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Wonderful. So in-character, so pretty and well-written, and I never would have thought that Fakir/Ahiru smut would be so... hot. So, simply wonderful. Just out of curiousity, what ages did you consider them while writing this??

jess249 - Thank you! I'm glad you thought so. ^^ And yes, this is really my second lemon fiction ever. ^^;;;

Princess Kushinada - Thanks a lot! :D I'm happy that you enjoyed it and I'm honored that you think it was well-written! Honestly, I don't think I could do the crude type of writing even if I tried. ^^; I just wouldn't be able to handle it. I have to have some sort of plot and make the characters appear as themselves or I'd be frustrated beyond belief and certainly not happy with the result. ^^; Thanks a lot for the feedback! I will continue to write Princess Tutu fics, since I have so much love for the series. ^_^

Astrobright68 - ...I admit, my jaw fell open when I saw your name on here in the replies. XD;;; I thought you were going to be horrified or something. XD;;; *paranoid* I did not think ANYONE would recognize me here, or the fic this had originally started as before it turned...over a new leaf. XD;;;

Thank you so very much! :D I'd hoped the writing wouldn't be too bad. XD;; I honestly hadn't written anything in quite awhile before I wrote this out, so I was worried my writing was suffering quite a bit. It's definitely my second. ^^; And I think I may try to write more, because it definitely is different writing, to say the least. XD And I hope to get to the point where it doesn't embarrass me as much. XD;;

You really thought they were in-character? :D That makes me soooo happy, 'cause that was honestly the biggest challenge I had when I started to change this and lengthen it extensively to a smut piece. ^^; (And I thought it would be darn near-impossible, considering the nature of mature writing XD;) Passionate and intense? Really? :D I thought the dialogue throughout might have disturbed that. XD; I did have fun with Ahiru's random blurt-outs and interruptions, though. XD ...You're definitely not the only one! I love foward/aggressive Fakir. XD (Which is probably rather ironic from me considering I draw him sappy and smiling a lot of the time, too. XD; ) ...I'm so glad you liked the pas de deux part! :D :D :D That was one of the things I really built off of since I still wanted to give aspects to it that had to do with PT in general and it just struck me as something Fakir might relate it to. XD (SRSLY!? XDDD Omg. Fakir's lines were definitely fun. XD I enjoy writing him a lot, even moreso since I picked him up in RPing. I'm used to writing from the girl's view a lot, you could say and always feel I can never pin down a good, aggressive male character. So Fakir is a challenge all in his own, but I really enjoy writing from his POV and his dialogue. ^^) I did refer to dancing a lot, because it just struck me as something that could be incorporated to the sensual aspect I was going for, you know? XD And something I could relate both characters to. Ahiru didn't strike me as knowing about sex, either. XD Even if it was an instinctual thing in base, she wouldn't recognize the sort of things that lead up to it from a human POV, or so I thought. XD; And Fakir doesn't strike me as someone who'd intentionally hurt someone he cares about for personal gain/pleasure. I can see him getting carried away at points, but he knows apologies are important.

You have an extremely good eye. I'm so dead serious. XD The "I love you" parts were added after I finished the fic, as was the line that was out of place (and the one before it). XD;; I have a habit of reading through my work after it's done many times and going back adding things where I think it might need something extra or something elaborated. And you definitely caught two of those. XD; I hope the other ones blended in somewhat, but if there was anything else you think stood out as awkward, let me know. XD I'm glad you pointed out the rough edges so I can work on blending the writing more without making those jarring things stick out. XD;;

Much love and huggles for all the feedback! Though I was worried at first that someone found this, I'm really glad to have your support! ^_^ It means a lot coming from a friend! I'm glad you thought it turned out that way! (Fakir is around 20-21, Ahiru 17-18 or so. ^^) Thanks again!

I really enjoyed that!! A lot!! That was very good and very well written. I thought given the circumstances they were in character. I love their pairing. Fakir is so awesome and Ahiru is just Ahiru. :)

I thought your writing was very good. Very mature and well thought out. Not crude like some people write sexual scenes. The only thing I noticed that needed some tweeking was the occasional typo.

I hope you will continue to write Princess Tutu fics or fics in general. Your work is great!