rate_review Reviews

Overall, it's not a bad story. However, I believe it's OOC for Kyon to be in love with Haruhi. He did voice a liking for Mikuru in the anime. You also might want to separate your paragraphs more, it's easier on the eyes (I found that out the hard way.)

Also, if you're writing just to get reviews, that's not a good thing. Do this because you love to do it, not because you want people to pat you on the back and say you did a good job.

Etou...other than the fact that you forget that japanese schools have a half-day on Saturday, it was a good fic. I liked how you kept with the concept of staying in the perspective of Kyon, as is with the books. And t3h sm3x was t3h aw3some. =3 A good one-shot...or two-shot? kekekekeke....Also...it is just me, but I'm used to calling her Suzumiya Haruhi. Call it being obsessed with japanese edition, along with the books. =D Other than them small fickle things that don't really matter to many people, it was a good fic. I enjoyed it very much. ^_^

-Narshe "Dizzy Gear" Delvar-

That sounded so very cannon it was amazing! I liked Kyon's thoughts throughout the whole thing, especially his thing about it being 'muggy' not 'hot'. Great job!