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for Sinners: Arc 2

by Stormborn Apostle

person ConcernedReader
schedule August 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I read the ED article and that was pretty ridiculous. I am sorry, but I had to toss some lulz at it a couple times, the gaudy epic style the thing was written in was just kinda hilarious. Ive been reading your story on and off since you began Arc 2, after a friend said I should take a look at it, and Ive been pleased by your work ever since. I don't wanna add another 80 million paragraph pixel wasting discourse to the book that is your review page. SO I would like to say to not let those sickening idiots in the world ruin your literary morale. You don't seem to be the type to get discouraged by people, but just in case, regardless of how much ED and those TRUE retarded stinging hornets that are internet trolls hate you. We at AFF love yah, amirite?. You keep chugging them out and we'll keep reading them. I wouldn't want a bunch of irritating people and their superfluous comments get you flustered. -My regards. Concerned reader
person RoboRed
schedule August 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Switching gears for a moment, I was re-reading the most recent two chapters, and I remembered this picture:

http://agnph.com/gallery/albums/userpics/14282/normal_sir2chbyuranoyoruWarriors.png

Possibly Miyako fighting The Shadow and its offspring?
schedule August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
RoboRed---Heh. Well, when the character does die, just hope nobody remembers that I mentioned that. :-D

Max---My headphones are fucked up now, so I can only hear porn in one ear. :'(

RoboRed, Anon---I'd Limewire the song, but I'm kinda lazy at the moment, lol.

Ragdoll---Sad scene coming up (probably in 25 and not 24), although obviously the story won't be ending soon. Although even if it was going to end in six story months, it would take me a few FUCKING YEARS TO DO IT (one month has taken over a year thus far, lol).

My livejournal occasionally has major spoilers, since I sort of use it to talk to myself and the whole three or four people who spy on it, so I wouldn't recommend anyone who wants big surprises to check it out. If it ever becomes widely viewed, I might just lie a lot on it to hide my true plans. :-D

Enjoi-Kurbai---Hm, I did, didn't I? Heh.

The Second Storyteller's got some interesting cats to let out of bags.

Knight---Glad you like it. Arc 2 will mostly be tense for the rest of it, then Arc 3 will be lots of traveling and fighting, Arc 4 will be holy-shitty, and Arc 5 (the Arc I want to write the most) will be very sad. Gotta hurry up...

Imasuky Lomae---All I'll say is that the Shadow is not an OC character; however, it's so Slash-i-fied that it may not immediately be recognizable (like Watson's backstory, which, as far as I know, is totally non-canon). Hints have been dropped already (an old plotmail I sent out with a Childe Roland-esque poem was the biggest hint), and it'll be pretty clear soon enough (like when the Second Storyteller outright identifies it).

Splenge---Well, it actually caused me to do MORE work, but it saved me from waiting until the last minute to do it, lol.

POWER OF LOVE WILL NOT SAVE YOU, LOL. THIS IS NOT POKEMONS ANIME. FRIENDSHIP DOES NOT GIVE YOU 1.5x BOOST OR PITY BADGES OR CURSE-BREAKING. :-(

Taonakku---Glad you like it. The story gives me a lot to think about, as well---lately the plot has dominated my thoughts and prevented me from dreaming about anything else...

chaoslord---The time limit has been in the planning for a while, although as I've previously mentioned, it was originally scripted to cause a much larger fight than the one in 22 (too large, really).

1. Forbidden, a Star Wars slashfic by Raythe, formed the original inspiration for Sinners (link in my profile's Recommended Reading section). The nature of light and dark (specifically that they're not synonyms for good and evil), the bond, the theme of having a love despised by not just most of the world, but nearly all of it...it's a damn good read and this story would not exist without it.

In terms of the larger themes of Sinners, the Dark Tower books form a good deal of inspiration...other worlds than these, laws of reality breaking down under certain conditions...hell, the concept of ka (a sort of passive fate) is all but labeled later.

2. Well, for Pokeballs, there are multiple stasis settings---mental stasis (no perception of time) or sensory input ('seeing' and being aware of what's going on, mainly for battles), and higher-end Pokeballs have limited physical stasis capabilities (though normal Pokeballs, such as what Slash currently uses, have virtually no physical stasis abilities). The Pokemon inside the balls aren't converted into data like in PC storage, but are in a state more like miniaturization (poison still moves, hunger and thirst still need to be addressed), and even the top-of-the-line balls can perhaps only halve those needs.

Pokeballs are also far more personalized than commonly shown in the games and anime. Identification information, health ratings, stuff like that can be displayed on the ball (a small little screen on it, with connection to computers allowing more details). No other Pokemon can be stored in a ball already registered to another; official release can only occur at Pokemon Centers and under supervision (to prevent abandonment as much as possible).

3. Originally started as just...something I felt like writing. Like I said, Forbidden got a lot of ideas swirling in my head, but the original setup was made to range from shortish lemon to long-ass novel (obviously ended up being the latter, lol). Don't be afraid to use other sources for inspiration; just put enough of yourself in it to make it yours...or, if the inspiration is really heavy, attribute it in author's notes or whatnot.

Satoku---In the original plan for the curse, where Slash hides his contract from Psymakio until after Fallarbor, Psymakio was so outraged that she temporarily deactivated the bond (something she won't be capable of in the current version), the logic being that there's no reason for the bond if he's able and willing to hide things from her. It was going to be very sad and much more...loud.

Thankfully it ended up being brief and (relatively) less intense.

I tend to have a detailed outline for the next/current chapter, and lots of future-notes in various text documents. I have a notepad document for time stuff (moon phases, weather, travel times, etc), for important locations to be visited/revisited (the desert, in particular, has a couple), but no "outline for Arc 5, chapter 3" or anything, just a basic summary for each arc (which are constantly changing as I write). I can't really plan detailed chapters ahead of time, because I drift a little when I write (such as Flannery's intimate relationship with Blaziken) and can't be sure what'll be in place at the end of my current chapter.

I usually overwrite my chapter outlines for each new one, and often delete previous plot points as I write them for less clutter, so there really aren't any outlines for previous chapters, lol.

Also, lol at time delay. Yes, Silver is a mix of the GSC rival and the son of Giovanni from the manga (which I didn't actually read, just read about on Bulbapedia, heh).

Max---Haven't read them. If I remember, I'll take a look for them next time I'm at the bookstore.

Rozell---Glad you like it, and I intend to rock on with it for quite some time, heh.
person Max
schedule August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
First book is "Wizard's First Rule". As I should have told you, it's in the fanstasy/swords and sorcery genre type. I assume that won't be a problem. It's very moral (in that it's pretty easy to see the author's moral viewpoint through the characters, but still contrasts with other characters of differing viewpoints).

Oh and... (cough) how far are you on the next chapter? :D
person Anon
schedule August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Just finished reading your massive story front to back, and I gotta say, wow, I'm really floored. Your writing style is refreshingly unique, and my vocabulary increased, like, ten words just from reading it. (Not that I'll be using any of them during parties, but, you know) I've always been a sucker for romance stories (not the most manliest of hobbies, I admit), and yours and only one other has lifted my spirits to almost delusional levels. In a good way, of course.

One thing I wanna ask, though, is that you say you have no knowledge of the Pokemon franchise past Emerald. Then how do you know about Pokemon like Rotom, who were introduced in Diamond/Pearl? Just some minor research on the subject?

Oh, and, I saw that you mentioned you were a fan of Encyclopedia Dramatica a little ways up this page (thank goodness it lived, huh? Warriors of Lulz are victorious again!) I didn't bother reading the reviews past "ew, it's Pokeporn, that makes the whole story invalid", but I at least understood, from what you said, that someone insinuated that there was going to be an ED article on you? Well, just today, I decided to give it a search, and sure enough...

Just in case you haven't seen it, http://www.encyclopediadramatica.com/Slash_Firestorm

Typical of EDiots, it's full of bias, but I still just wanted to mention it to you - any publicity is good publicity, right?
person Hallation
schedule August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Regarding that ED article..

Christ, I stay out of INTERNET FIGHTS, but bloody hell...

Jack Nativity is fucking butthurt more than a shota raped by a bull walrus. Honestly. Let the shitty writer keep writing shitty. Some people like shit.
person Ragdoll
schedule August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that article must have taken a lot of time an effort.

And yeah, I was hoping you had a way to pull Slash out of it. As a musician, I understand that your muse pretty much dictates everything, but killing off a member of the trinity so quickly might be, for want of a lesser cliche, "killing the golden goose".
schedule August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Max---Finished outlining it, currently 5000 words in.

Anon---lol, I was seriously considering signing up to AFF with a 'female' pen name, since I was intending to write quite a bit of romance stuff, but decided against it. I ain't ashamed of being a romance writer...I write plenty of lemon stuff to balance it out, in any case.

Although, if I ever write an original romance for publishing, I might insist on a female pen name, lol.

Serebii and Bulbapedia are the only sources of fourth-gen data that I got. By the time I can afford a DS and Diamond/Pearl/Platinum, the fifth generation will be out. :-(

And yeah, someone informed me about it, lol.

Hallation---Now, now. It was someone else who threatened to write it (though I don't remember who, and it might have been another incarnation of another spammer). Besides, like I said, I'm flattered---I've been an ED fan for a long while, and the fact that someone actually gave enough a shit to sit down and write something about me is a testament to my fame/infamy (either one suits me fine). Like above anon said, any publicity is good publicity.

Ragdoll---I try to fight my muse for the bad stuff (though I usually lose), but thankfully it's not stupid enough to kill the male protagonist in Arc 2, lol. Now, are other character deaths in the cards? Yes, I can outright say that now. But considering my update pace, it'll be a long ways away. :-D
person Satoku
schedule August 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Also,

HOLY FUCK

'SILVER'

RED HAIR

SECOND GEN RIVAL

I JUST NOW MADE THE CONNECTION

AND I READ THAT CHAPTER LIKE A WEEK AGO

/caps lock
person Max
schedule August 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, and Slash: before I forget (again) have you read the Sword of Truth Novels by Terry Goodkind? This seems... similar and yet not.

If you haven't read them you damn well should. They're big books and there's 11 of them, but it's my all-time favorite story. Ever. I think you'd like it.

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