rate_review Reviews

This is one of the funniest, most perceptive stories I've read in a long time.

And where does this leave Gojyo? Maybe Hakkai can pick up the pieces of his broken heart...

chapters 8 and 9 - Still very good stuff ... but... these two chapters felt a little disjointed. i almost felt like i missed a chapter, or missed some things in the previous chapter. not anything big and important, just some details. maybe it's because the story is serialized and there's too much time between readings? not that i'm saying you need to write or post faster - certainly not - you take your time - just that the nature of a serial is that there is time between readings.

by the way, i love the titles of the chapters. thank you for writing and posting!

I really love how sanzo rationalised everything before speaking and causing another riff in his shaky relationship with goku and he accepted that he does have some things that have to be worked on from within himself. And goku explaining his actions as best as he could without getting confrontational about how sanzo treats him on rainy days or any bad day he may encounter along the way, I look forward to your next update.

What a chapter. To think that Gojyo had actually beaten Sanzo. Sanzo! With words! Gojyo, of all people!

Wow.

To Sanzo's credit he actually has a very leveled head when it comes to complicated situations, however he doesn't seem to show this aspect very well when it comes to dealing with his own emotions -I think that you've demonstrated this very well. Gojyo has never been an angry person, if anything I think he might be the most patient of the group, nor has he ever been very deadly, so in trade of this I think that many underestimate him. This is what I found to be the gem of the chapter, how you've managed to show Gojyo's intelligence and will when push comes to shove, whilst still doing it in a very Gojyo way. To this I say bravo.

And the added humor is always a welcome. It, somehow, puts this whole problem at an easier pace and reminds us that, although things have been rough as of late, their relationship with each other will still hold strong; no matter what. Brilliant, as usual, with the only fault being that it was short.

~Fall

Wow that was certainly worth the wait i'm immensely enjoying this story you have captured my attention from now until the last chapter gets posted up to this story.
And as much as sanzo deserved that wake up call i kinda felt bad that he decked goyjo the way that he did.
And now hakkai has to heal goyjo's eye.

This is a great fic. You know what would really throw a wrench in the works and throw everyone for a curve ... let Goku tell off both Sanzo (taking advantage of him emotionally) and Gojyo (taking advantage of him sexually)and go for Hakkai (the only one who has really been nice to him) ... then Sanzo can take it out on Gojyo (hmmm ... Sanzo dominating Gojyo to let him see what it was like for Goku that first night???)

Mofaf1

They were morbidly embarrassed, huh?
That they were fighting over Goku?
That's just...sad, for lack of a better word, but what makes it even more so is that this would be the most probable outcome for the situation.

Hakkai and Goku's talk was really refreshing in its bluntness. I guess that's what makes your writing so easy to read, how straight forward and yet insightful it is.

I won't ask of a particular pairing because I love your story and I don't care where it ends up, because I know that whatever you do, it'll still be great at the end. Just continue!

~Fall

chapter 6 - wow. the last lines there - quite unexpected. and GOOD. the sex was wonderfully written as well, no frills, nothing cheesy romance about it, everything honest and dirty. left my heart pounding a bit. and then slam! headtrip with the internal thoughts from Gojyo. you've given him a great voice. Goku too. such a weird pairing for me, but you are making it work. i think it is the honesty in the characters. thank you.

chapter 7 - sometimes i find that the best stories were never intended as such. i think it happens because it then, when the author is not really trying so hard, that the characters can speak and act for themselves. the story just happens and you let it because you as the writer were not attached to anything preconceived. you are not pushing and pulling the characters or manipulating the events to make other planned things make sense. You are just going where the characters and story leads. and then before you know it you are one step ahead of them and i control. sort of.

anyway, another short but good chapter. i am loving that Goku still loves Sanzo. the grain of sand metaphor was great. and i think that Goku's unwavering love, unconditional love for Sanzo does not make his feelings for Gojyo any less. and i think this is something that these 4 will realize - and i think it may even be prevalent in the canon - it's that they all have special unique relationships with each other - none better or less than the others, just different.

and what exactly do Hakkai and Sanzo do when they are holed up in their room together? my my, the wicked things that come to mind ...