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April 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE this series. I've been looking through all of my old lurking spots for some Death Note fanfiction, since they never let me down before, but, until now, I hadn't found anything worth sitting down and reading. Your stories just have this wonderful flow to them. I feel like I'm reading an experienced novel writer instead of reading off of a fanfiction site. ...I actually don't have anything to say other than that except PLEASE KEEP WRITING. Your stories are amazing and I'd love to see more.
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April 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi Shinigami Yumi!!
I have followed "In the Spaces between Words" almost from the beginning but never came around to write a review. So I decided to be a good girl and write something. It is nothing specially no real critic, just my thoughts on this piece of writing. I wrote a little bit to every part, and hope it will help you to find motivation to keep on. I as a writer myself know much reviews can help ^^ So here we go!
Part 1:
Ryuuzaki`s reaction to Light`s nearness promises real Yaoi action ^^ In the Anime I found it strange, that both of them just went back to their rutine after that fight (well, I don`t know the manga, maybe it was different there). It`s good to read an interpretation of this situation. A good one on top of it. I wonder what emotion it was, that L saw in Light`s eyes. I think, it`s very likely, that Light really has feeling for L, or at least respects him. Otherwise he wouldn`t have agreed to the condition of being chained to him. Or he wouldn`t treat his wounds.
Part 2:
That was so sweet!! I liked how Light snapped and forced L to let him finally sleep. It was so seme like.. An angry Light is something we don`t see often.
L`s train of thoughts was interesting. Thinking of Light as beautiful, it`s certainly true. And also that he`s manipulative.
I had to laugh as L wanted to nibble his thumb.. XD It was so funny and sweet.
Part 3:
Light is sure keeping an eye on every on L`s quircks. That pinching from L might hurt, was funny ^^ I like such small thoughts, like the one about how clean L`s feet could be after walking around bare-feeted. This adds to the reading pleasure.
Light represents all values of society in terms of manners etc.. it is funny to see him clash with L in every way during their time together, who is seemingly polite, but inexperienced in sozial life. I wonder where he gathers all that patience from O.o I would have punched L by now, or find another way to relieve myself of the tension… XD MUHAHAH
Part 4:
Your description of L is very good and accurate. Now it becomes handy, that Light observed L´s habits, making the coffee. I like the banter between them resulting of it. L surely is paraniod, but it seems to be necessary for a detective. I like Light getting L back for the torture by making L so uncomfortable. And it pleases me as Yaoi fangirl. Especially the scene, when Light gets close to L and makes him shiver *kyahh*
Erm… well, I hope there will be more friendly (or more) banter between them.
Part 5:
God, I LOVED this part!!! L`s gall to fake a heart attack!! Poor Light for being cuffed to this man. You can`t even stay angry at someone so cute! It is soo clear, that they like each other, but the circumstances still prevent a honest relationship. *sign*
The scene, when L wiped him was screaming for a lemon.. well, in my opinion ^^ L warmes up towards Light, even if he tries not to. Great part! They are all great!! Keep the work up!!
Part 6:
It was funny to read the german title “Jenseits von gut und böse” inbetween the english words… I am german, and just kept reading, without realizing that the language switched.. ^^
Poor L, always thinking about the possibility of Light being Kira. That must be really trying.. but he seems cormfortable enough to fall asleep next to prime suspect. ^^ QUOTE: “I apologize, Light-kun. My body appears to have grown accustomed to your presence”… END QUOTE I hope his body will get even more accustomed to Light in the future.. will it?? ^^
I liked Mogi`s appearance in this one. It is interesting to see their relationship from the point of view of another character.
Did you read the books you have mentioned? I was always interested in philosophy, but never got around to actually read anything about it.
Part 7:
It seems Light got used to L inability in sozial ways.. and to being called Kira. They got to know each other pretty for Light sensing, when L`s only teasing. I like that! ^^
It is interesting to see, how hard Light stuggles to be a “good boy”. He is so concerned about his image, that he easily manages to control his temper. So it shouldn`t be surprising, how good he is at acting and decieving. After reading this I am also wondering, if you get those two together someday.. after all, wouldn`t Light think a relationship between two man to be unaccaptable?
But it is nice to see, that L`s really getting comfortable around Light and accustomed to his touches. It seems he is not quite able to keep the suspicion up. It was sweet to see L trusting him enough to tell him his birth country. Even though he maybe just did it to see Light`s reaction. But he feels the changes in their relationship stronger.
Your explanation for L`s addiction to sweets is very likeable and easy to comprehend.
Part 8:
That was so funny!! Especially Light`s thought about being glad he never jerks of in the shower XD I can understand his discomfort. Even without worrying about the other sexuality, it would be a strange situation to be observed even under the shower. Those are very intime moments. But why is he such a girl in terms of cosmetics??? O.o
And he shouldn`t be so prude in terms of nudety… damn, modesty. Who needs it?! L is just comfortable with himself XD I think Light`s just shy, because he fear he could like what he sees, and this would be inproper (yeah, Yaoifangirl-mode is in control right now.. ). His reaction about demanding a longer chain sounded weird, like he thinks he should aswer this way, like a “good, straight boy” is supposed to. I hope he gets over that soon.
I was a shock to see the calm Yagami Light loose control enouhn to actually atack L. He must be on the edge O.o But I like such moments a lot. L is always emotionless in his attitude, but at least he doesn`t try to hide it. Light is almost the same, but it`s hard to see under his talkative nature.
Again a great part!! ^^
Part 9:
I like Light`s smugness about comprehending L`s eating habits. They understand each other like an old married couple XD
I was good about guessing L`s age.. I thought he would be 25. ^^ Can`t wait for more of your good writing!
My regards, Ivy
I have followed "In the Spaces between Words" almost from the beginning but never came around to write a review. So I decided to be a good girl and write something. It is nothing specially no real critic, just my thoughts on this piece of writing. I wrote a little bit to every part, and hope it will help you to find motivation to keep on. I as a writer myself know much reviews can help ^^ So here we go!
Part 1:
Ryuuzaki`s reaction to Light`s nearness promises real Yaoi action ^^ In the Anime I found it strange, that both of them just went back to their rutine after that fight (well, I don`t know the manga, maybe it was different there). It`s good to read an interpretation of this situation. A good one on top of it. I wonder what emotion it was, that L saw in Light`s eyes. I think, it`s very likely, that Light really has feeling for L, or at least respects him. Otherwise he wouldn`t have agreed to the condition of being chained to him. Or he wouldn`t treat his wounds.
Part 2:
That was so sweet!! I liked how Light snapped and forced L to let him finally sleep. It was so seme like.. An angry Light is something we don`t see often.
L`s train of thoughts was interesting. Thinking of Light as beautiful, it`s certainly true. And also that he`s manipulative.
I had to laugh as L wanted to nibble his thumb.. XD It was so funny and sweet.
Part 3:
Light is sure keeping an eye on every on L`s quircks. That pinching from L might hurt, was funny ^^ I like such small thoughts, like the one about how clean L`s feet could be after walking around bare-feeted. This adds to the reading pleasure.
Light represents all values of society in terms of manners etc.. it is funny to see him clash with L in every way during their time together, who is seemingly polite, but inexperienced in sozial life. I wonder where he gathers all that patience from O.o I would have punched L by now, or find another way to relieve myself of the tension… XD MUHAHAH
Part 4:
Your description of L is very good and accurate. Now it becomes handy, that Light observed L´s habits, making the coffee. I like the banter between them resulting of it. L surely is paraniod, but it seems to be necessary for a detective. I like Light getting L back for the torture by making L so uncomfortable. And it pleases me as Yaoi fangirl. Especially the scene, when Light gets close to L and makes him shiver *kyahh*
Erm… well, I hope there will be more friendly (or more) banter between them.
Part 5:
God, I LOVED this part!!! L`s gall to fake a heart attack!! Poor Light for being cuffed to this man. You can`t even stay angry at someone so cute! It is soo clear, that they like each other, but the circumstances still prevent a honest relationship. *sign*
The scene, when L wiped him was screaming for a lemon.. well, in my opinion ^^ L warmes up towards Light, even if he tries not to. Great part! They are all great!! Keep the work up!!
Part 6:
It was funny to read the german title “Jenseits von gut und böse” inbetween the english words… I am german, and just kept reading, without realizing that the language switched.. ^^
Poor L, always thinking about the possibility of Light being Kira. That must be really trying.. but he seems cormfortable enough to fall asleep next to prime suspect. ^^ QUOTE: “I apologize, Light-kun. My body appears to have grown accustomed to your presence”… END QUOTE I hope his body will get even more accustomed to Light in the future.. will it?? ^^
I liked Mogi`s appearance in this one. It is interesting to see their relationship from the point of view of another character.
Did you read the books you have mentioned? I was always interested in philosophy, but never got around to actually read anything about it.
Part 7:
It seems Light got used to L inability in sozial ways.. and to being called Kira. They got to know each other pretty for Light sensing, when L`s only teasing. I like that! ^^
It is interesting to see, how hard Light stuggles to be a “good boy”. He is so concerned about his image, that he easily manages to control his temper. So it shouldn`t be surprising, how good he is at acting and decieving. After reading this I am also wondering, if you get those two together someday.. after all, wouldn`t Light think a relationship between two man to be unaccaptable?
But it is nice to see, that L`s really getting comfortable around Light and accustomed to his touches. It seems he is not quite able to keep the suspicion up. It was sweet to see L trusting him enough to tell him his birth country. Even though he maybe just did it to see Light`s reaction. But he feels the changes in their relationship stronger.
Your explanation for L`s addiction to sweets is very likeable and easy to comprehend.
Part 8:
That was so funny!! Especially Light`s thought about being glad he never jerks of in the shower XD I can understand his discomfort. Even without worrying about the other sexuality, it would be a strange situation to be observed even under the shower. Those are very intime moments. But why is he such a girl in terms of cosmetics??? O.o
And he shouldn`t be so prude in terms of nudety… damn, modesty. Who needs it?! L is just comfortable with himself XD I think Light`s just shy, because he fear he could like what he sees, and this would be inproper (yeah, Yaoifangirl-mode is in control right now.. ). His reaction about demanding a longer chain sounded weird, like he thinks he should aswer this way, like a “good, straight boy” is supposed to. I hope he gets over that soon.
I was a shock to see the calm Yagami Light loose control enouhn to actually atack L. He must be on the edge O.o But I like such moments a lot. L is always emotionless in his attitude, but at least he doesn`t try to hide it. Light is almost the same, but it`s hard to see under his talkative nature.
Again a great part!! ^^
Part 9:
I like Light`s smugness about comprehending L`s eating habits. They understand each other like an old married couple XD
I was good about guessing L`s age.. I thought he would be 25. ^^ Can`t wait for more of your good writing!
My regards, Ivy
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April 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I think Part 8&9 are my favorite because the shower sence was just perfect. I don't even know who to descride the effect Light's gay question had on L. How L asked Light what he would do if he were before giving an answer is so like him, yet, for once, not for the purpose of Kira but to negotiate his own answer. Then the half eaten strawberry was uterly sweet and Light's knowlege of the kind of person L trully is when he observed that the fruit was his least favorite was beatiful. And after all that nonsence I just wanted to say keep up the good word. I like what you write, it moves me to see that pairing in a more appropriate way then just having sex within 1000 word.
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April 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You are just so adorable when you're asking for reviews, and your story just kicks ass...so...wanna know what I think?
ZOMFGILUVUPLZMARRYME1w4NN4H4V3URB4BIEZZZZZ!!!
In non-teenie words - I LOVE it! ^_______^
Love,
Cissi
ZOMFGILUVUPLZMARRYME1w4NN4H4V3URB4BIEZZZZZ!!!
In non-teenie words - I LOVE it! ^_______^
Love,
Cissi
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April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like it!!! continue please!!
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April 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like the subtleties in Light and L's interactions, it's quite a feat to make passages about them going through their daily routines interesting. Also like the slow and steady build up in their relationship, you've kept them wonderfully in character (it seems remarkably easy to go OOC when writing Light and L, if the fics I've read are any indication - a good number of authors seem to favour fanservice and make the mistake of idealising them). Looking forward to updates! ^^
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April 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very cute series of one-shots. I've just sat up way past my bedtime reading these through to the end, thoroughly enjoying myself. I'm interested to see if you post more.
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March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i don't know when this was originally posted. i see that it was updated yesterday. i don't come here often as i inevitably stay reading and searching until i find something wholly fascinating or i'm so tired i have to get to bed. today i achieved both astonishing speed. this is the first fic i tried reading and i only have about a half hour before i need to sleep. which totally sucks because i have been immediatley fascinated by this fic and i want to do nothing but read more but i HAVE to go bed if i want to get any sleep today.
i'm only on chapter 4. i didn't stop to review any of the other chapters because honestly, they don't need it. i tend to review if i concrit and right now i am too much just enjoying the easy flow of the story and the writing style to think critically. i am reviewing now because i know how important feedback is.
you have captured the characters well. everything about them seems canon, even the small gestures towards intimacy or attraction. to make an attraction between charcters that are not orignally written that way seem natural is a great feat. you are doing it well, partly because i think you are taking it slow. which is good for the story, but not so good for a me who wants desperately to continue reading but must stop for sleep.
i'm only on chapter 4. i didn't stop to review any of the other chapters because honestly, they don't need it. i tend to review if i concrit and right now i am too much just enjoying the easy flow of the story and the writing style to think critically. i am reviewing now because i know how important feedback is.
you have captured the characters well. everything about them seems canon, even the small gestures towards intimacy or attraction. to make an attraction between charcters that are not orignally written that way seem natural is a great feat. you are doing it well, partly because i think you are taking it slow. which is good for the story, but not so good for a me who wants desperately to continue reading but must stop for sleep.
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March 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
very well written. very smooth. i do enjoy very much just the daily interaction between these two. i think that if the story were nothing but what it is i would still read it and hope for more. that you've indicated there will be lemon is only icing on the cake so to speak. i'd like to have more concrit to give, but really it has been so enjoyable as it is, i have little criticism. maybe upon another read thru at another time. for now i will just anxiously awaite more. thank you for writing and posting.
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March 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg! I love this fic! XD <33 This isn't really a review, more of a squee fest at how much I LOVE it!! :E
I think you've got L and Light's personalities down perfectly. And I love all the details you've included in describing surroundings and with the character's thought processes.
Basically...omg...this is so awesome...please write more!!! T___T <33
And if you don't continue with this fic, I'll use my Intarwebs Death Note on you!! (it only requires a nick and avatar image to work it's magic!) >: Q
I think you've got L and Light's personalities down perfectly. And I love all the details you've included in describing surroundings and with the character's thought processes.
Basically...omg...this is so awesome...please write more!!! T___T <33
And if you don't continue with this fic, I'll use my Intarwebs Death Note on you!! (it only requires a nick and avatar image to work it's magic!) >: Q