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January 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Okay, like I said, I know almost nothing about D/P. So if Bertha's ugly (sounds like it), then forget her.
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Anonymoose---I think I could put such a scene in the main Sinners story at some point. After all, if people can tolerate a human and Pokemon going to bed together, they should be mature enough to handle some adventure there, too, lol. Besides, it would be loving and romantic, not kinky---the closest to BDSM that those two will get is maybe a little psychic-bondage, not whips or hurting or anything ouch like that.
derp---I consider S+M to be entirely different from D/s. And their relationship has scarcely begun...we've yet to see how their relationship will develop (although, like I said above, I can confidently say that they will never progress to S+M). For them it's more of an interaction of their instincts, nothing kinky.
GenoLiger---S+M (SM, S&M, etc) is sado-masochism, which I admittedly know little about. D/s is dominance/submission. PWP stands for porn without plot.
Reo690---Added you.
BlackWhole---Yeah, I've been kind of shut-in for the past few days, both because my internets died and because I was writing. But now I'm all good, and I'll be sending out another plotmail in the near future.
DizzyRye---Added.
THE NEXT UPDATE IS SOONER THAN YOU THINK, KEKEKE
Imasuky Lomae/DizzyRye---That bitch be trippin' all up in yo grill, Gardevoir, use a Flash attack!
Chapter 19, which ended up being CRAZY long (at least for my standards), is now uploaded. HAHA, up.
If anyone who is supposed to be on the mailing list does not get a message from me informing them of the update, e-mail me at slashfirestorm@inbox.com with some really eye-catching subject (example: HAY YOU MOTHERFUCKER) and I'll get you taken care of. My spam settings are high, and I get a lot of junk, so sometimes I miss legit messages.
derp---I consider S+M to be entirely different from D/s. And their relationship has scarcely begun...we've yet to see how their relationship will develop (although, like I said above, I can confidently say that they will never progress to S+M). For them it's more of an interaction of their instincts, nothing kinky.
GenoLiger---S+M (SM, S&M, etc) is sado-masochism, which I admittedly know little about. D/s is dominance/submission. PWP stands for porn without plot.
Reo690---Added you.
BlackWhole---Yeah, I've been kind of shut-in for the past few days, both because my internets died and because I was writing. But now I'm all good, and I'll be sending out another plotmail in the near future.
DizzyRye---Added.
THE NEXT UPDATE IS SOONER THAN YOU THINK, KEKEKE
Imasuky Lomae/DizzyRye---That bitch be trippin' all up in yo grill, Gardevoir, use a Flash attack!
Chapter 19, which ended up being CRAZY long (at least for my standards), is now uploaded. HAHA, up.
If anyone who is supposed to be on the mailing list does not get a message from me informing them of the update, e-mail me at slashfirestorm@inbox.com with some really eye-catching subject (example: HAY YOU MOTHERFUCKER) and I'll get you taken care of. My spam settings are high, and I get a lot of junk, so sometimes I miss legit messages.
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Kinky can too be intense, loving and romantic between close lovers ;) Especially the Aftercare part.
I enjoyed the fight. Eventhough Slash's team is very weak (if they evolve that'll be a whole other matter though). At first judging from his name and personality though he's be a Fire-type trainer.
I enjoyed the fight. Eventhough Slash's team is very weak (if they evolve that'll be a whole other matter though). At first judging from his name and personality though he's be a Fire-type trainer.
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Holy fucking shitty bloody ass god damn hell that was so fucking awesome mud sport never thought of that Rotom kick ass all the stuff about Kiako too fucking cool and the whole Rayquaza thing loved that I hope the next chapter is soon even if it’s no where near as long it will be so cool and the part about Watson’s wife that made me cry a bit oh and I can’t believe Giovanni is the reason Kiako went trough all that stuff I mean just wow that’s what the report was about I’m out of thing to say for now so I’ll just wait for the next chapter.
With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well this is probably my last review in the review page , I won't read the reviews anymore since I don't want any spoilers... If you want to answer this review , please send me an e-mail Slash.
This chapter...was much better than I thought that it would be. You underrate your "battle-writting" skills , they are quite good. I feared that you may create new attacks or something like that ( and to be honest , I hate that. I like that the battles stay true to the games , with some of the action of the anime, like moving , dodging and stuff. Making completely new BS moves is quite frustating for me), but it seems that I underestimated you as well.
Slash's plan was quite good and the battle was full of action and adrenaline.I really liked it.
This made me remember that YOU are you , heh ^^. And I know your potential...so I will never doubt you again. As always , keep rocking , Slash ^^
(oh btw , my strategy would've been like this: Gardevoir and Electrike first , electrike would attract eletrics attacks , protecting Gardevoir from most harm, and also baiting Manetric out of melee range. Gardevoir would attack form afar , and she would probably win against Lanturn , since confusion can redirect lanturn's projectiles. Plus , I would've taught her double team , for addicional dodging capabilities, and maybe for more naughty purposes ^^ Graveler as my last pokemon , I would keep him till lanturn was out. Corphish's Mud sport really got me there ^^)
This chapter...was much better than I thought that it would be. You underrate your "battle-writting" skills , they are quite good. I feared that you may create new attacks or something like that ( and to be honest , I hate that. I like that the battles stay true to the games , with some of the action of the anime, like moving , dodging and stuff. Making completely new BS moves is quite frustating for me), but it seems that I underestimated you as well.
Slash's plan was quite good and the battle was full of action and adrenaline.I really liked it.
This made me remember that YOU are you , heh ^^. And I know your potential...so I will never doubt you again. As always , keep rocking , Slash ^^
(oh btw , my strategy would've been like this: Gardevoir and Electrike first , electrike would attract eletrics attacks , protecting Gardevoir from most harm, and also baiting Manetric out of melee range. Gardevoir would attack form afar , and she would probably win against Lanturn , since confusion can redirect lanturn's projectiles. Plus , I would've taught her double team , for addicional dodging capabilities, and maybe for more naughty purposes ^^ Graveler as my last pokemon , I would keep him till lanturn was out. Corphish's Mud sport really got me there ^^)
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Can't say much more than has already been said, amazing chapter, Slash! That was an impressive bit of writing you did there, I really enjoyed the battle! I can't wait for the next chapter, and that whole part with Kiako and..well, don't want to spoil it, but damn, he somehow survived that!? I'm all excited for the next chapter now! Goodluck with writing it!
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*sigh*
Slash, you're really making the rest of us feel like schmucks. (At least me, at any rate.)
Once again, you write a chapter that was simply amazing. The flow seemed perfect, characterization was spot on, the battle was well-written and believable. Ego-stroking aside, there were only two small (VERY small) things that marred an otherwise perfect chapter. And that's more my opinion than anything. Your choice of words, for two different phrases. 'On the prod' for Kiako being one, and 'say true' being the other. Just phrases I hadn't really ever encountered before, so hardly something to complain about. Aside from that, I don't think there's anything even a little wrong with your update. Hope the next one comes soon, and keep on keepin' on!
Slash, you're really making the rest of us feel like schmucks. (At least me, at any rate.)
Once again, you write a chapter that was simply amazing. The flow seemed perfect, characterization was spot on, the battle was well-written and believable. Ego-stroking aside, there were only two small (VERY small) things that marred an otherwise perfect chapter. And that's more my opinion than anything. Your choice of words, for two different phrases. 'On the prod' for Kiako being one, and 'say true' being the other. Just phrases I hadn't really ever encountered before, so hardly something to complain about. Aside from that, I don't think there's anything even a little wrong with your update. Hope the next one comes soon, and keep on keepin' on!
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow! This story is sweet!! I just simply love it!! I certanly cannot WAIT for the next chapter! Please update soon.
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
derp---Yeah, I don't think I could ever write something S/M-like. I'm not very good at equating violence/pain with love, and while I know some authors could make it co-exist with romance, I'm not knowledgeable enough of SM to write it well and not skilled enough of a writer to join the two, lol. My favorite fanfiction "Forbidden" has some kinky stuff in it (nothing extreme though, light bondage and spanking and such), and it manages very well...but I am not on that author's caliber.
I hope that story gets updated soon, incidentally...
And yes, Slash's team is comparatively weak right now...but they grow stronger every day, and will become a mighty force in time.
Imasuky Lomae---Mud Sport is swell. I never use it in the games, and I actually don't think Corphish can really learn it, anyway, but Sinners is allowed to swing a bit with moves and such, heh.
Kiako does not know about his own origin (other than his disturbing dream-memories), but I think Giovanni might be wrong about him not caring even if he did know. I think Red-Eyes might be pretty pissed. We'll have to see how that develops later, huh? Heh.
Black Whole---It is a long one, ain't it? When I first 'finished' it, it was about 15000 words. But then, when my internet died, I did a little more work on it and beefed it up. I have no idea if there will ever be any other chapters as massive as this one was...at least not for a while. But it was fun to write.
Rotom was also swell to add. A Ghost/Electric type sounds so fucking cool, and I always envisioned Watson having some crazy-powerful little bugger with him wherever he goes, hiding in his watch or something. Apparently there is some debate over whether or not Rotom is a legendary Pokemon or not, so I compromised and made it the "spark of the thunder god", which could mean whatever the reader wants, heh.
When it comes to spoilers, it's okay to talk about what happens in the chapters---that's what reviewing is for---but at this point, I am more willing to talk about things that have not yet been definitively revealed in the story yet...theories about Kiako (many of which have now been resolved, although believe me when I say that I've barely scratched the surface of his story) and the King and etc. I probably won't outright confirm any guesses, but I'll discuss them, so anyone reading this page should be prepared for that.
FluffyLover---Read above, heh.
I don't think I'm bad at writing battles, but not spectacularly good. I prefer writing character interaction and lemon stuff (Garderotica!) over action, but sometimes a story needs a good ass-kicking contest, heh. I wouldn't do anything like make up new attacks, although I am kind of laissez-faire in regards to what moves a Pokemon can learn (Gardevoir's Psywave, for example) and all. I try to stay faithful to the game, but while the game is much better than the anime...it can still be limiting sometimes, lol.
Araquiell---Glad you liked it. And I think I can say that Kiako survived without it being much of a spoiler---I may not have much control over this story, but I wouldn't kill off my antagonist before he got a chance to do a lot of antagonizing---although he might be injured, and is certainly very, very ticked off. The specifics of what happened to him will likely be in the next chapter.
DizzyRye---Sometimes I make myself feel like a schmuck. When I compared some of my old writing to Sinners, I often get the "damn, this sucks" feeling, heh. One good thing about this story is that it's raised my writing quality as I go, and other future fics I write will benefit from the experience of doing Sinners.
I've been told that I "write like a cowboy"---disobeying perfect grammar to make lines have more passion, using antiquated and 'hardass' terms like "being on the prod for someone", "gunna", etc---but it's actually my Stephen King influence talking and not Clint Eastwood, lol. Some terms---namely the three types of passive psychic power: prog, pre-cog, and post-cog---will be explained in detail, although most other obscure terms should be understandable in context.
Not sure when chapter 20 will be completed. I planned out 19-21 while I was waiting for a new computer, but I ended up changing 19 so much (including adding entirely unexpected plot points, like Giovanni's thoughts about Kiako) that 20 will be much different than what I originally outlined. But I'd like to say that 20 will happen in January.
lol, I'd like to say that, but...you know me.
PokemonFanatic---Glad you enjoyed, and more goodness is on the way.
And I win review 700. Take that, everyone. hahahahaha
I hope that story gets updated soon, incidentally...
And yes, Slash's team is comparatively weak right now...but they grow stronger every day, and will become a mighty force in time.
Imasuky Lomae---Mud Sport is swell. I never use it in the games, and I actually don't think Corphish can really learn it, anyway, but Sinners is allowed to swing a bit with moves and such, heh.
Kiako does not know about his own origin (other than his disturbing dream-memories), but I think Giovanni might be wrong about him not caring even if he did know. I think Red-Eyes might be pretty pissed. We'll have to see how that develops later, huh? Heh.
Black Whole---It is a long one, ain't it? When I first 'finished' it, it was about 15000 words. But then, when my internet died, I did a little more work on it and beefed it up. I have no idea if there will ever be any other chapters as massive as this one was...at least not for a while. But it was fun to write.
Rotom was also swell to add. A Ghost/Electric type sounds so fucking cool, and I always envisioned Watson having some crazy-powerful little bugger with him wherever he goes, hiding in his watch or something. Apparently there is some debate over whether or not Rotom is a legendary Pokemon or not, so I compromised and made it the "spark of the thunder god", which could mean whatever the reader wants, heh.
When it comes to spoilers, it's okay to talk about what happens in the chapters---that's what reviewing is for---but at this point, I am more willing to talk about things that have not yet been definitively revealed in the story yet...theories about Kiako (many of which have now been resolved, although believe me when I say that I've barely scratched the surface of his story) and the King and etc. I probably won't outright confirm any guesses, but I'll discuss them, so anyone reading this page should be prepared for that.
FluffyLover---Read above, heh.
I don't think I'm bad at writing battles, but not spectacularly good. I prefer writing character interaction and lemon stuff (Garderotica!) over action, but sometimes a story needs a good ass-kicking contest, heh. I wouldn't do anything like make up new attacks, although I am kind of laissez-faire in regards to what moves a Pokemon can learn (Gardevoir's Psywave, for example) and all. I try to stay faithful to the game, but while the game is much better than the anime...it can still be limiting sometimes, lol.
Araquiell---Glad you liked it. And I think I can say that Kiako survived without it being much of a spoiler---I may not have much control over this story, but I wouldn't kill off my antagonist before he got a chance to do a lot of antagonizing---although he might be injured, and is certainly very, very ticked off. The specifics of what happened to him will likely be in the next chapter.
DizzyRye---Sometimes I make myself feel like a schmuck. When I compared some of my old writing to Sinners, I often get the "damn, this sucks" feeling, heh. One good thing about this story is that it's raised my writing quality as I go, and other future fics I write will benefit from the experience of doing Sinners.
I've been told that I "write like a cowboy"---disobeying perfect grammar to make lines have more passion, using antiquated and 'hardass' terms like "being on the prod for someone", "gunna", etc---but it's actually my Stephen King influence talking and not Clint Eastwood, lol. Some terms---namely the three types of passive psychic power: prog, pre-cog, and post-cog---will be explained in detail, although most other obscure terms should be understandable in context.
Not sure when chapter 20 will be completed. I planned out 19-21 while I was waiting for a new computer, but I ended up changing 19 so much (including adding entirely unexpected plot points, like Giovanni's thoughts about Kiako) that 20 will be much different than what I originally outlined. But I'd like to say that 20 will happen in January.
lol, I'd like to say that, but...you know me.
PokemonFanatic---Glad you enjoyed, and more goodness is on the way.
And I win review 700. Take that, everyone. hahahahaha
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh snap, he's right! 0_o
Anyways, great job, Slash. The battle scene went WAY beyond what I was expecting. I never expected it to go more along the lines of something like the trust battles in Battle Frontier in Emerald version. One thing I didn't like is that you made Wattson's poke'mon one from Diamond/Pearl, so I had to go and look it up (still don't have a DS or either version, dammit).
So now I'm currently left wondering several things. Things that include "what will happen to Kiako now?", and (on a pretty unrelated note) what's with all the special titles given after the names of people like Wattson, Bruno, and Koga? If Wattson is the Master of Thunder, then what does that make Lt. Surge?
On an even more unrelated and rather creepy note, I was listening to the Halo 3 soundtrack I just bought while I was reading the chapter, and all the songs pretty much matched up perfectly. 0_o
Anyways, great job, Slash. The battle scene went WAY beyond what I was expecting. I never expected it to go more along the lines of something like the trust battles in Battle Frontier in Emerald version. One thing I didn't like is that you made Wattson's poke'mon one from Diamond/Pearl, so I had to go and look it up (still don't have a DS or either version, dammit).
So now I'm currently left wondering several things. Things that include "what will happen to Kiako now?", and (on a pretty unrelated note) what's with all the special titles given after the names of people like Wattson, Bruno, and Koga? If Wattson is the Master of Thunder, then what does that make Lt. Surge?
On an even more unrelated and rather creepy note, I was listening to the Halo 3 soundtrack I just bought while I was reading the chapter, and all the songs pretty much matched up perfectly. 0_o