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June 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm really enjoying this story i've reread all the chapters at least 3x already and it just keeps getting better.
But what i want to know is will sanzo and goku stay together and have some type of relationship?
And the same thing with hakkai and goyjo? Will goyjo and hakkai try to establish a relationship or just remain friends?
But what i want to know is will sanzo and goku stay together and have some type of relationship?
And the same thing with hakkai and goyjo? Will goyjo and hakkai try to establish a relationship or just remain friends?
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June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sex, hot
After glow, fangirl worthy
GojyoxGokuxGojyo, priceless (great, I now sound like a MasterCard commercial -aussie thing)
There were some missing comers here and there and I think that you have some typos here and there.
It's refreshing to see that Gojyo acknowledges the fact that, indeed, Goku had found someone else a long time ago, five-hundred years to be exact. And it's saddening to know that Gojyo realizes that he can't love someone in that aspect. This is the point where readers start to throw pity at the characters, especially at Gojyo but the way in which he addressed the situation did not call for pity, rather amiability. I find it hard, however, to figure out whether he's fighting for Goku out of Goku's sake or his own.
Gojyo is putting a lot on the line at the moment and he does it so easily that I can't help but hope that he ends up with Goku. He may not know how to love but he's getting there.
...so bring the next chapter already!
~Fall
After glow, fangirl worthy
GojyoxGokuxGojyo, priceless (great, I now sound like a MasterCard commercial -aussie thing)
There were some missing comers here and there and I think that you have some typos here and there.
It's refreshing to see that Gojyo acknowledges the fact that, indeed, Goku had found someone else a long time ago, five-hundred years to be exact. And it's saddening to know that Gojyo realizes that he can't love someone in that aspect. This is the point where readers start to throw pity at the characters, especially at Gojyo but the way in which he addressed the situation did not call for pity, rather amiability. I find it hard, however, to figure out whether he's fighting for Goku out of Goku's sake or his own.
Gojyo is putting a lot on the line at the moment and he does it so easily that I can't help but hope that he ends up with Goku. He may not know how to love but he's getting there.
...so bring the next chapter already!
~Fall
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June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I’ll be the first to admit that I don’t review stories as much as I should. I’ll also admit that it takes a lot to make me sit up and take attention while reading something. Well, guess what? You’re little story here has made me do both. When I first started reading this when it had one or two chapters I thought, “Okay, something nice and smutty to pass the time. Sounds good to me.” Who the hell knew it’d be something so much more? You tricked me, you evil, delightful person!
I can’t say what I love more about this story. It’s hard to put into words, really. For something that has short chapters you put so much thought and depth into some of the scenes and words it’s hard not to your sink your teeth into it and hold on for all it’s worth. The sex scenes are wonderful and satisfying, the developing relationship between Gojyo and Goku is just beautiful, yet sad at the same time (what with this last chapter), the reactions of Sanzo and Hakkai are more than believable, the humor and timing are so on spot it’s rather refreshing really, and gah! I can just go on and on!
I think all that’s left to say is that I thoroughly love this. Your writing is just pure beauty in the form of words. I can’t wait for more and thank you for giving me a treat that is such a delightful surprise and I hope you continue with the great work. (Was that too over the top?)
I can’t say what I love more about this story. It’s hard to put into words, really. For something that has short chapters you put so much thought and depth into some of the scenes and words it’s hard not to your sink your teeth into it and hold on for all it’s worth. The sex scenes are wonderful and satisfying, the developing relationship between Gojyo and Goku is just beautiful, yet sad at the same time (what with this last chapter), the reactions of Sanzo and Hakkai are more than believable, the humor and timing are so on spot it’s rather refreshing really, and gah! I can just go on and on!
I think all that’s left to say is that I thoroughly love this. Your writing is just pure beauty in the form of words. I can’t wait for more and thank you for giving me a treat that is such a delightful surprise and I hope you continue with the great work. (Was that too over the top?)
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June 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow that was very intense and i enjoyed reading every line and than some they would make a perfect couple (if i weren't in so much in love with my 39).But i love how you are bringing out different sides to this relationship you write them very well together i look forward to your next post and some more smexy from these 2.^___~
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June 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The story is going well but to be honest I'd like to see Gojyo lose Goku to Sanzo ... after Sanzo let Gojyo know how Goku felt that first night .... I'm sure he can find a way to bind him long enough to do that while Hakkai and Goku spend some time getting stocked up on food ... and Goku getting fed.
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Although, next to beautiful, thorny vines and poisonous violet flowers, a sunflower tended to be overlooked for its unabashed cheerfulness. As if being happy meant you lacked depth. -That line was beautiful and so true. I've seen so many authors and so many fanfictions and none of them managed to capture THAT.
I've seen people address Goku with mature thoughts and a diametric and empathetic personality before, however you've done it so well. You've managed to incorporate his cheerfulness and slow pace thinking with what's under the surface, giving so much sense to your story and his character.
Also I'm starting to see how Gojyo and Goku's relationship could work. The circumstances that you've addressed works for their pairing brilliantly!
Update soon!
~Fall
I've seen people address Goku with mature thoughts and a diametric and empathetic personality before, however you've done it so well. You've managed to incorporate his cheerfulness and slow pace thinking with what's under the surface, giving so much sense to your story and his character.
Also I'm starting to see how Gojyo and Goku's relationship could work. The circumstances that you've addressed works for their pairing brilliantly!
Update soon!
~Fall
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June 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4 - witty, clever, tense, unexpected, and thoroughly enjoyable. the paragraph or segment with the both of them standing and yelling, then quiet down an sit, that had just great timing. the segments each flowed like a natural conversation and as a reader i feel like i was right there with the two of them trying to figure out the Gojyo/Goku connection. i find it is not a pairing that you see often and seeing as it started out in this story as just PWP but now the story is something more, as a reader i, much like Sanzo and Hakkai, am wondering how it got here, where is it going and how will get there? (i'm also wondering if there will be Sanzo/Hakkai sex, but i'm trying to remain critical here and not be all fangirly. ... ... so yeah about that Sanzo/Hakkai sex -)
i think Sanzo and Hakkai are having believable reactions. i think they are within character, although i am not sure about the drunk Sanzo. as much i like Sanzo when he is written drunk, usually, i also tend to think that Sanzo is not the type to allow himself to get drunk, at least not easliy or often. it makes him too vulnerable. but still he was not a bad drunk Sanzo.
looking forward to more. thank you for writing and posting!
i think Sanzo and Hakkai are having believable reactions. i think they are within character, although i am not sure about the drunk Sanzo. as much i like Sanzo when he is written drunk, usually, i also tend to think that Sanzo is not the type to allow himself to get drunk, at least not easliy or often. it makes him too vulnerable. but still he was not a bad drunk Sanzo.
looking forward to more. thank you for writing and posting!
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June 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aww, poor Sanzo. Poor Hakkai. So, I'm guessing no one's nuts will be hacked off any time soon? Good to know. I do love that redhead and the thought of him and Goku...well...let's just say that that particular pairing is not one to be admitted outloud
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June 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow i like what i've read so far . hakkai and sanzo sort of bonding over their missing companions even through they left of their own free will,for fear of sanzo killing them both possibly? can't wait for the next post to go up
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June 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sanzo and Hakkai were in perfect character.
Most people would just have Sanzo "own" Goku and left it at that but when you added "What am I suppose to do with him?" you gave your story so much more depth.
Normally Hakkia swearing is very out of character but your timing was very good on that, so much so that it seemed very in character.
And having Sanzo admit (partially) that it was partly his fault, really has me thinking what he's going to do when he finds Goku and Gojyo; who's going to end up with who?
Oh, and drunk Sanzo had me on the floor laughing xD
Both of them were very insightful and that made it so that it didn't seem as if it was only Gojyo and Goku who where victims.
Sanzo can't wait for this to be over but I don't.
Update soon.
~Fall
Most people would just have Sanzo "own" Goku and left it at that but when you added "What am I suppose to do with him?" you gave your story so much more depth.
Normally Hakkia swearing is very out of character but your timing was very good on that, so much so that it seemed very in character.
And having Sanzo admit (partially) that it was partly his fault, really has me thinking what he's going to do when he finds Goku and Gojyo; who's going to end up with who?
Oh, and drunk Sanzo had me on the floor laughing xD
Both of them were very insightful and that made it so that it didn't seem as if it was only Gojyo and Goku who where victims.
Sanzo can't wait for this to be over but I don't.
Update soon.
~Fall