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July 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*whines* more? this is so cute!
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July 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I do not like you......nasty person, leaving me a cliff hanger...*stomps off grumbling*
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*glomps* OMG I loves you! write more soon please?
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June 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It was quite good, you kept them in character pretty well, keep going I would like to see where you go with this story
schedule
June 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
not bad for a first start XD I'll be watching for more
your grammer's good, but there are no spaces between paragraphs. it makes it hard to read a fic when it's formated so close. I invite you to take a look at how my own fics are formated to see what I mean by clicking on my user name. It's always in your best intrest to make the story enjoyable for the reader (as opposed to hard to read), that way you encourage them to leave favorable reveiew
kiki
your grammer's good, but there are no spaces between paragraphs. it makes it hard to read a fic when it's formated so close. I invite you to take a look at how my own fics are formated to see what I mean by clicking on my user name. It's always in your best intrest to make the story enjoyable for the reader (as opposed to hard to read), that way you encourage them to leave favorable reveiew
kiki
schedule
May 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
very good start and can not wait for the next chapter of the story and see what happen next to them and do the older brother come back. up date soon.