rate_review Reviews

This was very cute and very believeable. :D

This story was too adorable! In the good way of course. You pinned Gojyo and Hakkai's characters down extremely well, and I LOVED the ending. You did a wonderful job with it... really, this seems like a perfectly canon story about how Hakuryu came into the picture. I can just imagine it in the manga! The only problems I saw were with the occasional comma... sometimes they were used a little too often in the middle of the sentence where they didn't belong, but other than that, your grammar and all was perfect. This story is now definitely a favorite of mine!

Excellent, as always. You come up with such interesting things.