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by koorinoinu

person wildkit
schedule May 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
More. This story is just getting good
schedule May 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The idea is good, but it is hard to read. Make new lines for each new speaker and rather than the * for Japanese write it in italics. More descriptions will flesh out your writing and draw the reader in.

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