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YAY! Oh this chapter was awesome! I love how Wolfram took out that jerk! Sweet Justice! I'm kind of worried about what's going to happen to him since the king knows but I think he'll make it out alright in the end. He has to for Yuuri.

Thank you so much for telling me that Amae is going to be with someone that can treat him right. It really makes me feel better for the poor hottie. (btw - I am drawing a picture of him - I will send it to you when I am done. ^_^ )

He got that Damn right! Wolf is too inteligent for his own good, Ha kohar got what he deserved, Wolfram is a strategist al right that was an amezing plan, even if the king noticed that he had intended to happen just at it did it was to late the harm has already been done. Hurray for Wolf and getting rid of the first fucker, next on the list is faraya and it wont be as quick as kohar's but just as an elaberate skim as the first one, and just like kohar faraya will see his own death in the beautiful green orbs. I'm just slightly worried whar kind of precaution will the king take towards wolfram, now that he has and an idea of how dangerous the blond is. Even if kohar is dead wolf life is not about to get any easier is it? faraya will have yasai to watch him like a hawk, he will have to be more cautios, i'm also curious as to what will be amaes take on kohar's death at wolf hand however indirectly as it was; that alone will make their chances to of escape more dificult. I like the way wolf put one & one together, adding the fuzzy facts in his disfunctional head to figure out that he had been screwed and that it was the tea that made him sick. Glad to know that I was able to amuse you with my some what colorful way of frasecing my thoughts. Yes you did remembered the anime correctly, Yes the doc is hot, and the green eyed boy is basically useless, the violet eye man is always wallowing in his own missery, & thats basically what one finds in the fics of said anime, thats why I mentioned watary he is the happy-go-lucky-i'm-on-crack scientis with the blonde long hair and the tiny funny owl, just like wolf he is basically understimated, when his intelect alone make him quite dangerous oponent, and besides he make a lovely hot couple with the shadow master, the suit with the blue eyes. you can't blame a fic junky for trying to get his fixt! as for bayko he is the huge white tiger the purple eye guy uses to fight, he has a human form wich i find to be most endearing that come out in the manga wich i asure you is better and more complex than the anime. I saw mirrage of blaze i liked it but is way too confusing i still don't get it, what i really did like and found kind of fnny was that i-hate-you-i-love-you relationship of the leading roles. Any way forgive the rambling and going back to the present story, I had accesed the site to review again to ask you some thing when i came across the new chap, so here is my new inquisiteve, How much is the concentration of demon tribesman in faraya? I ask this because i was wondering how old is he; if the servants were once concubines, is the guy really that old and has enough mayuzoku blood in him to slow his aging conciderably, or is a concubines durability that short? just something i was wondering, keep it up with the up dateing in the posible messures, i can never get enough of this and yes you have to show just how much of a slut can pretty wolfram be. ~_^ ja ne!

Hi
I like your fanfic, its really great. But what i miss here is that you hardly mention yuuri, for example as wolfram has awaked and find out what happens he didn`t thought of yuuri a lot and he wasn`t so much worry about the rape as i have thought he would be! Or is it because he dosen`t remember much of it? (Surely the last one)
I hope you update your next chapter soon! Recently you update them really quickly!!!!
I am really excited of the next chap!

Whoa! How do you manage to make Wolfram sound so sexy even while he's being taken advantage of? I do hope Yuuri ultimately burns Faraya to a crisp or something of the equivalent. I wonder if he will figure out that Wolfram already experienced power swapping before. >.< And I'm turning more into an Amae fan too! Nicely done! Thank you for writing!

Ha! Faraya might as well had shagged a corpse, for all the recognition he got! Tha was worse than a pitty fuck! Well now you've got me I already want to know what happens next, will wolf remember or not, will faraya come back & try to do him when he is more lucid? And what will wolf reaction be when he is finally aware of what faraya did to him? The guy sighned three dead warants, & is #1 in three most die lists, be that of wolf, yuri & kyota's. Oh kohar is going to get it, he touhgt it was pay back, but he only got himself screwd. Well it was not what I expected, I was kind of hoping for a more eventful if not more traumatic, not to say forceful with out ruling out right violent expirience, but it was original, and actualy about the only way faraya was going to get him for the first time wiht out having to kill him first. He thinks wolf behaved like a slut he should see him when yuri is putting it to him, then he will know the meaning of a slut! On a diferent note I don't know if you've seen or heard or read yami no matsue (descendants of darkness) but i belive you would write asome stories about it, specially on the secondari characters like watari or bayko to wich people never pay much attention to, i would gladly read it, but any way that was just a thought I agree with you whats the point in being a writter if you can't write what you want, great chap looking foward to the next, ja ne! ~_^ ps i'm still laughing at the mouse, and now at faraya that didn't go as he expected, I can't belive wolf dozed out on the guy, and to top it all the guy feels ofended he is so pathetic! serves him right!

You know I really enjoyed the prequel to this but as soon as you let Wolfram be raped by the king, that's it! I'm not reading this story anymore! You have completely ruined it for me!! How could you do that to him!!!!

Ahh! Those compliments are definitely not overdone. I mean every one of them.

If only I actually watched DBZ. >.< I'd get to enjoy more of your fics. I'm extremely guilty of "underwriting" and then leaving it hanging. For over a year now I've been trying to write a CastleVania fanfic on Joachim and the inspiration only hits me once in a blue moon. This results in a chapter here and a chapter there every now and then and they're not even in order. Haha, "blabbering" moods are usually good ones ^_^!

And you're totally wrong! Reading your fic I came across words like "enthralling" and "jouncing" and knew that your command of the language was probably a whole lot better than a lot of people I knew. I'm not doubting the language capabilities of non-native English speakers but I'm pretty sure you surpass a good number of them. I do realise that you make mistakes in grammar every now and then with one or two words left out in some sentences but I believe that happens to every writer. Wanting to improve is great and I know you'll do well but don't be too over critical of yourself! ^__^

With regard to your characters, I'm so glad you took out Greta too! In a way I think Faraya and all are kind of endearing in a twisted way. I can't help feeling for them because of the sad state their in but at the same time I can't help wanting to strangle Faraya. That being said, I really want to glomp Amae. XD

Thank you very much for your reply! ^_^ I'm off to read Chapter 16!

not to thrilled about the rape but you did it extremely well. I am happy that he is getting a boost to his fire element though. (I dont like rape in general but realize sometimes it is necessary for the story line). If Faraya is the Maou doesnt he have all of the elements not just fire, like Yuuri does? I cant wait to see what Wolframs reaction is going to be when he realizes what happened though. Since the king had sex with Wolfram does this mean that he is now given permission to use his powers freely without using someone elses therefore it wont drain from him? Looking forward to seeing what happens next

I also don`t like the fact that you let wolfram to be raped! I had loved your storys, first Working out the Paradox and this one too, until this chapter. I had hoped that faraya will never sleep with wolfram and whats with yuuri i don`t think he will appreciate it that his husband have slept with another man!
Your writting is great and your ideas too, but why did you have wolfram to be raped?
But i still would like to read this story further!

I'm so happy Wolfram was able to think it was Yuuri. I feel so bad for him and Amae. I don't want them stuck in that place anymore. I keep thinking about what is going to happen to them once they are out. I keep thinking that Yuuri will come for Wolfram and they will be together again. Secretly, my desire is for Arachi or for Dochiro to fall for Amae, so he can be with someone gentle and kind that will actually care for him - instead of using him like a sex toy.