rate_review Reviews

Your sentences are a bit vague at times, and your grammatical structure could use a little work, but altogether, not bad. =) You've pretty much captured Ritsuka's inner torment over the way Soubi wants to be loved; abusively, possessively. Besides that, I rather like the idea of Ritsuka being the dominant lover. Very nice touch.

I really enjoyed this fic. The emotions of the two of them was well protrayed. I also enjoyed the love scene at the end. It was well written, meaning it was descriptive, but not over the top. Does that make sense? Especially liked the fact that Soubi was still coming down from his high to hear the opening of the drawer. It was very realistic. Most people describe every act, every feeling, but they do not realize at certain times (like that one) there is now no thought, just a state of bliss. Gabby