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"pleasepleasepleasepleasepleaseplease..." [ect] is a lot better than just "cool" and that's all she wrote (I get that one all the time, it's not ... much)).

Anyway.

I like this.

First fic I read.

Made me a L x Raito fan, strictly. I came in unsure who I could see on top. This fic decided.

Update.

Wow! Firstly, major kudos to you for keeping in line with the main story elements beautifully. I really appreciate how you've truly planned this out with everything falling into place nicely. It's pretty rare for me to read something this faithful to the tiniest details and it's definitely a real treat. I do hope you update with Chapter 6 soon! Thank you for taking the effort to write this!

P.S. May I strangle L too? XDD

*tears* noooo!! i want more! i finished this (minus the a/n) last night. this is so good! i love it so much, despite several mechanical errors (mostly shifting tenses). i really like the premise, and i'm very excited to see what will happen. this is the... oh. i was going to say first, but it's the second deathnote fic i've read. the other one was only a chapter and a half (a friend was writing it and asked me to look). i usually don't like characters being ooc, but i accept it when it's relevant and backed up. so far, light's the only one really ooc, and he's preggers and afraid for his life, so i forgive him. also, while i like the idea of ramos, she's driving me crazy. i do like that she's spanish (because i can understand most of what she's saying), but her suspicion of L is kinda annoying. i want her to figure out that he's not a gangster/criminal or have someone freaking tell her. and tarvian (spelling?) needs to die! he's so mean to those poor, defenseless animals! i couldn't believe the dog was dead! so sad... *sniffle* light was sort of scaring me at first, when he was coming up with/executing his plan. it was creepy! and L can't keep it up. that's hilarious. i can just picture him trying to explain to light. anyway... sorry this jumps everywhere and is so long. i'll stop now, but please keep writing!! i'm looking forward to more!!!!!!~

^.^ I really like this story. Everyone seems pretty in character for the most part, and I loved L's question of 'Wide load or thunder thighs'. :D Can't wait for the next chapter, but don't rush it! If it takes a while to get a good chapter out, then I'll just wait! *sits to wait in front of computer with cake and Death Note DVDs*

When are they going to get it on with each other?

I really liked this fic even though I'm not a fan of the series (like the characters, the show bored the hell out of me.) I love the fact Raito is the uke- as he should be.

I would like to point out your writing style though. I get the feeling it's more of a PWP than a story. At times, words like 'owie' and 'preggy' should not be used in a fic like this. Another- caps are a little over done at times. You also switch between present and past tense a lot and it makes it really confusing and hard to read. Other than that, just a few grammar errors.

But I still like this fic. It's well thought out and it has a nice flow. Raito is adorable. Love mpreg. That's a bonus.

this is a good story and i hope that you do write more

You were close on the dates and I didn't notice either way. Besides this is your story so go wild!
=)

Sorry to review again, but who is matt? I don't remember a matt in the Deathnote eps I watched. I am I going crazy? I looked up pictures of him and they aren't ring any bells. Sorry for the stupid question. <^_^>'

I really do enjoy your story. ^_^ I hope there will be an update soon, but don't rush it. Ideas flow in their own time. I have to say... I really love pregnant Raito. I'm really hoping that he starts wanting this baby too at some point...

Thanks!