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I'm sorry. This is...simply a Mary Sue riddled story. Keep trying.

Sorry, but I don't remeber reading anything that stupid and illogical for a long time. Every of Weiss has a family mamber that we never heard about and they work for Kritiker as well. Of course Omi's little sister has an amnesia and she is 'the one who thinks up all the plans'. She is looking for her brother, not 'brothers', Hirofumi and Masafumi don't seem to be worth any attention. Of course all of those Mery Sues are younger then their 'family mamber', this way Weiss boys can feel even more protective over them. I think that if you will kill all of those awsome new characters at the very begining of the next chapter and let Schuldich screw with Weiss guys minds so they will forget about their new cute family and won't mourning over them, you may be even able to save the fic.