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Hehehe i love pointing out mistakes....
Anyways ive got my exams in a week....wonder if my state is gonna be like yours after mine.......

Damn it you’re right, I already checked the chapter again and correct the ones I saw, after so many exams in one week my brain is pretty much like a fried egg lolol I actually had an error where I wrote “Jump” instead of “Just” (Hopefully I didn't write anything as stupid as that on the exams...) Thanks for noticing!!

This story is really good.
I write a pokemon story of my own, but its on Fanfiction.net and not nearly as good as yours.
I like to read stories here cause its better and more mature then most of the crap on Fanfiction anyway, and yours caught my eye. Your writing style is really good and i love the characters.
Nice job and keep it going!

I seriously love how this is developing...good job

Btw there are some grammatical errors you should check out....
Heres an example

“Damien?” she asked turning around.

“I suggest you tell "you’re" (it shouldve been your not youre) pokemon to calm down.” he answered.

“Spike stop barking, why are you here?”

Hey sister, sorry but I decided to remove my last review, I read it again and I figured that not only was I spoiling a few things but also I was being kinda mean, so I just wanted to say that you did a lovely job so far, you've been improving a lot in the last few years, and I can't wait for you to post your Diablo II story.
Yeah I changed my penname that last one was freaking old, also Ciarán really is a cool name but seriously next time you play an RPG with a male character come up with something more original lolol

Love ya and keep up that awsome work! (And yeah I'll eventually make the fanarts I promised...eventually)

Btw id like to point this out

Ciarán was shocked about what he was seeing, he wasn’t even one month old, he didn’t really understand what was going on, but for some reason he felt some excitement watching it, and he could feel one of his members growing. But he had no idea why.

Last time i checked males had one member......does the mutant thingy enable him to have more than one?

Oops my bad, what I meant to say was something like “and he could feel a part of himself growing” =P. You have a really good eye, I didn’t notice that when I was checking the chapter for errors, it’s already edit now. Thanks! ^_^

(And sister thanks for reviewing but pleaseee try not to put spoilers in here…and the reason why I didn’t change Ciarán’s name it’s because I’m using the same names I used when I was playing PKM Emerald. Thanks for the fanarts, I’ll be waiting ^_~)

Lolz the smoke ball bit reminded me of Ash getting his face roasted by charizard all the time...good work cant wait for the next chapter!

Awesome job with this fic!