rate_review Reviews

I'm glad you hold such a high opinion of this story. ^_^

I know, I don't like writing sad chapters anymore than y'all like reading them, but they are necessary in the long run. And things will get worse...darker...in the future. But this is not a darkfic; there will be many moments of happiness in the future.

I can't honestly say if this story is going to have a happy ending, though. A lot of the plot is in my head, but the ending is not included amongst those ideas. Once I get farther in the story, it'll start writing itself, and I'll be more of a channel for my muse than a writer, heh.

Also, to all readers...chapter 12 has been pre-planned and is in first-stage writing right now. :-P
I'm surprised I got the plot in my head so quickly after 11, but...it just fell together beautifully, all the plot, all the characters, everything. And I promise you all...you will not be disappointed. ^_^

You know I was kind of surprised while reading chapter six until I realized it was a dream sequence. I thought, 'What? He's writing the smut already?' Heh. To tell you the truth, I like this story very much. The development of the characters is spot on, and I suppose I feel a sort of kinship with the protagonist. Your writing style is really great too. I mean in that Birds and Bees chapter (chapter five, wasn't it?) you laid out Slash's logic and reasons for being an atheist so well that for a moment I thought he was me. :P I've spent hours upon hours trying to explain to people why I choose not to believe, and you explain it with a single chapter, and in a work of fiction, no less! It's truly amazing stuff.

On a slightly different note, I have this idea floating around in my head that you may want to use. It's vague, but an idea nonetheless. See when I was thinking about Psychic types, I started thinking about the mind, and thinking about the mind makes me think of Zen monks, so basically my idea is this: One scene or perhaps a chapter could involve Slash meeting a Zen-like old man/monk, either on a mountain, or perhaps inside that ghost-tower place (Sorry, I can't remember what it's called, it's sort of east of the center of the region). Perhaps Slash comes to think of the old man as a grandfather or a mentor, and then, for some reason I haven't thought up yet, Mr. Red-eye man murders the old man. Sorry that it's not very well worked out, but that's the extent of my idea for now.

Anyway, your work is developing very nicely and I look forward to your next update.

Heh, I had to stop myself from making the dream go any farther than it did. There won't be any Slash/Kirlia action...not because they wouldn't do it, but because 1) they're not anywhere near that stage of their relationship...2) certain...logistical issues in terms of physical constraints...and 3) she won't be a Kirlia for much longer. :3

The chapter involving religion is only an introduction to Jirachism and Slash's own faith (or lack thereof). It will eventually become quite the pivotal issue...particularly when he and Kirlia get 'found out'.

As for the old-man-on-the-mountain idea...notice that I've already set up a couple older, more experienced males in this story? I won't give anything away other than saying that one or both of them will become significantly influential for Slash, heh.

OH GOD I WANT TO SAY MORE ABOUT THE PLOT BUT I DON'T WANNA SPOIL ANYTHING GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH

:pulls out hair:

CrazyIvan---Well, I figure that if our world uses terms like gay, homo, queer, and fag as insults...being the result of religious and 'moral' bigotry...the Jirachian-dominated culture would use terms like Pokemon-fucker and such, as, to them, it's the equivalent. Bastard Jirachians...

Black Whole---I so totally did not want to end this chapter on a depressing note, but my muse...she always has her gun to my head. I've had the idea of Slash and Kirlia getting harassed like this, and Kirlia's reaction of vowing to keep her feelings a secret for Slash's sake, in my head for a long time...and while I originally wanted to end this chapter with the glance at Team Aqua, my muse insisted I do that scene now.

Kinda depressing...especially when I have to tell everyone that things are going to get worse...but don't worry. Those two kids got bright heads on them...I can't promise they'll live happily ever after, but I can promise that they'll do the best they can.

Luminous Dark---When I read over chapter 11 and was giving it a basic proofread, I was surprised that this one was so good. I wrote the last 4500-odd words in one sitting (muse was in fucking overdrive), so I thought it'd be kinda shoddy...but nope, it turned out pretty swell. :-D

I can't say when the next chapter will be...I haven't started putting together the detailed plots for the next couple of them yet...but hopefully it won't be TOO long. ^_^

I hate you now i actually felt like a person at the end it made me want to cry the next chapter had better be a lot happier thaan this one.

With Love, Imasuky Lomae

I hate myself for the ending the chapter like that. :-(

The next chapter will...hopefully...be less sad than this one.

*whines* Aww, come on, I was really gettting into the story! Why, oh why, do the chapters have to end??

Because my hands start getting tired after 6500 or so words. :-P

Plus that's as far as I got with the detailed plot. I don't write with outlines, heh.

Glad you liked the chapter and the pic, heh. :3

If I could draw well, I'd be making some illustrations of the dream sequence. ;-)

Well that was certainly interesting.
Pokefucker, as a common insult? Like motherfucker? Huh, fair enough I'll buy it.
Nice little training notes, and training, more mysterious plots unfolding, combat palming and the like.

So, untill next time, semper phi, carry on...