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A few spelling erros here and there, but a damn good job if i'd say so myself. ^_^

And I forgot to mention if you can, can I have my character appear in both canalave city and the city where team rocket shows up? (to lazy to go check the name for myself) Also, if you need data on how Steven fights let me know DM. O_o;

oooooooo, I would so like to commission you for a drawing. When you get the time of course. o_O;

You'll probly say no, but it's worth a shot. XD

Thanks for all the reviews so far ^^

I know age in pokemon is a pain in the ass, I think I said somewhere around the League that I had to increase the age of some characters (the League was a huge mess), it's 10 years after the Pokemon Emerald Storyline, but when it comes to the anime it wouldn't make sense to add only 10 since they seem to be forever young in all seasons.
Let's not complicate much about age. The main characters are around the 20s, the adult characters (Ash, Paul and Gary) are around their 30s.
(Actually according to the anime it was Gary that discovered how to bring amber fossils back to life by the age of what...11? Most animes create weird age issues)

About Vi I didn't enter much into personal issues, I was worried about being able to explain the new season, leaving all the drama for the second chapter.
But about her personality, it depends from person to person, but normally when a lot of weird shit happens in life simultaneously people doesn't know how to react at first, there’s a tendency to follow any new door that opens, but it doesn’t really help lol.
Yes she is trying to take the easy way out, making herself believe that there's nothing else she can do but follow what someone like Gary tells her, what could she do alone against a criminal team? But that won’t last long.
Plus battles are a good way to channel anger without having to face the real issues. Sure maybe it's a female thing, but it takes a while to wake up and smell the reality.
Not that it’s much of a spoiler, she’s simply still under depression since the League. I needed this because I don’t want her to go run after Jack and Sam yet.

Don’t feel like I’m arguing or retaliating, I love when people criticize interesting points.

I could see what my guys reply to Gary would have been. XD

"We need you to come with us because you may also be in danger Mr.Key"
Gary says as he looks straight at me.

"Psh, you'd be in more danger with me THERE then I myself being in danger if I was alone"
I reply smuggly.

"I could always beat you in a pokemon battle, Steven"
Gary replies cockishly.

"And I could always kill you with my bare hads, so what's new?"
I reply annouyed looking at Gary.

".....Touch'e"
Gary replies with the classic. -_-;


That would be so fucking funny...XD
Meh, just me being bored. And i'll create some more of the chapter as it comes to me. O_o;
I KNOW I'M LAZY! *facepalms*

@Tenkage
Shush already dammit, she'll update when she get's the chance, there's no use trying to tell someone to do something just to get your way, since it never happens.

@...Whoever. O_o

I like the character list, especially liking my scene in the chapter before in where I go into the pit and IT BURNS! And basicly my guy getting hella hungry afterwords and eating an octorok. (what the hell?) I especially liked the part where Jack grabed the machine and started pumping out an ungodly amount of bullts. WHILE, going Rambo. Ah, and then the finale where Damien went insane and pressed the red button and caused a nuclear halocaust killing everyone in the world. All and all the story get's a 10 in my book. For AH THEY TOOK MY FRIGGIN KIDNEY!

Onigashimas DM-sama. ^_^

God, that imbecile Immortality won't get off my fucking comment pages. The little punk keeps saying some garbage about how I attacked him when he was the one that started shit with me.

Okay, thanks for the reminder DM. And sorry about forgetting, and yes. My memory fucking FAILS! EPICLY! XD

Huh, Ivan reviewed my story...And suprizingly he actually likes it...I'm in shock at the moment, one of my favorite authors actually likes my story. Even though i'm lazy and get little done. XD

CrazyIvan pwns. O_o;

I am very busy right now, normally I update or begin to work on chapters on weekends, during the week it's pretty much impossible.

Ok to avoid further confusion -> I'm a girl, "DarkMaiden" a Maiden is a formal expression that refers to young women lol ;)

I'll see if I can finish the chapter this weekend, It's about time to enter the second season. I know I delay a lot and I apologize for that, but yeah asking for updates constantly it's a little annoying.

@Tenkage

Some of us have lives dude, seriously. She'll(I believe she if i'm correct in assuming this) Update when she(?) updates. And sorry for not remembering your gender DM, my memory fucking fails on me alot.