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February 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Very well written! The only problem I have is the saliva-as-lube bit. *wince* Saliva would definitely not be enough to stretch the rectum. Otherwise, this was lovely.
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September 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
FFFFF. Oh Watanuki, the kind-of-creepy-obsessed-fan thing suits you a little too well. But your flailing is as adorable as ever, of course <3 And Doumeki!! Hot damn. Where can I find a Doumeki of my own? D: I wants!
Anyway, I loved this story. It was sweet and fluffy with just that tang of bitter longing that I like, and you spent enough time on the setup so that it kept the reader on the edge of the seat waiting for the action as well as making the Himawari plot device seem less contrived than it definitely could have been. Though I loved the entirety of the second chapter (and the first too, of course, but perhaps to a slightly lesser extent since I felt bad for both boys ;__;), for some reason this one part really stood out for me:
“Where are we going?” Watanuki asked.
“To meet Himawari.” The taller male supplied. “That’s what you wanted, right?”
There was an almost bitter tone to the words, and for a split second Watanuki almost felt bad for tagging along and imposing. It only lasted that millisecond though, for in the next moment he was back to thinking about meeting the love of his life.
That just...aghh. And Watanuki didn't even notice that Doumeki had already fallen for him... >_< Awwww. Wonderful work!
P.S. I don't know if another reviewer has already mentioned it, but... the story seem to be having a few issues with formatting. I wouldn't point it out, but it does affect the viewing experience a fair bit...
P.P.S. If you wrote a companion piece for this story from Doumeki's view, or a continuation, or both, I would love you forever. FOREVER.
Anyway, I loved this story. It was sweet and fluffy with just that tang of bitter longing that I like, and you spent enough time on the setup so that it kept the reader on the edge of the seat waiting for the action as well as making the Himawari plot device seem less contrived than it definitely could have been. Though I loved the entirety of the second chapter (and the first too, of course, but perhaps to a slightly lesser extent since I felt bad for both boys ;__;), for some reason this one part really stood out for me:
“Where are we going?” Watanuki asked.
“To meet Himawari.” The taller male supplied. “That’s what you wanted, right?”
There was an almost bitter tone to the words, and for a split second Watanuki almost felt bad for tagging along and imposing. It only lasted that millisecond though, for in the next moment he was back to thinking about meeting the love of his life.
That just...aghh. And Watanuki didn't even notice that Doumeki had already fallen for him... >_< Awwww. Wonderful work!
P.S. I don't know if another reviewer has already mentioned it, but... the story seem to be having a few issues with formatting. I wouldn't point it out, but it does affect the viewing experience a fair bit...
P.P.S. If you wrote a companion piece for this story from Doumeki's view, or a continuation, or both, I would love you forever. FOREVER.
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September 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
FFFFF. Oh Watanuki, the kind-of-creepy-obsessed-fan thing suits you a little too well. But your flailing is as adorable as ever, of course <3 And Doumeki!! Hot damn. Where can I find a Doumeki of my own? D: I wants!
Anyway, I loved this story. It was sweet and fluffy with just that tang of bitter longing that I like, and you spent enough time on the setup so that it kept the reader on the edge of the seat waiting for the action as well as making the Himawari plot device seem less contrived than it definitely could have been. Though I loved the entirety of the second chapter (and the first too, of course, but perhaps to a slightly lesser extent since I felt bad for both boys ;__;), for some reason this one part really stood out for me:
“Where are we going?” Watanuki asked.
“To meet Himawari.” The taller male supplied. “That’s what you wanted, right?”
There was an almost bitter tone to the words, and for a split second Watanuki almost felt bad for tagging along and imposing. It only lasted that millisecond though, for in the next moment he was back to thinking about meeting the love of his life.
That just...aghh. And Watanuki didn't even notice that Doumeki had already fallen for him... >_< Awwww. Wonderful work!
P.S. I don't know if another reviewer has already mentioned it, but... the story seem to be having a few issues with formatting. I wouldn't point it out, but it does affect the viewing experience a fair bit...
P.P.S. If you wrote a companion piece for this story from Doumeki's view, or a continuation, or both, I would love you forever. FOREVER.
Anyway, I loved this story. It was sweet and fluffy with just that tang of bitter longing that I like, and you spent enough time on the setup so that it kept the reader on the edge of the seat waiting for the action as well as making the Himawari plot device seem less contrived than it definitely could have been. Though I loved the entirety of the second chapter (and the first too, of course, but perhaps to a slightly lesser extent since I felt bad for both boys ;__;), for some reason this one part really stood out for me:
“Where are we going?” Watanuki asked.
“To meet Himawari.” The taller male supplied. “That’s what you wanted, right?”
There was an almost bitter tone to the words, and for a split second Watanuki almost felt bad for tagging along and imposing. It only lasted that millisecond though, for in the next moment he was back to thinking about meeting the love of his life.
That just...aghh. And Watanuki didn't even notice that Doumeki had already fallen for him... >_< Awwww. Wonderful work!
P.S. I don't know if another reviewer has already mentioned it, but... the story seem to be having a few issues with formatting. I wouldn't point it out, but it does affect the viewing experience a fair bit...
P.P.S. If you wrote a companion piece for this story from Doumeki's view, or a continuation, or both, I would love you forever. FOREVER.
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September 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
ARGH AFF keeps messing with my review... Posting again and hoping for the best!
FFFFF. Oh Watanuki, the kind-of-creepy-obsessed-fan thing suits you a little too well. But your flailing is as adorable as ever, of course <3 And Doumeki!! Hot damn. Where can I find a Doumeki of my own? D: I wants! Anyway, I loved this story. It was sweet and fluffy with just that tang of bitter longing that I like, and you spent enough time on the setup so that it kept the reader on the edge of the seat waiting for the action as well as making the Himawari plot device seem less contrived than it definitely could have been. If you wrote a companion piece for this story from Doumeki's view, or a continuation, or both, I would love you forever. FOREVER. Though I loved the entirety of the second chapter (and the first too, of course, but perhaps to a slightly lesser extent since I felt bad for both boys ;__;), for some reason this one part really stood out for me: '“Where are we going?” Watanuki asked. “To meet Himawari.” The taller male supplied. “That’s what you wanted, right?” There was an almost bitter tone to the words, and for a split second Watanuki almost felt bad for tagging along and imposing. It only lasted that millisecond though, for in the next moment he was back to thinking about meeting the love of his life.' That just...aghh. And Watanuki didn't even notice that Doumeki had already fallen for him... >_< Awwww. Wonderful work! P.S. I don't know if another reviewer has already mentioned it, but... the story seem to be having a few issues with formatting. I wouldn't point it out, but it does affect the viewing experience a fair bit...
FFFFF. Oh Watanuki, the kind-of-creepy-obsessed-fan thing suits you a little too well. But your flailing is as adorable as ever, of course <3 And Doumeki!! Hot damn. Where can I find a Doumeki of my own? D: I wants! Anyway, I loved this story. It was sweet and fluffy with just that tang of bitter longing that I like, and you spent enough time on the setup so that it kept the reader on the edge of the seat waiting for the action as well as making the Himawari plot device seem less contrived than it definitely could have been. If you wrote a companion piece for this story from Doumeki's view, or a continuation, or both, I would love you forever. FOREVER. Though I loved the entirety of the second chapter (and the first too, of course, but perhaps to a slightly lesser extent since I felt bad for both boys ;__;), for some reason this one part really stood out for me: '“Where are we going?” Watanuki asked. “To meet Himawari.” The taller male supplied. “That’s what you wanted, right?” There was an almost bitter tone to the words, and for a split second Watanuki almost felt bad for tagging along and imposing. It only lasted that millisecond though, for in the next moment he was back to thinking about meeting the love of his life.' That just...aghh. And Watanuki didn't even notice that Doumeki had already fallen for him... >_< Awwww. Wonderful work! P.S. I don't know if another reviewer has already mentioned it, but... the story seem to be having a few issues with formatting. I wouldn't point it out, but it does affect the viewing experience a fair bit...
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March 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I've read this probably at least 10 times and I still love it(maybe even more) each time I read it.
Well, I came to re-read it(again) and I noticed that your format and stuff got sort of messed up somehow. It has a bunch of "font=(insert random number here)" and centered things and the paragraphs are only half the page.
Anyway, I love your story and just wanted to let you know something odd was going on.
Well, I came to re-read it(again) and I noticed that your format and stuff got sort of messed up somehow. It has a bunch of "font=(insert random number here)" and centered things and the paragraphs are only half the page.
Anyway, I love your story and just wanted to let you know something odd was going on.
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June 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I don't have an aff.net account, but I do have a ff.net account. I just wanted to say that this is probably the best smut I've ever read so far. It was long, detailed and... just brilliantly written. I hope that one day I can write smuts this good (: AMAZING! ♥
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October 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Please write more! You did beautifully well in writing the part when they "made love" because that's what it was to me
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August 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This has to be one of the best douwatta fics I have ever read! I think you did a wonderful job catching everyone's personalities. Thank you for writing such an enjoyable story.<3
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June 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ah, I love this story! >.<
It's so beautifully written, and I love how you portray the characters, especially Doumeki.
Anywho, you'll probably ignore my sucky review, but I really do hope you write more fanfiction for Xxxholic. <3
It's so beautifully written, and I love how you portray the characters, especially Doumeki.
Anywho, you'll probably ignore my sucky review, but I really do hope you write more fanfiction for Xxxholic. <3
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May 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love your story! <3
It's so hard to find Xxxholic fanfiction...So I'm glad I was able to find yours and read it. ^^
It's so hard to find Xxxholic fanfiction...So I'm glad I was able to find yours and read it. ^^