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November 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I've been reading your story have read another story like yours where they are all living together but am enjoy your view of it and i hope you continue since i think you are going really good with it. Can't wait to read more.
Blaise Nahuel Zillah
Blaise Nahuel Zillah
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September 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh I do hope you plan on writing more detailed than that. Anyhow, pretty good I suppose. You need to work on breaking up your paragraphs more, work on sentence structure, grammar... It makes it a little difficult to read when you haven't applied these things very well.