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Incredibly cute, but what will you have them do now? No death notes, no investigation team, where wil be the conlfict?
Keep writing, you rock!

whoa this is good; I read part of it at acen in chicago and now I am reading the latest chapter ^_^ new twist on the whole deathnote series; it reminds me of the original manga so far but better

keep it up; I'll read til the end

This fanfic is so awesome,why didn't I read this much sooner? I realy like the way you write,it's realy/...hmm,i can't explain it..it's just realy nice reading it! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Now what! what are those two going to do.

Interesting, Misa a shinigami? This makes things really fascinating and my mind is already coming up with thousands of possibilities and I can't wait to see where you go with this ^__^

Interesting! I wounder what the terms are?

wow... to be honest, i didn't expect too much when i saw the title and the summary of this fic. but it's one of the best LxLight fics i've read so far. (and you know, that's saying a lot considering the internet is flooded with this pairing since the release of DN anime). i like how it's AU-ish but also somehow...possible, like it really could have happened if things went a bit differently. i also love the contrast between innocent Light and Kira.
oh and thank you for treating Misa in a very acceptable way - while she might be extremely annoying in canon, it's even worse when she's being bashed in fanfictions :D as for her commiting suicide to become a shinigami - that's a pretty interesting twist and again, i can see it happening. so anyways...i'm really looking forward to next chapters ^_~
and i almost forgot to mention how much i loved the scientific intro in chapter 7! you seriously rock.
(btw, i'm sorry if my review doesn't make much sense, english is not my first language)

Still so good! What's struck me in the last few chapters is the use of present tense that I normally don't prefer, but it works very well with the almost casual phrasing of very important situations, like in the very last paragraph of chapter 7. I also liked the attempt at a scientific explanation for what's going on, and it's actually a very interesting take on it with the paper in the watch. I was wondering at the beginning how Light seemed to just start almost remembering things, or at least feelings; I had assumed I'd just have to suspend my disbelief. So that's a nice touch as well. I look forward to more!

really enjoy this; it's an interesting twist to what could of happen. personally I wanted something like this than what....happen with L and light anyway ><

still keep it up; avid reader when my internet is working

Oh, I like Light's exhaustion in the first chapter.

I like L's insistent, constant advances, simultaneously mental and physical.

I like Light's sudden, startled realization that he is Kira, and L's reactions, intrigued and observing.

I like the way Light just keeps being Kira without consciously choosing his words and actions, even though he doesn't remember.

I like the intense focus on the analyses of the situation, and on the simultaneous physical seduction.

"Ahh, there it is." Really, that brief exchange was incredibly hot. I... guess I just like to see L dominating Light-as-Kira (or at least in control), even if mainly in words. Still, it's dialogue like that, that makes the story for me, more than anything else. (Also, the story title has my hopes up in that regard.)

I like how L and Light's alternating feelings of defeat and victory are reflected by their physical actions towards each other. And I like that they do alternate as they continue to analyze.

I like that Light is still Kira, that you didn't make the decision that many authors unfortunately make in trying to absolve him of his crimes and his unquestionably manipulative personality just because he doesn't have the conscious memory. He's not a different person when he doesn't remember, and while this story seems to lean towards the opposite extreme, I like it, because I like that Light so much better than the passive and innocent post-forfeit Light of canon.

I like that so many excellent chapters were posted in one day and I didn't need to obsessively check back every few days-if-not-weeks for the next chapter to be posted. And now I've got my hopes up to see the rest very soon.

I didn't so much like the sheer emotion of the piece. It felt a bit over the top to me. I can understand Light crying after learning what he did, the silent sort with a few angry or terrified tears, but the way they both revel in each other's affection just feels a bit off. It seems to detract from the continued rivalry.

But I do like Misa's anguish at the end of the 4th chapter, and I must say that I really like your choices of phrasing throughout the story so far (particularly in that last paragraph), as well as the italics and run-on sentences that I've really grown to find quite effective in fan fiction.