rate_review Reviews

Pretty decent sex-scene. (For the record, I've found that skipping lube really only hurts much if it's been more than a week or so since you last got fucked. Granted, I assume the little king was a virgin, and then it do hurt like shit regardless. *Laughs* Tho my memory is scetchy, but you revert back to something like that after prolonged time of not getting any, so...)

Good one for the first one! But, ah, Eclipse can't snap his fingers and get some lube?? That seems silly give all the magic stuff they go/teleporting etc. Ah, and I don't know if you've had anal sex lately, but, ah, well if it's your first time in while you are really going to need lube of some type. Other than that, good basic sex. You might want to try working in some unique body descriptions or having them say something very in character. I guess I'm pretty jaded from reading a lot of porn on this sight, but after a while the sex stuff all seems the same unless there is character involved. But as a first one--great job. Gosh, I should go back and read my first one--I'm sure it sucked.
It's good to see a new fiction here!
Thanks for posting,
Hestia

Oh I like your lemons a lot! They are romantic and sexy. Thanks for posting two of them!!!

um, i think he'd need more than just precome for lube...or there'd be blood. *grimace*
& yeah, in the beginning they were REALLY OOC. but it got them where they needed to go. ^_~

this was VERY good for a first lemon! ^_^ Keep it up! ^_~