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Well I have one thing that didn't really settle well and that is I believe that l has no personaly space or rather no sence of personal space, but other then that I liked it. A lot of thinking but I think that really inhansed the tone. Good job^ ^

This chapter seemed a bit more rushed then the last one but it was still really good. I like your style. You capture the characters well.

I really liked this insallment, i don't know if there chapters sense they're not really the same thing. They do flow together nicley though I like this one. You write a good yagami-kun. Although i thought that in eastern cultures they didn't change the tone in their voice when they were talking. I could be completly wrong though I was just curious. And what is a P.I.?

I'm really enjoying this story! I agree with the other reviewers -- your characterization is excellent, and I like what you're doing with the characters as well. I can't wait to see what happens next!

A note, however, to a previous reviewer: "brunette" is used to refer to women; "brunet" is the proper spelling for men. (Just as "blonde" is the feminine and "blond" the masculine form.)

Hello!

(gah, I can't believe you need to get an account in order to review now >.> ... tch)

Well, this explains why you've got so few reviews ^^;

I love your story so far, it's brilliant, *very* IC, and delectable.

I love the description parts, the interactions between the main characters ... btw, I think it would be good not to forget the others characters, because a one-on-one all story long quickly gets annoying. I think Matsuda intervention was nice in that account ^^

I also liked the coffee parts haha XD No, really, description of physic reality is always good, it adds a surrending, a set, and here the sensuality of it worked well ^^

And so far the balance between L's and Light's point of view is respected, wich I highly appreciate, since it's not offen the case in fics -but then I guess it's hard to achieve. I hope you keep it that way ^^

Ah, and I loved the humourous bits, like in "seemingly having decided that it was harmless." XD love that :D
I hope this also will stay in the following chapters ^^

At last, I like your writing style, it's neat and precise, which suits DN universe, and L and Light characters very well ^^

hey hey!

Don't be sad! This is really an intriguing beginning. I enjoy the introspection you allow each character. I absolutely adore L and I like the way you make these two loonies interact. I really enjoyed the palpable and subtle sexual tension in their conversation at the end of chapter 4 - where Light totally invades L's space.
Get him Light! Lick his face! *cheers*

Anyhoooo!

Just wanted to say I think this is coming along swimmingly and I can't wait to see what you bake next for these boys.

I've been reading this story since your first post and decided to write something after I read your comment at the end of chap5. I think this site is not known much and peoðle who read these stories do not bother to leave a comment on the efford of the author making.

ý trully appreciate what you have been doing with my best couple :D your style is captivating and you do not do what ý hate the most: smut without plot. you do not rush, and you progress within the boundaries of the real characters. they are so IC in your fic and your story promises a lot, so please continue, never forget that there are people who like reading fic of quality like yours. good work!

lol i LOVE this story!!! itsm sooo good! i like how you potray(sp?) the characters so well.
love the discriptions too!!^^ awwww L's sooo mean to Light-kun ^^ but i stilll love him XD
keep up the awesome job!! ill be watchin for the next chappie!!

Mmm, subtlety. How I adore it. And you convey it remarkably well! Please continue this story, it definitely leaves me wanting more.

And I've come to find that that 110:1 ratio goes for most fics, unless you're writing for some ridiculously popular couple from a ridiculously popular anime. Sigh.

hi! i think, out of the many many MANY fanfiction on death note, yours is one of the better writtten ones. most other authors can't wait to push ryuuzaki and raito in bed, making their interaction very out of character. i like your style, how you are careful with the descriptions, the way ryuuzaki is uncomfortable with close human contact, the quiet sarcasm of raito etc. i hope you do continue with this fic as long as possible, keeping the spirit of L and Light alive :)