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September 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow!! This chapter was exciting, I kept thinking they would get caught! (Please don't let them be caught.) I'm not sure what I think about Yasai coming along with them. I wonder if he will be a liability, a traitor, if he will turn them in.
Also - there was nothing shown in this chapter that made me dislike our dear Amae. I feel bad for him, how strange, how terrifying it must be to try escaping the confines of his life. I know he was excited before but now, I can feel his fear when I read this. I can't wait until they make it out of that cursed place and find Kyota and Arachi. The idea of Kyota's relief at finding Wolfram and then the reactions to the raven haired beauty he brought with him makes me feel breathless. I keep thinking that Amae will end up with Wolfram, and I must say that I've begun drawing another picture of Amae already. (This one with Company.)
I will watch your story, checking it multiple times a day for an update, how very - very much this story has touched me. Thank you for giving me something to look forward to.
~Ducky
Also - there was nothing shown in this chapter that made me dislike our dear Amae. I feel bad for him, how strange, how terrifying it must be to try escaping the confines of his life. I know he was excited before but now, I can feel his fear when I read this. I can't wait until they make it out of that cursed place and find Kyota and Arachi. The idea of Kyota's relief at finding Wolfram and then the reactions to the raven haired beauty he brought with him makes me feel breathless. I keep thinking that Amae will end up with Wolfram, and I must say that I've begun drawing another picture of Amae already. (This one with Company.)
I will watch your story, checking it multiple times a day for an update, how very - very much this story has touched me. Thank you for giving me something to look forward to.
~Ducky
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September 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
excellent escape--who's power or what power did he use for the glimmers? really cool using the air power for the lift. now did those elements get a boost also from faraya or is he using the last of yuuri's. Wolfram said that faraya had to be close to him to feel his element so faraya can stop him from using only after felt and found. so if he's not near enough can wolfram do like guerilla warfare and duck and hide until actually located? Cant wait to see what happens next
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September 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I guess this means that they will be leaving soon? If they do escape and dont kill faraya will they still be able to use their elements? Does he have to see them in order to prevent it? Inquiring minds want to know. excellent as always
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September 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Dear wonderful author,
I have finished the fanart of Amae for you. I will work on coloring him later - but I finished the pen and ink work and he begged to be shared in black and white.
Thank you for creating a character who is such a wonderful inspiration to me. I'm counting on you to make things right for him in the end.
http://dukgrrl.deviantart.com/art/Amae-Sederu-65737105
With fond regards,
Ducky
I have finished the fanart of Amae for you. I will work on coloring him later - but I finished the pen and ink work and he begged to be shared in black and white.
Thank you for creating a character who is such a wonderful inspiration to me. I'm counting on you to make things right for him in the end.
http://dukgrrl.deviantart.com/art/Amae-Sederu-65737105
With fond regards,
Ducky
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September 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This was really great! I finally finished the entire thing. Though I'm a little suspicious of Amae...maybe he's being friendly for a reason. I dunno. I hope he's not being sneaky or anything like that...everything's so dark and evil, but I don't get why Wolfram's still there. Shouldn't he have left by now? And Faraya is a rotten bastard. Yup. Well, now that the other's know that W's there, maybe something will come of it, eh? Looking forward for the next chapt!
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September 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Pardon me for reviewing so late! Ahh, you've pointed out something I totally agree with. A lot of native-speaking writers tend to neglect proper spelling and the like. To me, this is the exact same reason some non-native speakers can surpass these people. With familiarity of a language comes the possibility of taking it for granted. Furthermore, this might lead some to take a more straightforward, non-flowery and colloquial road when writing.
Nonetheless, I do see where you're coming from. Native speakers tend to have a better grasp on certain styles of the language because they've had more exposure to it. It's still a great pleasure for me to read works by both those who speak English as a main language and those who don't. It's wonderful to see the effort and I learn something new from almost every fic I read.
And I truly agree with you about not leaving stories hanging. I made that mistake a number of years ago when I started writing fanfiction and told myself never to make it again. In that light, I haven't posted any of my writings in a number of years because they're fragmented in a way that are impossible for a reader to understand if they were uploaded. In a sense, I do appreciate reviews alot but have also found that whether or not a story gets reviewed, I'd still have written it primarily for the joy of writing.
Amae is total fanclub material. I do agree, he feels really human! I guess it's how most of us will always have a soft spot for the tortured hottie who just needs a little respect and proper love. Oddly, I don't quite like Kyota at all. He makes for a good rival in love but I haven't found the lovability of his character yet! XD
And I read WOTP! It was really REALLY awesome. I liked it very very much. It'd made me go "Aww" quite a bit. XD I'm off to read chapter 17 now!
Nonetheless, I do see where you're coming from. Native speakers tend to have a better grasp on certain styles of the language because they've had more exposure to it. It's still a great pleasure for me to read works by both those who speak English as a main language and those who don't. It's wonderful to see the effort and I learn something new from almost every fic I read.
And I truly agree with you about not leaving stories hanging. I made that mistake a number of years ago when I started writing fanfiction and told myself never to make it again. In that light, I haven't posted any of my writings in a number of years because they're fragmented in a way that are impossible for a reader to understand if they were uploaded. In a sense, I do appreciate reviews alot but have also found that whether or not a story gets reviewed, I'd still have written it primarily for the joy of writing.
Amae is total fanclub material. I do agree, he feels really human! I guess it's how most of us will always have a soft spot for the tortured hottie who just needs a little respect and proper love. Oddly, I don't quite like Kyota at all. He makes for a good rival in love but I haven't found the lovability of his character yet! XD
And I read WOTP! It was really REALLY awesome. I liked it very very much. It'd made me go "Aww" quite a bit. XD I'm off to read chapter 17 now!
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September 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Your updates are always such an exciting thing for me, each one getting it's own small celebration. I have to say that I have enjoyed this chapter very much. I like the way Wolfram gets excited to learn about Kyota (Whom I think is the 'merchant'.) I'm looking forward to seeing how Kyota plays into their escape.
I think though, that my favorite thing about this chapter was being able to see Amae interacting with the guards. I'm noticing his character fleshing out more and more as the story goes on, and each new part, each new hint into who he truly is makes me like him more. It's very exciting to me, I love how he flirts with Wolfram though it also makes me kind of sad. I do feel sad for him because it seems he is growing attached to Wolfram, and not so much because of Wolfram, but I think more because of what Wolfram represents to him. I think Amae see's a sense of courage and freedom that is foreign to him. I think he is attracted to Wolfram's strength - not only of body, but of character too. I'm just kind of worried about him getting 'too' attached and getting hurt in the end.
Ducky
I think though, that my favorite thing about this chapter was being able to see Amae interacting with the guards. I'm noticing his character fleshing out more and more as the story goes on, and each new part, each new hint into who he truly is makes me like him more. It's very exciting to me, I love how he flirts with Wolfram though it also makes me kind of sad. I do feel sad for him because it seems he is growing attached to Wolfram, and not so much because of Wolfram, but I think more because of what Wolfram represents to him. I think Amae see's a sense of courage and freedom that is foreign to him. I think he is attracted to Wolfram's strength - not only of body, but of character too. I'm just kind of worried about him getting 'too' attached and getting hurt in the end.
Ducky
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September 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay, forgive my ignorance, & lack of understanding but, uh, why did Wolfram burned the picture? I mean I know he doesn't want to trust Amae, and aparently he is having a little bit of trouble at it, but that was a sweet gesture from the black haired concubine. Kyota is coming in to the picture & I can't wait for wolf & amae to get the hell out out of there, & fantasysing about amae's & kyota's meeting is driving me insane, I want to know what their first impretion on each other would be, & how will Wolfram take the development of a relationship between them, I know I'm getting way ahead of myself but I cant help it. Any way Faraya is not going to like what Torani did, thats for sure. I'm aso waiting for another meeting between wolfram & faraya, how much desobideance can this guy tolerate before intervining himself. Amae & Lasami are taking a huge risck in helping wolfram I hope no harm will Come to Lasami after wolfram & Amae are gone, if Faraya finds out the servant is as good as dead, & I kind of like the guy.
Any way yes the character was blond with glasses, no matter tough, You are awsome at kkm & I have no complains what so ever, as long as you keep writting it I will keep reading it. I already knew you also do DBZ but I haven't read any of it, that anime though I watched alot of it (I didn't knew better at the time), it doesen't apeal to me any more, no offence but for me anime is art I'm more atracted to the aestetic part of it, and DBZ though interesting doesn't go easy on the eyes. I know it sounds very shallow, & superfitial but I can't turne my eyes from beatiful drop-dead gorgeous men, don't get me wrong, story line, & plot are very very important, I also pay attention to animation cuality, such as colors, and fluid real movements, like in Witsh Hunter Robin, Ergo Proxi or even Beck. But like I said before it has to be pretty, or unusual stile. I agree with you that there ara few stories that are worth reading, in all the fandoms i read the writters tend to over generalise & simplify the character's characteristics & fall in to a pattern or angts, hurt, confort, silly romantic fluff and horny rampages of pwp, with no point to them, I read them any way beacause I'm adicted to reading fanfiction, and when people like you aren't around, I have to deal with what I can find, your tipe of writting is much more entrataining, capturing, & aluring, you simply rock. But you know what the say if live gives you lemons, order up some tequila & salt! I'm glad that you liked the music I recomended and that you founded just as fitting for the characters. Music is what usualy inspires me to draw wich is my strong suit, it also helps me to writte but I honestly suck at it, thats why I don't post any of it, I'm not about to torture the general public with my original stories of my pathetic atempts at anime fanfics, I prefere to read. Woah I've talked a lot, I get out of your hair now, & I'll let you know if I find more songs for your character or the story. ja ne!
Any way yes the character was blond with glasses, no matter tough, You are awsome at kkm & I have no complains what so ever, as long as you keep writting it I will keep reading it. I already knew you also do DBZ but I haven't read any of it, that anime though I watched alot of it (I didn't knew better at the time), it doesen't apeal to me any more, no offence but for me anime is art I'm more atracted to the aestetic part of it, and DBZ though interesting doesn't go easy on the eyes. I know it sounds very shallow, & superfitial but I can't turne my eyes from beatiful drop-dead gorgeous men, don't get me wrong, story line, & plot are very very important, I also pay attention to animation cuality, such as colors, and fluid real movements, like in Witsh Hunter Robin, Ergo Proxi or even Beck. But like I said before it has to be pretty, or unusual stile. I agree with you that there ara few stories that are worth reading, in all the fandoms i read the writters tend to over generalise & simplify the character's characteristics & fall in to a pattern or angts, hurt, confort, silly romantic fluff and horny rampages of pwp, with no point to them, I read them any way beacause I'm adicted to reading fanfiction, and when people like you aren't around, I have to deal with what I can find, your tipe of writting is much more entrataining, capturing, & aluring, you simply rock. But you know what the say if live gives you lemons, order up some tequila & salt! I'm glad that you liked the music I recomended and that you founded just as fitting for the characters. Music is what usualy inspires me to draw wich is my strong suit, it also helps me to writte but I honestly suck at it, thats why I don't post any of it, I'm not about to torture the general public with my original stories of my pathetic atempts at anime fanfics, I prefere to read. Woah I've talked a lot, I get out of your hair now, & I'll let you know if I find more songs for your character or the story. ja ne!
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September 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Faraya realized what Wolfram did huh. Interesting. Kind of wondering why he is warning Amae though. I'm glad he's not going to be there much longer (based on your answer to another reviewer. So we are finally going to see what the rest of the gang is upto that sounds good. Wonder if Yuuri's power is so much greater than Faraya's or just close based on his power rating per Wolfram. I like that Wolfram really cant remember what happened and his anger wasn't as strong as I expected it to be. This is going to be so intrigueing when done. Thanks for the explanation
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September 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hello... i really really don´t knows how do you do it.... i mean...( wow 17 chapt.!!!) you have a lot of ideas and... oh... i´m so jealous!!! you are such a good writer.... i will be waiting for the next chapter... bye!!!