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June 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This in my view is the greatest AFF story EVER.
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March 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Anonymous---I wish there were women like that, too. Alas, such females are very rare...although they are out there somewhere.
Just not in my city. :-(
Shadow---Answered this in Arc 2, but yeah, finding someone so innocent and pure would be wonderful.
Dante Inferna---I love spending a day reading a long, long story...while Sinners isn't THAT long, not yet, it will be eventually. I'm sure that it'll break a million words eventually, and that's...kinda amazing for me, heh. Most of my writing, even the serious stuff, has never come anywhere close to such a number.
Just not in my city. :-(
Shadow---Answered this in Arc 2, but yeah, finding someone so innocent and pure would be wonderful.
Dante Inferna---I love spending a day reading a long, long story...while Sinners isn't THAT long, not yet, it will be eventually. I'm sure that it'll break a million words eventually, and that's...kinda amazing for me, heh. Most of my writing, even the serious stuff, has never come anywhere close to such a number.
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March 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You really do have an amazing story. What interests me isn't the sex, or the main plot, but the way you describe the bond and love between the two. Eeven as a very secretive person, I can understand how interesting a psychic bond could be, what with the feedback, and everything about your soul exposed. Plus, I'm not completely attracted to my own species(or any other, for that matter), so the idea of having a relationship with a creature similar, but different, more innocent and free of humanity's cancerous touch, like a beacon of light really, makes it sound even more wonderful.
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March 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've read it several times at this point, and it never gets old.
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March 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful story, wonderfully written, I enjoyed it very much.
I wish there were women in this world who were physically attractive AND wanted a relationship like this...A relationship not dependent upon sex or material possessions.
Fuck I'm depressed.
I wish there were women in this world who were physically attractive AND wanted a relationship like this...A relationship not dependent upon sex or material possessions.
Fuck I'm depressed.
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January 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Anonymoose---Heh, glad you like it. When I started this story, I knew it would be long---but it's currently at 244 pages at 12 point font, and it's maybe 10%-15% done! I never expected it to become so...epic...but then again, I lost control of the story pretty early on, heh.
Believe me, I wish I could make this story light-hearted...but alas, the condemnation of their relationship is one of the biggest plot points and themes of the story (even though it has not actually been touched on much, beyond that mugging in Clouded Future and dialogue). I also wish I could give this story a happy ending---unfortunately, I have already cemented a certain very harsh tragedy in my long-term outline...and it's likely that at least one lovable character will die by the story's end (they don't have to be introduced yet, though).
I agree that the Jirachi discussion chapter was kind of...too straightforward. I don't regret writing it (especially since the religion is going to become a huge focus later on), but I'd like it to be more...gradual. I might re-write it sometime (and maybe touch up some of the earlier chapters; the improvement in my writing is obvious when you compare the earlier chapters to the latest).
I think it'd be better if Gardevoir (then Kirlia) asked more questions about religion---mainly about faith in general. Pokemon have gods, or at least Lords, and maybe she doesn't understand how humans can worship that which they don't see (because Pokemon in nature actually see/are truly aware of many of their deities). She might also not grasp the idea of worshipping at all---while the Pokemon have deities, they are either passive, sleeping, or are protectors who require no worship.
Before the first major Jirachian incident occurs, I'll probably re-write the chapter. I'd like a clearer intro to the religion, and a more detailed and less blunt dialogue between Slash and Kirlia.
Believe me, I wish I could make this story light-hearted...but alas, the condemnation of their relationship is one of the biggest plot points and themes of the story (even though it has not actually been touched on much, beyond that mugging in Clouded Future and dialogue). I also wish I could give this story a happy ending---unfortunately, I have already cemented a certain very harsh tragedy in my long-term outline...and it's likely that at least one lovable character will die by the story's end (they don't have to be introduced yet, though).
I agree that the Jirachi discussion chapter was kind of...too straightforward. I don't regret writing it (especially since the religion is going to become a huge focus later on), but I'd like it to be more...gradual. I might re-write it sometime (and maybe touch up some of the earlier chapters; the improvement in my writing is obvious when you compare the earlier chapters to the latest).
I think it'd be better if Gardevoir (then Kirlia) asked more questions about religion---mainly about faith in general. Pokemon have gods, or at least Lords, and maybe she doesn't understand how humans can worship that which they don't see (because Pokemon in nature actually see/are truly aware of many of their deities). She might also not grasp the idea of worshipping at all---while the Pokemon have deities, they are either passive, sleeping, or are protectors who require no worship.
Before the first major Jirachian incident occurs, I'll probably re-write the chapter. I'd like a clearer intro to the religion, and a more detailed and less blunt dialogue between Slash and Kirlia.
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January 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
maybe you should have Gardevoir dress up in stuff like they have Jessica from Dragon Qest 8 in. Just a thought. Also you could have Gardevoir use belly drum. Just a thought. Good Day everybody.Oh and Slash I am really thankful that you steer away from the common words used in stories here. It makes a already great story better.
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January 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
He... lost!? Come on! Maybe have Gardevoir hang on long enough to retaliate and at least tie or something. The battle was epic and extremely well thought out, but it doesn't feel right that Slash lost (albeit just barely). Oh yeah, main problem with this chapter? No smut.
Otherwise, it was an enthralling read, as usual.
Otherwise, it was an enthralling read, as usual.
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January 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've gotten started on the yuri oh and one last thing here are a few more attacks
Helping Hand
Attract
And lastly Submission
With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
Helping Hand
Attract
And lastly Submission
With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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January 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Imasuky Lomae---Flannery is fucking awesome. I'll probably have Gardevoir getting a big jealous of her when she's around, so I can have some cuteness there. Gardie's adorable when she gets jealous, heh.
Sabrina (and Lucy the Pike Queen) were both pretty dominatrix-y, heh...
DizzyRye---I know that I read a Flannery/Typhlosion fic at some point, ha. If I oneshot it, it'll probably be Slash/Gardevoir/Flannery, Gardevoir/Flannery (and Slash watches, kukuku), or Slash/Gardevoir and Flannery/some-Pokemon-of-hers. Not sure.
Imasuky Lomae---I wonder if I should do a Gardevoir-is-in-heat story. That's kind of a fanfiction staple...and I could put it in Sinners proper or a oneshot.
You know, Gardevoir is kind of odd. Is she a mammal? She has breasts. But in the games, she lays eggs. Hm. It doesn't matter in Sinners (not yet, at least, don't have anything planned), but it makes ya wonder.
RoboRed---Prepare to eat your laptop, then. The oneshot will be sometime after I introduce her in the main story, which should be in the next few chapters. She won't be as big of a character as Watson, but she'll be important enough. And hot enough. Heh.
Imasuky Lomae---I still laugh whenever I see D/P used for the fourth generation. Gives me dirty fanfic ideas.
RoboRed---lol see what I mean
GenoLiger---You know, since I've established that Gardevoir can remove her clothing, I could make her dress up later. It doesn't have to even be for sexy purposes (although she will always be sexy)...she could just wear jeans or another dress or something to see Slash's reaction.
Or a bikini...
Anon---The problem with poor Gardevoir is that, while she can deliver a hell of a hit, she can't always take a hit. And when it comes to an opponent as tough as Rotom (and, while not specified, a Rotom that has a significant level advantage over her), it's pretty much one-hit KO with a ghost attack.
She did good (well), though, so Slash is oodles proud of her. There may be smut soon...not sure exactly when, but they'll be going on the road soon, so...hm...
Imasuky Lomae---Warning: Submission may cause powerful recoil. In your pants.
Alright, everyone, announcement: as you can see, I have gone ahead and split Sinners up into multiple stories; there will be one for each Arc. The review page here just got too gigantic to be practical, and while I'll still respond to any reviews made her, I ask that all reviews dealing with stuff beyond chapter 17 be made on "Sinners: Arc 2". HAHA!
Sabrina (and Lucy the Pike Queen) were both pretty dominatrix-y, heh...
DizzyRye---I know that I read a Flannery/Typhlosion fic at some point, ha. If I oneshot it, it'll probably be Slash/Gardevoir/Flannery, Gardevoir/Flannery (and Slash watches, kukuku), or Slash/Gardevoir and Flannery/some-Pokemon-of-hers. Not sure.
Imasuky Lomae---I wonder if I should do a Gardevoir-is-in-heat story. That's kind of a fanfiction staple...and I could put it in Sinners proper or a oneshot.
You know, Gardevoir is kind of odd. Is she a mammal? She has breasts. But in the games, she lays eggs. Hm. It doesn't matter in Sinners (not yet, at least, don't have anything planned), but it makes ya wonder.
RoboRed---Prepare to eat your laptop, then. The oneshot will be sometime after I introduce her in the main story, which should be in the next few chapters. She won't be as big of a character as Watson, but she'll be important enough. And hot enough. Heh.
Imasuky Lomae---I still laugh whenever I see D/P used for the fourth generation. Gives me dirty fanfic ideas.
RoboRed---lol see what I mean
GenoLiger---You know, since I've established that Gardevoir can remove her clothing, I could make her dress up later. It doesn't have to even be for sexy purposes (although she will always be sexy)...she could just wear jeans or another dress or something to see Slash's reaction.
Or a bikini...
Anon---The problem with poor Gardevoir is that, while she can deliver a hell of a hit, she can't always take a hit. And when it comes to an opponent as tough as Rotom (and, while not specified, a Rotom that has a significant level advantage over her), it's pretty much one-hit KO with a ghost attack.
She did good (well), though, so Slash is oodles proud of her. There may be smut soon...not sure exactly when, but they'll be going on the road soon, so...hm...
Imasuky Lomae---Warning: Submission may cause powerful recoil. In your pants.
Alright, everyone, announcement: as you can see, I have gone ahead and split Sinners up into multiple stories; there will be one for each Arc. The review page here just got too gigantic to be practical, and while I'll still respond to any reviews made her, I ask that all reviews dealing with stuff beyond chapter 17 be made on "Sinners: Arc 2". HAHA!