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Wow. Normally, I'm a Hitachiincest kind of girl, but dang if this just isn't HOT! I will definitely be checking up on this story.

Awesome. I desire more, I've always liked H/K pairings.

KYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!

CONTINUE!!

PLEASE!!

I'M GETTING WITHDRAWEL AND IT HURTS X__X

feed me Kyouya smut please ;__;

oh common! smut is what fangirls live on and im going through withdrawel here! I kinda wonder how he's going to be in bed and i thought this was a haruxtwins story....unless you turn it into a kinda reverse harem thing which i have no objections to. ^_^ i like smut...and bishonen...and smuty bishonen makes me happy ^_^!

Write the smut!! Thank you....

Liked the second chapter! Good, sensual description. I really liked the way you described Haruhi in her undies... and am eagerly anticipating that same excellent detail when you get to a... uh... you know... scene. Yes. So keep it up.

Hi Angie, just read through what you have up so far. Good descriptions, and even though I've neither seen nor heard of O... er.. what was it? Yeah, even though I have no idea what anime it's based on, I still can't wait to see what you do with the sexy twins. They should get... uh... punished. A lot. For being so damn cheery. I'll literally jump up and down on my seat if you put some bdsm in here! Good work so far.

One thing... you might want to space your paragraphs a little more frequently, just to emphasize who's doing what and when. I don't know the characters so it's probably more confusing for me, but still... just a suggestion. And also, I noticed sometimes you had a 'to' instead of a 'too.' Easy mistake to make, just as easy to fix. Either way, loved it and keep writing!

Good start so far! Please update soon!

There is an excellent use of words here and the descriptions are outstanding when necessary. The first chapter does drag a bit and you do get the sense that there is nothing really happening here. The writing does show promise and a talent for detail but don't over do it. My advice is always to grab your readers attention from the very start. The writing needs to leave them wanting, thirsting for another taste.

Continue!!!