate_review Reviews

I love this story. Poor Shu-chan. He just wanted a little attention from his Yuki. Well, he got it- but it just isn't enough for him. You write amazingly well! I'd love to read more.

great story luved it!! ^_^ you should continue writing!!

this was a great story. i really love the way you wrote the lemon. you really do have talent. it would be nice if you turned this into more that a one shot and continue it. all and all good job. ^_^

Great job :) It was really well written - I believe I saw only two mistakes (one was the sentence said he lovingly hugged him lovingly, or something along the lines - I just remember the word 'lovingly' repeated. And the other was you spelt going 'gong'..so minor mistakes ^^). I liked how you made Shuichi mature when it came to the whole Taki thing, though not so much where it seemed ooc.

OMG!!!! I looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooved it....Thank you...

I loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooove Yuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuukiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii......

This story was very well done.

But..this has been done a thousand times before and the reader knows exactly how the sex scene will go right down to everything they say, how tight Suichi is, how dominate Yuki is..and on and on. Its been done to death.

You have some talent. Try being a bit more original. Be daring! AFF is so missing good writers. You might just be the one we are looking for.

^_^