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May 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh come on! tease! this could totally use another chappie or an epilogue or something. *snort* although i can totally see why the cutoff there, how do you continue that scene? guess the rape story's right out...perhaps schuldig will have to tie yohji to the bed and repeat the process? by the by, loved the dumb-ken characterization, you got his dumb level just right and i occasionally sympathized with schuldig for being stuck with the man's thoughts. your narration was interesting, sometimes a little hard to understand, but overall a good little smut fic.
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August 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Although I'm having the same problem as a couple of other reviewers in that sometimes I'm not able to tell who is thinking what, that doesn't detract an awful lot from my enjoyment of this fic.
Despite some confusion as mentioned above, I really liked the interaction between these two, and their individual reactions to the situation are pretty much what I'd expect them to be. I also like your concise use of language in both your narrative and description.
I'm not sure how much longer Ken and Schuldig will be stuck in the cabin, but I'm looking forward to reading more of their interaction in whatever time they have left.
Despite some confusion as mentioned above, I really liked the interaction between these two, and their individual reactions to the situation are pretty much what I'd expect them to be. I also like your concise use of language in both your narrative and description.
I'm not sure how much longer Ken and Schuldig will be stuck in the cabin, but I'm looking forward to reading more of their interaction in whatever time they have left.
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July 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Nice story, I like it.
It's interesting, really. Can't wait to see what you're going to do next. So I hope you update soon again.
- Kurai Yo
It's interesting, really. Can't wait to see what you're going to do next. So I hope you update soon again.
- Kurai Yo
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June 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I just love this pairing and I had high hopes when I saw them pop up. The storyline itself is amusing and I like the way you had these two bounce off each other, but the lack of a name or identifying text in every other sentence makes it difficult to follow what's going on.
I'd love to see this continue, but please remember to make it clear who is performing an action and when Schu is just thinking to himself or actively using his telepathy. Keep it up!
I'd love to see this continue, but please remember to make it clear who is performing an action and when Schu is just thinking to himself or actively using his telepathy. Keep it up!
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June 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sounds wonderful! Ken is such a whirlwind of thoughts. I liked how it's almost confused between what Ken is thinking and what Shuldig is thinking, as he can't quite tell them apart. At least it came off that way to me. I'll be waiting for the next chapter!