rate_review Reviews

Hey I just found your story and I wanted to let you know I really enjoyed reading it. All the characters are very well done and not OOC. The way Alucard slowly figures out his feelings for Seras was well done as well. I hope you will continue to update; I'd like to see what happens!
Thanks for sharing your story :)
~Ela

This is effin brill
love it cnt wait 4 more
lol
poor Seras

You've worked hard on this and it shows. Good ideas, nice plot, characters are staying true to form, and there's some nice friction between Seras and Alucard. I really like this story.

I love it! The characters are portrayed very well! Very beautifully written and I want MORE! please update as soon as possible ^_^ or else I shall .... stalk you or somthin *grin* ok I won't actually stalk you but still..... PLEASE UPDATE *sniffle*

This is so wonderfully written, despite the minor spelling mistakes.
It's great nonetheless, and one of the best I've read so far.
Keep it up and update as soon as you can!

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I saw your author's note. I'm a culprit for reading but not reviewing. But I'll review this chapter and the rest, and go back to the original. Great story so far. I'm interested in knowing about Eclipse and I hope you touch more on the Mina thing. I wonder if you'll have Seras read up or become aware of Mina. By the way, I should post this in the third chapter, but was Eclipse's last name Victoria? Just wondering if there's a relation. In any event, this is a great read and I hope nothing awful happens to Seras....at least no rape or anything. Again, I love your style of writing, it's very professional (check spelling though) and detailed (which I love) so you're able to capture the reading and set the stage. Keep up the great work.
VB

Again another great chapter. I like Richard and Michel. Great characters. Yes, I realize they're side characters and haven't gotten that much play, but I'm always more moved and interested in the side ones so Michel and Rich get my vote. I wonder how important Serpentis is to Seras, it would be fun if he was a relation...although I get the feeling he might have killed Seras' mum and dad. Good chap, and thanks for that bit of AlucardxSeras...snippets of something slightly romantic is better than none.

Loved this final chapter. I was bloody worried I'd have to deal with a rape...at least this was an attempted rape. Great chapter and bless Alucard. I hope he finds out that Serpentis has his gun and knows of him. Secondly, spell check before posting I wasn't sure if the name was Michel or Michael and I believe Roger/Richard.

Anyway, great read.

Okay, I havn't even finished this story yet but I wanted to say a few things before I forgot. YOu really are a good writer. You have a gift for expression, or at least expressing scenery and making it look real. I do have some issues with the verb tenses though. For the dream, at least, the tenses where everywhere and it made it a tad confusing. That's all I have to say for now but I really do like the story so far.

Okay! constructive criticism here i come! hehe. sorry. I actually only wanted to ask you if you had realized that you had changed the bouncer's name from Richard in chapter 5 to Roger in Chapter 8? I was also wondering if you would like me to send you your story back with revisions. I have a bad habit of doing so with people's fanfiction, and I realized that yours seems to be missing words on occasion and puncuation marks most of the time. If you would like me to I'll be happy to. Just contact me at my e-mail X). I hope you don't think I'm too forward with this though. I do this in entirely good faith and you can tell me to bugger off if you want to. I won't hold it against you. anyway, happy writing! XD