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March 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I read this a while ago and i lived it! YAY for the MAD! Muwahahaha. I love how you added the Alice in wonderland quotes at the end. It really does tie in pretty well with Hellsing.
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May 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
O_O!!! That Alucard is such a tease... :P.
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March 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
There wasn't any explicit scenes. I'm a little sad, but it was still well done. I liked it a lot. >:3 I'd love to hear more but I think it's good as a one-shot. <3
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February 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hehe. ^^ I enjoyed this. I was a little put out that you cut out the more intimate parts, but the witty ending sort of made up for it. If you wanted to improve anything, perhaps you could give more details about the settings. I think much of the intensity in the story comes from the characterizations. Those felt very vivid, me like!
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February 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
By the settings I mean mainly Seras's room and Integra's office. Alucard's "prison" is not included. There I think the mood is set quite nicely;
"Though there were lights strung overhead, they were old and many of them were burnt out."
and
"She could see the deep crimson of his coat, and the outline of his hat laying on the tabletop, giving the appearance of a puddle of blood..."
One benefit of writing fanfiction is that most of the readers already know the characters and the settings. But just the same, it can never hurt to keep reminding them of what they already know. By doing that you can also put your own thouch to it. Like you did with Alucard's hat. Everyone knows it's wide and red, but I've never thought about it as a puddle of blood before. That was a nice thouch.
"Though there were lights strung overhead, they were old and many of them were burnt out."
and
"She could see the deep crimson of his coat, and the outline of his hat laying on the tabletop, giving the appearance of a puddle of blood..."
One benefit of writing fanfiction is that most of the readers already know the characters and the settings. But just the same, it can never hurt to keep reminding them of what they already know. By doing that you can also put your own thouch to it. Like you did with Alucard's hat. Everyone knows it's wide and red, but I've never thought about it as a puddle of blood before. That was a nice thouch.
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February 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh sorry, "thouch" is supposed to be "touch". My english isn't at it's best... :P
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February 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yummy. I like very much. I espcially like the 'Alice in Wonderland' touches. It's appropriate in so many ways.
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February 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You are an excellent writer. Please tell me you have more stories.
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January 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i can't get over how you seem to have gotten them so very close to the cannon characters. it's spooky. really great story. love it
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January 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I kinda wanted to read a plot like this for quite a while, one where Serras decides to try going to find Alucard in his room, rather than always the other way around.
I only resent that it wasn't longer.
“Beware the Jabberwock, my son! The jaws that bite, the claws that catch! Beware the Jubjub bird, and shun the frumious Bandersnatch!”
Chiao,
TEOATG&B
I only resent that it wasn't longer.
“Beware the Jabberwock, my son! The jaws that bite, the claws that catch! Beware the Jubjub bird, and shun the frumious Bandersnatch!”
Chiao,
TEOATG&B