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I'm glad you've enjoyed it so far, hehe.

Nothing wrong with thinking Gardevoir is a sexy sexy Pokemon. Hell, this entire story, as serious as it's going to end up being, started with me browsing Gardevoir hentai at three in the morning. XD

And yes, Team Rocket...at least a Team Rocket that has purged all of its idiocy...does indeed rule, heh.

Really good....one of the best stories on this site. Please Continue.

I have my machine back (temporarily), but it's worse than ever, restarting like mad. However, I'll try and respond to these past few reviews. ^_^

Anon---Glad you enjoyed, I shall update as soon as possible. I'm currently stuck writing my stories in Notepad (which is what I usually do, sure, but I usually spellcheck and the like in Microsoft Word, which is one of the programs that causes my machine to fuck up, bah). We'll see what I can do with this dumb thing...hopefully I'll be able to get it brought in to a REAL professional and be repaired soon.

Fluffylover---Yes, as the title suggests, and the story hints at, the love between a human and a Pokemon is strictly forbidden (hell, there are people in the real world who would find this story sick despite its being fiction). Needless to say, once the love does begin, and becomes discovered, there will be major consequences...as well as a few major surprises which I want to hint at soooo bad but that would defeat the purpose of it being a surprise, huh? XD

Very glad you enjoyed, and the more fans, the better! :-D

Sonic Tornado---Very glad you like it, and it will be continued, don't you worry. It may take a while (my style of fast-updating is going to be on hold until my machine is fixed...at least my arm is all better now and I can type normally again), but it WILL happen. Slash never abandons his stories. Hell, if you see a fic of mine that's YEARS old, you might just wanna keep an eye on it, never know if I'll get the itch to work on it. ^_^

Glad you're all enjoying, and I promise, as soon as I can manage, this will be updated. This is my top priority at the moment...no other fic, no flash comes ahead of this. Not to mention my computer's so sucky at the moment that text is pretty much the only thing I CAN do...sdfgsfd.

Slash shall return. :-D

Nice fic Slash! I'm really liking the story so far , specially because I love fluffyness. This ralts/kirlia is very charismatic and I hope for the best for both of them ...even though you gave hints that they will probably be hunted because of their forbidden love . It would be nice if you could set up a surprise there : your fic is very good , but a nicely placed surprise would make it excellent.
Keep up the good job , Slash Firestorm. You got a new fan ;)

wow... i never thaught i could get into i story like this, but so far its really good. cant wait for the next chapter.

Sorry to hear about your arm hopr it gets better soon because I'm really looking forward to the next update no matter how long it takes

With Love; Imasuky Lomae

Thanks...I'll also probably be without a computer for a week or so, while I get the ol' girl fixed, so bleh. I'll probably finish writing the next chapter longhand and then type it up when I get my machine back.

Alright, I checked this out at the behest of a good friend of mine. After reading these seven chapters, I have to say that I am quite impressed. You have a very good writing style, the format is good, negligible spelling/grammatical errors, and you write with a good amount of detail. The chapters are just long enough to keep you hooked, waiting for the next one, it's not often I find a story like this, so I must give you kudos on that.

Now, onto the second part of the review, the story and characters...
Your main character is a well rounded person, he has a good amount of tactical knowlege, and a sense of the warrior's spirit. He is not overly egotistic, nor is he shy or reserved. He really cares about his pokemon, and it seems he would lay down his own life for theirs.
As for the pokemon, having Growlithe (One of my favorite pokemon, if not my favorite) already gets you a free Porsche, however, I assume he is not native of Hoenn, seeing as there are no Growlithes there. Growlith is indeed a well rounded pokemon, and I like how you displayed him as fierce, yet knowlegable, as well as having him guard the camp site, brillaint bit of detail there. It would be interesting to see how the use of the Growlithe plays out further into the story.

The corphish and geodude, well, they both appear to be good pokemon, you gave both a bit of background detail, which is good, as well as giving insight into their thoughts in battle.

Now for Ralts/Kirlia. As a Ralts, you made it very similar to a young child, displaying fear as well as curiosity. That was a good touch. After evolution, it retained its curiosity, but reduced its fear quite a bit. The bond with the trainer leads to great insight, as well as akward situations. Having her interested in the concept of love is a very interesting idea, seeing as how humans don't even fully understand the emotion, it will be interesting to see how that plays out. When you come to the sexual intercourse, I would guess it would first start out of curiosity, and evolve into a tender loving relationship. I look foreward to how that plays out as well.

Now, onto the antagonists.
You have made the teams much more ruthless, as a criminal organization should be.
Team Aqua appears to be more ruthless and its leader more prone to discipline and punishment, where as Team Magma appears to be based more on comradeship, the leader more prone to fairness and encouragement.
Team Rocket, lead by Giovanni, you have displayed him as the best kind of leader, someone that knows how an army should be opperated, you can not just apply punishment, nor reward everything, gaining the trust and support of your men is one of the great things a commander can do to make their forces more effective. But you can not just look the other way at failure, a certain amount of punishment and discipline needs to be enforced to ensure that your men keep in line and try their best to acomplish a mission.
This demon man is very very mysterious, as well as intrigueing. He is clearly not human, and he has a powerful team of pokemon at his desposal, I am not aware of how he thinks of and treats his pokemon, but being as brutal as he seems, who knows. As he talked to Dock, it became apparent he was capable of decent behaviour, something critical to blend in to society if you are a forgien agent. I am interested in how he will play a role in this story.

Now, although you adressed the teams, what many people never do, is adress the police and/or government, clearly, with the increased violence of the teams, the government would surely step up measures against them.
I used that as my main point in my story, Pokemon: The Criminal Conspiracy. However, seeing as it is your fic, it is up to you.

The addition of Religion is something I have not seen before. It opens up many new possibilities. You gave great insight into the flaws of religion, the prejudice and blind faith. As well as bringing into play taboos they consider like homosexuality and beastiality. This may prove an obstecal for the protagonist, but only time will tell.

That is about it. I very rarely take the time to leave such a detailed review. That being because their is very rarely any story worth it. You sir, have made this story worth it, and I will continue to moniter your progress.
I'm glad I looked into this, it was well worth my time, and should continue to be.

For now, I leave you to your work, but remember, I will be watching. Untill next time, this is CrazyIvan signing off, semper phi, carry on...

Dayum, that's a long review. :-D

I'm glad you enjoyed so far, and I assure you, the storylines for ALL the characters and Pokemon are just getting started. These first chapters merely make up the introduction to the primary storyline, so expect a lot more to come.

I'll hint that Kiako, the Man With Demon Eyes, may seem evil, yes...but remember that true good and true evil in the world are both very rare; most things exist in varying shades of gray.

Now for a bit of good news/bad news for my readers...good news, I'll finally be getting my computer fixed (having it brought in tomorrow!), so I can write without having my computer restart and lose my chapters halfway through typing them up. Bad news...it might take a while. :-(

I thank you all for your patience, and I will be back. Love ya all!

---Slash

Great man!! Hope your newgrounds endeavors come along speedily so you can continue! Has slash taken the time to pick up a water type pokemon yet?

Anyway its not bad so far, way to leave on a cliffhanger..