rate_review Reviews

ò.ó tha's way extreme, y'know that?

I want to read more, evidently, and if you want to keep writing - on your own - someone will read it.

I found it a little hard to follow. It would be helpful if you insert stars or extra lines when you shift. You open and they are in bed, but then it shifts to either the parents or the phone call--basically all the shift make it extremely difficult to follow.

I think this could be really hot and a fun read, but you need to give the reader more clues about sudden changes in the scene.

That was nice. ^.^

Honestly, I don't think it 'needs' to be continued because it ends very nicely, there. If anything, I'd like it to be fleshed out, maybe see how it began etc.