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Well, that was horribly short, and I should know, 15 minutes for that? More like 10. Anywho, I suppose taking into consideration the length, deducted from the over all volume after factoring grammar, spelling, and production. I'm afraid your score total is a 5.57 out of 10.

Of course, this rating scale is only when people actualy try, so your actual score may vary by one or two points in the negative direction.

Semper phi, carry on.

PS, thank you, people kept bothering me to do an Ash/Flannery fic.

Good grief, this was short! --; I like this pairing personally. It's one of my favorites. ;) Still, it could have been longer...

Lol I loved how Flannery took the driving seat but youve got to explain more about the location (where is it? Pallet Town or Lavaridge Town?)
And how they got there and was there any purpose (e.g Ash coudlve been visiting Flannery or vice versa)
Also you might want to try adding a bit of foreplay...loving someone doesnt just mean sex....some kissing or fondling before the whole thing might just help

Good job anyways considering the amount of time you spent but you rushed it....

No. Just... no.

i'm glad this was finally done, and its written well to. the only problem is that its way too short.