rate_review Reviews

This story was well written and fun to read. I rarely review stories (either they require sign-ins or they just don't catch my interest), but having read this fan fiction in one sitting, I felt it would be particularly ungrateful of me not to review. Everyone was in character (from what I remember from the anime) without being predictable or boring. I must say that you have a great talent in writing and should most definitely continue to write whatever spurs your creativity.

*I seriously read this entire story in one go, it was that awesome!!*

I am always happy to see an update of this story. I usually like the Aya x Yohji pairing but this "strange" tale is perfect for Schu and Aya. It is dark and yet hopeful. The characters are true to form as well. Great job! Please keep going.

Another great chapter. I love the friendship shown by Yohji and Ken, and Aya's determination not to leave even though he understands the potential danger. Schuldig's sudden professional interest, as if a bodyguard, just delightful. Such unrelieved tension, however, please hurry back with more soon.

Another terrific chapter! So angry but so caring for each other. Poor Schuldig, tied so closely to Aya but not finding Aya's bonds to him to be as clear. So painful that phrase in the last chapter, that it is never about him in Aya's mind -- yet Aya's actions show otherwise even if he isn't quite willing to admit that yet. Two very dangerous men, angst, humor and brilliant writing, who could ask for more (other than please more chapters)?

Hurray another chapter, and what a chapter! You convey so well the dancing on a knife's edge by Mastermind and Abyssinian, but who better to master such a dance? I love the smooth way in which Weiss carried out their mission, and in particular the manner in which Aya brought down Mastermind. Schuldig it seems has been looking forward to this moment, at least a bit. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Continuing to enjoy this story very much. You have just the right balance of malice. passion and compassion in the characters. I was a bit jarred by the staging in the last part of this chapter-- Schuldich was "not a hundred yards away", then Aya was throwing a punch and neither character physically moved in the narrative. Also, 300 feet takes a bit of time to cross, it's almost the length of a football field. Perhaps you meant 10 yards? Anyway, given the way Schuldich reacted to restraints in the past, the next chapter is bound to be an interesting one. I am looking forward to it.

I had grown afraid that you might not be returning; to get three new chapters was an unexpected and all the more wonderful delight (which by no means is a wish for any delays in future chapters). I love that Schuldig forewarned Omi of Abyssinian's coming visit and how smoothly that "conversation" was had. Schuldig's resulting dream and return to being the vicious Mastermind was insightful. Aya's examination of their apartment and Yohji's role in seeking Schuldig was great. Everyone is so terrifically in character even as new dimensions are revealed. And again, you are a master of words -- "Intimidation was a talent. Malevolent sadism was an art form . . ."; counting on Aya being furious with him; and the marking in his own unique way of his territory -- just superb.

I just don't know how you do it, turning out wonderful chapters with elements of action, suspense, intriguing plot, and best and most amazing of all, terrific character development -- shown more than discussed (loved Schuldig's decision) and incredible laugh out loud humor. Once again phrases and sentences scintillate, sparkling even more with each reading. The Aya and Schuldig interaction is terrific, funny and somehow very believeable, while Yohji and Ken manage to hold their own.

Now I'm simply and utterly spoiled! Once again the plot is not only enthralling, I'm enraptured with the way you write. Simply too many gems of paragraphs, sentences, and phrases -- all seemlessly interwoven into a jewel of a plot. I'm going to simply relax and enjoy rereading over and over and fully enjoying each morsel as well as the whole story to this point. Thank you!

dont stop there please! it is so good and i would love to have more.