rate_review Reviews

please, please update!!!

ASAP

I'm dying to read what happens next!!!

I'm very much enjoying this story. I like the way you write sex between Lina and Gourry as a competition, it seems so fitting! The Naga POV seemed a bit meh, but as you said you're experimenting with her, I don't intend this as a criticism, more as a comment. I don't really get a sense of her personality yet, with her overweening self-confidence and interesting interpretations of the world around her. I also noticed a few minor typos, nothing serious. On the whole, though, it's nice to see adult content in this section that actually has a plot, with the adult content secondary to the story. Thanks for sharing this here!