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for Tomoyo's Deck

by Teller

person Pumpkin George
schedule January 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another sexy and fun chapter. Having Meilin in it was a great addition, hope she's a frequent addition to Tomoyo's assets! Interesting how Daidouji was the one to get Tomoyo and the girls into the Religion's trap, could we be seeing a shadow of things to come with an Incest card? One more thing, I get that Yuri and Yaoi and probably Hetero are three of the four powerful Elemental-like cards, but what's the fourth one? Furry or something? Can't wait to see the next chapter!
person Bishonen
schedule December 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was great i hope that the next chapter is the demoness I hope shes nice the last demoness i used in a story was anything but nice Barbelo was a bigger bitch than Religion speaking of which I’ve decided to convert.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
schedule December 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
A Religion Card? In a magical, perverted hentai deck? I never would have thought of that... good one.
I love yall's concepts (Tomoyo ravaging an older 'woman' with tentacles is an idea whose time has most certainty come), but some additional details in the sex scenes themselves would elevate the story from 'sexy' to 'damn sexy'. Oh, and good job keeping everyone as much IC as they can be, given what they're dealing with. That must be kinda hard to do.
person Teller
schedule December 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yes, I know I should have tried to drag it out more, maybe my next chapter will be better, I didn't want Teller to have to write a filler when I was half-done! And yes, Foot will probably make an appearance. I can't say when, because we have a lot of cards thought out, but after reading all of Motoko's Quest (that took forever, but it was a good forever), well, we might as well have a Foot card, right? I'm not sure what card Teller's got in the works for you, so be patient. The next chapter will get posted when it's done, like with all our chapters.
person Anon
schedule December 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh my stars this is so sexy, please you've GOT to make a Foot card in one chapter, seeing tomoyo and sakura and meilin doing that one would be a dream come true!!!
person Bishonen
schedule December 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I had kind of thought about suggesting a foot card and I gotta say that would be so fucking hot I’d love to see that.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
person Teller
schedule December 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yes, yes, we're working on the next chapter, there will be a futa card (hopefully soon) and as for the Yaoi...I'm leavin' that one to Teller. The real world has been depriving me of computer time and whatnot.
person Taku
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey! Great job on this story! I find myself checking for updates daily. Oh, as a sugestion about your The yaio problem, In the erotic deck there should always be a futa card right?
person Bishonen
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's okay but i hope that a new chapter is posted soon and i like the futa card idea.

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
person Pumpkin Bob
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like that you're taking time to respond to your reviewers. That's nice of you.

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