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January 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
;) wanting more
Engaging plot! I like Fei and Akihito together just fine, especially when the scene is so emotional and in character. If you decide to edit this chapter, you might want to look for repetitive phrases, for example in "heartbeat of his heart," you only need one heart. Two makes it a bit awkward, since people do not normally speak that way.
Engaging plot! I like Fei and Akihito together just fine, especially when the scene is so emotional and in character. If you decide to edit this chapter, you might want to look for repetitive phrases, for example in "heartbeat of his heart," you only need one heart. Two makes it a bit awkward, since people do not normally speak that way.
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
AHHHH!!!!! This is the first I've ever read anything fic like about Finder no Hyouteki!!! I'm so glad that Fei Long "bullied" you into letting him take Aki-chan. It was so good and I'm anxious for the next part!!
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sorry...forgot to sign my name...that other review with all the screaming was mine :3
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December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee I can't wait for the nex chapter ^^. I hope you win the contest. Fei Long x Akihito rules!!!!!!!!!!