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May 4, 2016 at 12:00 AM
What the hell is this crap? The first chapter was so good but the second killed Kunou's character.
1. Kunou is very possesive so he would NEVER EVER allow anyone to enter the pigtailed girl before he did. If they did how would he be able to take her virginity?
2. The manga clearly shows that Kunou is more interested in the pigtailed girl than he is Akane, especially on a more fond/love level. So he would have treated her better than he did Akane.
GAH!! Why did you write the 2nd chapter like this? Kunou being the King of girls and how he started handling himself was so good and refreshing -- why did you have to kill it with the 2nc chapter?? WHY?
Suggestion:
trash this 2nd chapter and rewrite it.
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June 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sense you dont have email listed the only way i could attempt to message you is through this i was curious what happened to the 2 ranma/ryoga stories you put out a couple months ago if you are not going to post them back on the site is there an other place you post your work??
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April 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
YES!!
I was hoping and praying you'd give Kuno some competition by Ryouga, and it looks like you will be. Thank you thank you thank you.
I also really like how playful Ranma's being with Ryouga. When I saw that you were portraying Ryouga in the light of a rapist, I was a little disappointed because it looked like you were dressing him up as a kind of villain. But you balanced the rape out with the right amount of levity from Ranma's general eccentricities. So that was a relief for me. If you're setting them up as a couple, this is a great start.
One thing I don't like is the way Ranma's giving up her name so easily. I really don't think she'd do that just because she's a girl full time now. I guess that's why I don't prefer that you've been referring to her as such up until now. But I s'pose I can overlook it easily enough.
BTW: I may not have to tell you this, but before Ranma and Ryouga leave China, Ryouga's probably gonna wanna stop at Jusenkyou. Maybe they could run into the spring of drowned girl if you get my meaning.
I was hoping and praying you'd give Kuno some competition by Ryouga, and it looks like you will be. Thank you thank you thank you.
I also really like how playful Ranma's being with Ryouga. When I saw that you were portraying Ryouga in the light of a rapist, I was a little disappointed because it looked like you were dressing him up as a kind of villain. But you balanced the rape out with the right amount of levity from Ranma's general eccentricities. So that was a relief for me. If you're setting them up as a couple, this is a great start.
One thing I don't like is the way Ranma's giving up her name so easily. I really don't think she'd do that just because she's a girl full time now. I guess that's why I don't prefer that you've been referring to her as such up until now. But I s'pose I can overlook it easily enough.
BTW: I may not have to tell you this, but before Ranma and Ryouga leave China, Ryouga's probably gonna wanna stop at Jusenkyou. Maybe they could run into the spring of drowned girl if you get my meaning.
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September 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
They gave in a bit too easily, but still... not bad. You've certainly made Kuno's day.
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September 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was both sexy and hilarious. Please keep writing this story.
The only thing that needs a bit of polish is your erotic description.
I especially liked Akane's towards Ranma post-Kuno. Her blatant jealousy had my sides splitting: "If she couldn’t avoid Ranma joining her, then the least she could do was establish the pecking order of things," That was just brilliant.
The only thing that needs a bit of polish is your erotic description.
I especially liked Akane's towards Ranma post-Kuno. Her blatant jealousy had my sides splitting: "If she couldn’t avoid Ranma joining her, then the least she could do was establish the pecking order of things," That was just brilliant.