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January 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I am delighted by the premise of this story and I certainly hope to read more of it in the future. Reading this definitely made my morning.
The only bit of criticism I have is the use of the word "blonde." When referring to males, you're supposed to use "blond" instead. "Blonde" is for women. It's not something that particularly annoys me, but I thought it'd be helpful to mention it.
In either case, I happily await the next chapter.
The only bit of criticism I have is the use of the word "blonde." When referring to males, you're supposed to use "blond" instead. "Blonde" is for women. It's not something that particularly annoys me, but I thought it'd be helpful to mention it.
In either case, I happily await the next chapter.
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January 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I loved the tension in this chapter, especially with the obvious ways in which Tohma was trying to fuck with Taki's head.
I also like Opium so far, or at least what little you've introduced. Normally, orginal bands tend to reek of Mary Sue/Gary Stu, but I'm not getting that vibe from them so far. I look forward to seeing more of them.
I also like Opium so far, or at least what little you've introduced. Normally, orginal bands tend to reek of Mary Sue/Gary Stu, but I'm not getting that vibe from them so far. I look forward to seeing more of them.