rate_review Reviews

Wow, this was very well written dude. Also, it's rather funny as well. "The motherfucking Bahamas!" lmfao. Good one. I really don't know what else to tell ya. You're an excellent writer.

My friend just raves about your work Sinners, being the short attention span person that I am though, I decided to start off with this short story instead. Mostly to deliberate based on your writing, whether it would be worth my time to sit through. Sadly I didn't come to the same conclusion my friend did, though perhaps it's because this is a short story and NOT the original. The beginning was predictable and I felt the characters rambled on too much on what I considered irrelevant. I must add that the sex scene wasn't bad, even though it's unrealistic, for it had a nice rhythm despite it's redundant use of description in areas. All in all, it was an interesting concept idea that I feel could use some improvement. Thank you very much for your effort and time. I wish you the best of luck with your writing career.

Linette Bird

Cute, funny, sexy, and totally delicious are the four adjectives that would describe this little sidestory of yummy naughtiness. Yeah, not much of a review, but hey.

Now, to stop messing around and continue reading through Sinners!

1. holy fucking asscrackers, the tightness in slash's jeans is something I've felt far too often... I worry when my woman brings a lolipop home.....

2. I love a good halloween oneshot, and this story brought out the child/sick bastard in me

3. since I do have some lolipops around, I'll test this idea you have out for you slash, savvy?

Josh Palmer---I should make a character Q+A sometime, answering some common questions about the main characters. Like, "does Gardevoir own a vibrator?" and "does Gardevoir use a vibrator?".

jalapeno on a stick---You know what would be hot? Spray cheese.

I am kidding, of course. Although spray cheese IS yummy. It's just not arousing-yummy, heh.

Dante Inferna---Watson is also very perceptive about naughty, naughty things. Oh ho ho.

Slash is a horrible liar.
He gets that "I-Just-Did-Something-So-Painfully-Obvious-Look"
when talking to Watson.

you may not have tested candy/lolipops but a fat man such as my self actually has:D depending on the brand(weird aint it) you can get different reactions and lifesaver gummies work the best candy wise but my favorite is a GF-sunday:D:D:Dlots of choc syrup and ice cream (dont forget cream whipped and non) and cherries make a great orgasm ender (im a pimp biotch live with it)

That was a entertaining Oneshot =D. And lol at the Q&A.

Sirnight777---Yeah, I'm of the belief that the word pussy isn't very erotic and try to avoid it whenever possible. And cunt's just too vulgar for a loving situation, so I rarely, if ever, use it. There's enough of a lemony vocabulary to compensate, heheh.

I do highly recommend reading Sinners when you have time...not just because I like to brag about how swell it is, but also because it's a lot better than this oneshot...which, despite its positive reviews and high ratings, is still just a simple and quickly-written oneshot.

Thanks for the review! :3

It was a 'sweet' story *brick'd*. In all seriousness it was a great lemon, and one of the better humanxpokemon fics I've read. One thing that makes you stand above the others is the fact that you don't just say 'cunt' and 'pussy' all the time. I don't know why everyone seems to think those are the only terms for it. I haven't read Sinners yet(since I'm pressed for time), but after reading this I'm looking forward to it.

P.S.: Damn that lucky little blowpop, and damn you for blowing my garde-fic out of the water.