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September 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I read the whole thing and have a few comments.
Mugen's dialogue was a little less Mugen-esque than I would have liked. Fuu was decent, but Mugen wasn't as strong, cocky, and rugged as I was expecting. And Fuu getting Haruka's sloppy seconds was a little sad for me. Liked the plot though - that wasn't bad. They came to a commitment a little fast, but it's smut. There were a few grammatical errors, and it seemed like the lemon became tediously descriptive, which actually detracted from the hotness of the situation.
7 out of 10 stars.
Mugen's dialogue was a little less Mugen-esque than I would have liked. Fuu was decent, but Mugen wasn't as strong, cocky, and rugged as I was expecting. And Fuu getting Haruka's sloppy seconds was a little sad for me. Liked the plot though - that wasn't bad. They came to a commitment a little fast, but it's smut. There were a few grammatical errors, and it seemed like the lemon became tediously descriptive, which actually detracted from the hotness of the situation.
7 out of 10 stars.
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June 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Very good, hot smut!
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February 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great one-shot, the sex was awesome and so was the portrayal of Mugen/Fuu. Well done!
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January 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
heheh i'm not a fan of m/f pairings, but this was really good. I do like this pairing a little and your fic was very hot and enjoyable. I liked it a lot. thanks for writing it.