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February 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This one was really good.. sad but good. I was able to figure out what they were saying without the translation and that shows great writing.
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February 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is very touching and romantic I do like it but if you are going to rely heavily on Japanese, you really need to include translation. I found myself guessing a lot because I don’t speak the language. I understand what you are doing here, when I need Asuka to say something in German I have a friend that tells me what to say. But I limit it to a phrase or sentence because I know that only a few of my readers speak German.
I don’t mind a dark story now and then but I feel this one was incomplete. I’m guessing that you did the best you could so I don’t want to find a lot of fault with it. Please consider this. Why did Rei commit suicide? If Shinji is coming over tomorrow she has someone close to share her pain with and reconcile her feelings.
Still nice story and well done.
DC (AKA 94saturn)
I don’t mind a dark story now and then but I feel this one was incomplete. I’m guessing that you did the best you could so I don’t want to find a lot of fault with it. Please consider this. Why did Rei commit suicide? If Shinji is coming over tomorrow she has someone close to share her pain with and reconcile her feelings.
Still nice story and well done.
DC (AKA 94saturn)