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Seriously, wtf are you doing as an ameture?!?! GET YOUR SHIT PUBLISHED GODAMMIT!!! I'd buy it, no question!

As soon as I started reading that second section...I was thinking: Please, please tell me this is who I think it is. And then...Indeed, it was Giovanni. I laughed my head off. That was just too perfect. Giovanni, the master of team Rocket, is the dark being that commands Kiako. LOL, I got way to enthused by thatXD. Ave Rocketto Dan!

other than that,great introduction to inter-pokemon communication.

that last review was meant for chap. 6, forgot to mention

Overall, this story is actually...incredible. The first thing that struck me was the way with words. This is actually the first fan-fic i've ever read, and i expected it to be vile trash(just from what i had heard about some of these things). Nevertheless, i was still curiuosXD
Tthe next thing that got to me was..hey, there is an actual plot, and a very good one. A plot that represents two people(word used loosely) trying to find their way to each other, then find their way to circumnavigate the represive qualities of society, all for their forbidden love. But running alongside(or even ahead) of this quest for happiness is a journey to halt the ends of the earth, whether it be brought about by corrupted ecologist type people, or the pure, brilliant evil of an organization bent on power..and having the means to acquire it. Then there is the inner struggle, a requisite of any good story, but magnified to a fantastic scale in this story. What made me really happy was the fact that the story Wasn't just centered around sex. I find myself thirsting for more of this story. moar and moarXD

Okay, read through all 16 chapters, and I must say, it was really well crafted. I can see the malice of the enemies you've borrowed and enhanced greatly from "bumbling fools," to pure dark hearts.

I like the connection you make with each character, thus far making each of them important to the story.

Of course, the "lemon" parts of the story are most definitely full of lust and "excitement," that one can't help but become turned on by the carefully chosen words to describe the sensation that the Psymakio and Slash are feeling in the process.

Kudos for putting in careful effort to not taint the story with too many common words that would easily cause the reader to lose interest in the whole story itself. I'm not sure how consistent you are with your updates, but I do encourage you to see to it, that you finish this fic, no matter what.

~silentwriter~

Despite the ominous words at the end of chapter 13 about tragic endings, I would really like it if the two of them ended up with a happy ending. An OC trainer I have has a Gardevior but they aren't connected like Slash and Psy. His...can't remember the word, is a magneton, and a powerful one. But anyway, a happy ending would be pleasing, in so many ways. It's so late right now I can't think of what to say other than your story is really good and tugs at my heartstrings. Your sexual scenes aren't vulgar either which gives you more happy point as vulgar sex pisses me off. So yea, keep it up, and I'm almost to the end of the first arc! Woot! Catch you later!

Okay, I've reached ch 15. And I desired to fight down the side of my brain that was getting distracted be all the steaminess. Here are some nitpick of your story that I think could use some work. My first nit pick is this, I think they keep saying they love each other too often. If they really share the bond that they do, and they really do love each other that much, they shouldn't have to keep saying it every time they can. I know their situation is perilous, but when you are bonded that closely, sending the feelings over the bond as often as they feel the need to say it, should be enough. I also dislike the fact of how you keep rubbing in our faces that Gardevoir is weak against dark types. All Slash has to do is save a lot of money for these TMs, and I'm pretty sure that good old Psy can use them. Focus Blast for darks/steels (both are weak to it), Shadow Ball for ghosts, reflect and light screen to up defenses, and just in case it doesn't learn them naturally, hypnosis and dream eater. Yes It doesn't have a counter for bugs, but bugs aren't immune to psychics, and Gardevoir's special attack stat is extremely high, higher than lugia's too I believe. And since this in real life, you aren't limited to four moves like in the games. So yea, that's my nitpick and rant, now to continue reading, I'll try not to seem so self absorbed next time, I'm not used to this site yet. Think of it this way, at least I don't ask where the other pokemon are, lol :P Catch you later.

good stuf, really good stuff, and since I read the whole thing, the added character development makes it much better. I was an idiot to skip around like I did before, never again!. I am wondering if I should go through all the one shots before continuing on to arc 2, I think I will, because there might be some much needed information and character development in them that I'll need. So untill then, Catch you later.

Awe, the last line of the fic for chapter made me feel so sad inside, my heart actually hurt. Well done. I shall continue reading, most definitely.

Awe, the last line of the fic for chapter made me feel so sad inside, my heart actually hurt. Well done. I shall continue reading, most definitely.

Incredible! That is all, thank you.