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Hoo~!

There MUST be a sequel to this fic~!

Anyway, I love Kaname's and Sousuke's drafts~ they are honestly filled with emotion and absolutely describes them~

I LOVE IT~!

I hope to read more of this kind of fic in the future~! ^^

Am I allowed to review every chapter? I hope this works like ff.net...Loved chapter one. You do a great job of portraying both Kaname and Sousuke very well. They're hilarious, can't wait to read the rest!

I missed reviewing chapter 2, I guess. Minor typos (toes is spelled with an e, not a w; chap. 2). Great job! I love how Sousuke is so proud of his "diplomatic" skills...

Another great chapter. I loved both their essays. You capture their voices so well. Sousuke is such a graceless fool, but it's amazing. Can't wait to see what happens next. Kaname does a great job explaining to our favorite otaku what a boyfriend is. Very nice job!

YESSS. Sousuke/Kaname moments are the best. A couple word errors..."animosity" is hatred, not what I think Sousuke feels for Kagome. And earlier, you have Kaname "condoning" Sousuke's actions, but I think you meant "condemning". Minor typos. On to chapter 9! Great job!

Really great story!

Without a doubt the best FMP! fan fic I've ever read, erotic or not. The attention to detail from the series was amazing. The only small complaints I have are Kaname's hair color and a lack of knowledge of the events following End of Day by Day (however I would not expect you to know them as the novels haven't been released in the US yet, even I do not know most of the plotline). So, really nothing to complain about. This fanfic fits in perfectly with the series, and has plausible plot devices. I'm glad it was so long, if it had been a one-chapter deal it wouldn't have been nearly as effective.

Holy crap on toast! This is an awesome story. Please continue!

I absolutely love your fic!! It flowed so smoothly, I could basically picture everything as an anime, like I was watching it in my own head. If that makes ANY sense. ^^;;;;; I could also hear Sousuke talking exactly like that....he was so in character, I felt like I was reading Shouji Gatou's work!! Great job!! Please continue to write more FMP fics!! I wish there were more writers like you. ^_^ 5/5!! ^o^

I have to say, this is one of the most well-written pieces of work I have ever read on here. The pacing was perfect, to me. You stayed in character the whole time, also, which was quite surprising with your choice of perspective. Your choice of words, also, was vastly impressive, even by my standards. Once I started reading your story, I just could not stop until the very last chapter. I have not felt so...mmmm...I want to say happy...but it would be more like a sense of accomplishment and awe that I was able to partake in the indulgence of such a story as this. Most definitely time that was not wasted. It is rare that I get this feeling after reading someone's work, especially from a non-famous writer. I didn't even have a problem with the slight grammar and spelling errors that littered your pieces of work here and there. Reminds me of whenever I'm writing something myself. Makes me feel a bit more human whenever I read other people's writings and it was just damn good. But I was very impressed with how well you were able to depict Sousuke's character with pinpoint accuracy. And Kaname was most definitely not far from perfect, either. I did not have a problem at all in not seeing the two of them in the predicaments that you put them in. I only wish that there was a little bit more to it. xD A worthy read, and well-worth my time. I'll even tell one of my friends who likes fanfics about this one. You most definitely deserve some popularity for such a nice piece of work. I don't normally comment like this, but I feel that taking my time to talk like this would help convey that, as a writer, this is a story that is near perfection. All the way to the point of putting in the right amount of detail where it was needed most. I don't think I could even do something this good. If possible, I wouldn't mind you checking out some of my stuff and hearing what you thing about it.

-Narshe "Minerva" Delvar-