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June 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
^ Which someone just spent their time looking up on Bulbapedia. (I happened to read the same article earlier)
I think it was just fillers in the for anime for effect. Besides, Misty's Staryu has counter, which it can't normally learn. However, counter can also be interpreted as an action, but anyhoo, whatever.
I think it was just fillers in the for anime for effect. Besides, Misty's Staryu has counter, which it can't normally learn. However, counter can also be interpreted as an action, but anyhoo, whatever.
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June 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
"PS: We gotta get this in comic form, IT WOULD BE FUCKING EPIC"
Agreed.
Agreed.
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June 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
If Slash did that he'd go find an artist on DeviantArt or something. He can't draw well enough to do it by himself and he admits it. :(
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June 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
First off, DAMN YOU NOT PSYMAKIO. AND A CLIFFHANGER! ARGHHHHHH!
Ok to be fair, its a great point for a cliffhanger, i just wanna keep reading :(
Oh, the red haired guy, i hafta ask, since it aint lance is he present in any of the games? If so i think i know who it could be, and that would be fucking awesome, as i havnt seen ANYONE use him in a Fanfic. (will email my thoughts)
About Flannery
FUCK YES, fucking awesome in its own right. Loving the plot (and sex scene) possibilities with that whole situation. Though im wondering about the whole jealousy thing between our favorite couple if an orgy ensues.
Oh, made this before, i got bored. What u think?
http://www.pokecharms.com/trainercards/cards/1942008/9724bf94aaaf6595bb85e341779375a1.png
All i got, WRITE FASTER DAMMIT!!!
PS: We gotta get this in comic form, IT WOULD BE FUCKING EPIC
Ok to be fair, its a great point for a cliffhanger, i just wanna keep reading :(
Oh, the red haired guy, i hafta ask, since it aint lance is he present in any of the games? If so i think i know who it could be, and that would be fucking awesome, as i havnt seen ANYONE use him in a Fanfic. (will email my thoughts)
About Flannery
FUCK YES, fucking awesome in its own right. Loving the plot (and sex scene) possibilities with that whole situation. Though im wondering about the whole jealousy thing between our favorite couple if an orgy ensues.
Oh, made this before, i got bored. What u think?
http://www.pokecharms.com/trainercards/cards/1942008/9724bf94aaaf6595bb85e341779375a1.png
All i got, WRITE FASTER DAMMIT!!!
PS: We gotta get this in comic form, IT WOULD BE FUCKING EPIC
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June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this is great
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June 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Will this story have a happy ending, or at least a half sad half happy one? or one where Gardie and Slash suvrive? Oh and THIS IS THE BEST STORY EVER!!!!!!!!
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May 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hi again. This should be (slightly) less of an essay than my last review, but it still merits some headers.
REGARDING REVIEW RESPONSE
Slash, I must say, I was impressed with your responses. Your description of the dark immunity to psychic not only cements its plot importance, but also succeeds in making it believable. It's long been clear that you've had a long term plan for this story, and this kind of clear plan is comforting to me. On a related note, I am now quite comfortable with Kiako's defeat at the hands of Giovanni.
I still take issue with ground being totally immune to lightning, based on my original argument about ancillary effects. If the lightning is strong enough, it basically adds a fire attack (heat from the plasma channel) and a sonic or physical attack (rapid expansion from the plasma channel) on top of the electrical attack. Do remember how Rotom's weaker lightning left the mud "blackened and smoldering", while the stronger lightning completely vaporized it.
Types are usually convenient classifications, and in some cases such as psychic and dark I can see how they can be qualitative, but in other cases they're merely quantitative. What makes the Selfdestruct or Explosion attack "normal" type rather than fire type? It's a matter of degree. A flash fire pokemon would probably have no trouble surviving a fire blast, but what if, hypothetically, that fire blast were being delivered by a legendary pokemon? Would not the pokemon be just a little beaten up by the blast part?
While we're on the topic of classification, what separates a fighting type physical attack from a normal type physical attack, or even a flying type physical attack? I believe we would agree that it's simply a difference in delivery, and not necessarily some special damage class. Your take on ground versus flying seems to support this conclusion.
Speaking of the mud, I never did understand, physically, how Corphish produced such a tremendous mass of mud. I mean he covered an arena, thick. Can there be magic in pokemon?
REGARDING SINNERS CHAPTER 21
The end of a story or chapter is what leaves the most vivid impression, and I'll start by saying, um, wow. I'm sorry to say I'm not impressed here. I do however find myself second guessing the disappointment I will be expressing; the flood of positive reviews after you posted the chapter gives me pause. Maybe it's just me that's overreacting.
I'll start with the good. Flannery's connection with Blaziken was especially intriguing to me because it's another example of a normal human telepathically communicating with a nonpsychic pokemon, supporting the hints that "it used to be like this". It's also a more powerful example, considering the circumstances surrounding Watson's connection with Rotom, which is potentially explained by Rotom's fairly unique nature. The voice in the desert that refered to Psymakio as Miyako was a pretty powerful development. Slash sensing the cacturne was also a powerful development. I enjoyed the leadup, the insight into Slash's philosophy, the sandshrew's cave, the plot development, and overall this was a very productive and enjoyable chapter. Then things started to fall apart.
POISON
Before we get into the plot, I'd like to point out that you're making poison a bit more dangerous than it is in the game. Abilities like Toxic already make poison one of the most dangerous types in the game, but it's one thing to expend an action to severely poison a target, and quite another to get a free chance to inflict what appears to be severe poisoning (as though delivered by Toxic) on anything that touches you. The poisoning would by definition have to be severe, since it's been implied that it won't be manageable for long on healing medicine alone. Just be aware of the power balance, and keep asking yourself questions such as why more people in the world you're crafting aren't using the apparently overpowered poison pokemon such as cacturne. There must be some serious weakness?
I need to point out now, no matter how much Psymakio dislikes being in her pokeball, that is probably precisely where she should be to slow down the toxic progression. From what I gather from your mythology, pokemon are slowed into a sort of stasis or hibernation in their pokeballs. From what I know from the game, toxic poison only acts like regular poison when a pokemon is in their pokeball.
Side question: how is the telepathic relay for Slash and the rest of the pokemon still active? I could actually understand if it was an energy drain, a "system" she could simply "turn on", but Psymakio was very clear about it being a matter of concentration, a mental faculty I would imagine wouldn't be focusing on that right now.
PLOT
I did state in my last review that bad things would happen, but I expected them to happen with the same artful elegance that has permeated the story so far. The recent season finale of House MD, intentionally designed to emotionally abuse the audience, was more elegantly executed than this. I don't have a problem with drama, but I do have a problem with drama solely for the sake of drama.
After the almost comically absurd confrontation with the cacturne (enhanced by the aggressors trying to pile into the little cave like some sort of clown car), I found myself asking "well gee, how the hell does ANYBODY survive this desert?". This is an unfortunate question to be asking myself in the middle of a story, because that's the sound of suspension of disbelief breaking. The sound in this case is one of shattering glass. Why? Because it's nonsensical for vital antidotes intended for use in dangerous situations to be stored in fragile glass vials in a completely unprotected box. Maybe they need to be stored in glass so they don't react with their container, but in that case, at the very least, the box itself should be made of plastic.
Maybe I'm subconsciously more enraged right now at being forced to acknowledge that many such things are often so poorly thought out in real life as well. Nevertheless, I do feel the need to state that the durability of glass, especially proper borosilicate glass as used in science and medicine, is often grossly underestimated. It seems mighty unlikely to have had EVERY antidote vial break.
That the healing medicine entirely survived but the curing antidotes entirely didn't just adds further comical insult to injury. I've never seen Finagle's Law caricatured quite this amazingly. If you absolutely HAD to do it the way you did, then it would have been more acceptible and believable if most of the healing medicine had also been mysteriously nuked in the confrontation. Remember, it's not the direction of the plot that bothers me so much as it is the coherence and consistency.
It is at this point evident that, while you knew far ahead of time WHAT you wanted to happen in the story, you had no idea HOW you were going to make it happen, which is what was so delaying this chapter. Unfortunately, it appears you never successfully figured it out.
I still look forward to future chapters. I understand why things fell apart like they did thanks to writer's block. I'll just be happy after you've picked up the pieces and we can all move on. If nothing else I'd like to see Slash learn from this experience, and start storing his vital and fragile pharmaceuticals in a sturdy protective case. Seeing this happen once is bad enough, but letting it happen again would just be stupid.
Sorry about another review that's mostly negativity even though the overall chapter itself was mostly positive. I just feel I don't need to explain why something is good, but I do need to explain why something is bad. This whole personality is pretty much why I stay in the background and don't actively socialize.
Maybe my reaction to this chapter is a testament to how engaged I become, because I think I may just be feeling what Slash would be feeling.
REGARDING REVIEW RESPONSE
Slash, I must say, I was impressed with your responses. Your description of the dark immunity to psychic not only cements its plot importance, but also succeeds in making it believable. It's long been clear that you've had a long term plan for this story, and this kind of clear plan is comforting to me. On a related note, I am now quite comfortable with Kiako's defeat at the hands of Giovanni.
I still take issue with ground being totally immune to lightning, based on my original argument about ancillary effects. If the lightning is strong enough, it basically adds a fire attack (heat from the plasma channel) and a sonic or physical attack (rapid expansion from the plasma channel) on top of the electrical attack. Do remember how Rotom's weaker lightning left the mud "blackened and smoldering", while the stronger lightning completely vaporized it.
Types are usually convenient classifications, and in some cases such as psychic and dark I can see how they can be qualitative, but in other cases they're merely quantitative. What makes the Selfdestruct or Explosion attack "normal" type rather than fire type? It's a matter of degree. A flash fire pokemon would probably have no trouble surviving a fire blast, but what if, hypothetically, that fire blast were being delivered by a legendary pokemon? Would not the pokemon be just a little beaten up by the blast part?
While we're on the topic of classification, what separates a fighting type physical attack from a normal type physical attack, or even a flying type physical attack? I believe we would agree that it's simply a difference in delivery, and not necessarily some special damage class. Your take on ground versus flying seems to support this conclusion.
Speaking of the mud, I never did understand, physically, how Corphish produced such a tremendous mass of mud. I mean he covered an arena, thick. Can there be magic in pokemon?
REGARDING SINNERS CHAPTER 21
The end of a story or chapter is what leaves the most vivid impression, and I'll start by saying, um, wow. I'm sorry to say I'm not impressed here. I do however find myself second guessing the disappointment I will be expressing; the flood of positive reviews after you posted the chapter gives me pause. Maybe it's just me that's overreacting.
I'll start with the good. Flannery's connection with Blaziken was especially intriguing to me because it's another example of a normal human telepathically communicating with a nonpsychic pokemon, supporting the hints that "it used to be like this". It's also a more powerful example, considering the circumstances surrounding Watson's connection with Rotom, which is potentially explained by Rotom's fairly unique nature. The voice in the desert that refered to Psymakio as Miyako was a pretty powerful development. Slash sensing the cacturne was also a powerful development. I enjoyed the leadup, the insight into Slash's philosophy, the sandshrew's cave, the plot development, and overall this was a very productive and enjoyable chapter. Then things started to fall apart.
POISON
Before we get into the plot, I'd like to point out that you're making poison a bit more dangerous than it is in the game. Abilities like Toxic already make poison one of the most dangerous types in the game, but it's one thing to expend an action to severely poison a target, and quite another to get a free chance to inflict what appears to be severe poisoning (as though delivered by Toxic) on anything that touches you. The poisoning would by definition have to be severe, since it's been implied that it won't be manageable for long on healing medicine alone. Just be aware of the power balance, and keep asking yourself questions such as why more people in the world you're crafting aren't using the apparently overpowered poison pokemon such as cacturne. There must be some serious weakness?
I need to point out now, no matter how much Psymakio dislikes being in her pokeball, that is probably precisely where she should be to slow down the toxic progression. From what I gather from your mythology, pokemon are slowed into a sort of stasis or hibernation in their pokeballs. From what I know from the game, toxic poison only acts like regular poison when a pokemon is in their pokeball.
Side question: how is the telepathic relay for Slash and the rest of the pokemon still active? I could actually understand if it was an energy drain, a "system" she could simply "turn on", but Psymakio was very clear about it being a matter of concentration, a mental faculty I would imagine wouldn't be focusing on that right now.
PLOT
I did state in my last review that bad things would happen, but I expected them to happen with the same artful elegance that has permeated the story so far. The recent season finale of House MD, intentionally designed to emotionally abuse the audience, was more elegantly executed than this. I don't have a problem with drama, but I do have a problem with drama solely for the sake of drama.
After the almost comically absurd confrontation with the cacturne (enhanced by the aggressors trying to pile into the little cave like some sort of clown car), I found myself asking "well gee, how the hell does ANYBODY survive this desert?". This is an unfortunate question to be asking myself in the middle of a story, because that's the sound of suspension of disbelief breaking. The sound in this case is one of shattering glass. Why? Because it's nonsensical for vital antidotes intended for use in dangerous situations to be stored in fragile glass vials in a completely unprotected box. Maybe they need to be stored in glass so they don't react with their container, but in that case, at the very least, the box itself should be made of plastic.
Maybe I'm subconsciously more enraged right now at being forced to acknowledge that many such things are often so poorly thought out in real life as well. Nevertheless, I do feel the need to state that the durability of glass, especially proper borosilicate glass as used in science and medicine, is often grossly underestimated. It seems mighty unlikely to have had EVERY antidote vial break.
That the healing medicine entirely survived but the curing antidotes entirely didn't just adds further comical insult to injury. I've never seen Finagle's Law caricatured quite this amazingly. If you absolutely HAD to do it the way you did, then it would have been more acceptible and believable if most of the healing medicine had also been mysteriously nuked in the confrontation. Remember, it's not the direction of the plot that bothers me so much as it is the coherence and consistency.
It is at this point evident that, while you knew far ahead of time WHAT you wanted to happen in the story, you had no idea HOW you were going to make it happen, which is what was so delaying this chapter. Unfortunately, it appears you never successfully figured it out.
I still look forward to future chapters. I understand why things fell apart like they did thanks to writer's block. I'll just be happy after you've picked up the pieces and we can all move on. If nothing else I'd like to see Slash learn from this experience, and start storing his vital and fragile pharmaceuticals in a sturdy protective case. Seeing this happen once is bad enough, but letting it happen again would just be stupid.
Sorry about another review that's mostly negativity even though the overall chapter itself was mostly positive. I just feel I don't need to explain why something is good, but I do need to explain why something is bad. This whole personality is pretty much why I stay in the background and don't actively socialize.
Maybe my reaction to this chapter is a testament to how engaged I become, because I think I may just be feeling what Slash would be feeling.
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May 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Above review is 123 get.
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May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Simply awe inspiring.
This is grade A in its purest form.
(I wanna see Slash lose his temper. That oughta be fun to watch)
But Gardevoir? Heh. I kinda saw it coming, but still...
Anyway, I hope to see more updates real soon.
I hate waiting.
I am HORRIBLY impatient.
This is grade A in its purest form.
(I wanna see Slash lose his temper. That oughta be fun to watch)
But Gardevoir? Heh. I kinda saw it coming, but still...
Anyway, I hope to see more updates real soon.
I hate waiting.
I am HORRIBLY impatient.
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May 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
"Not Lance", eh?
Well, fuck, now I guess I'll have to look up redheaded Pokemon characters.
Probably safe to say it's not Silver. Or is it?
As for the voice in the desert, there's only one possibility in my mind, and that's a certain legendary Pokemon made of rock. 'Course, I could be wrong - but as it is now, my assumptions tie in pretty well with my best guess to past history of the world of Sinners.
Assuming Gardie survives the desert (well, it'd be pretty fucking depressing if she didn't, and she's a big character in the story, so we'll just say she does) are you going to say anything about the TM Slash bought for her earlier on? And on a related note, how do they work in the Sinners world?
Thanks for a good read, and keep writing.
Well, fuck, now I guess I'll have to look up redheaded Pokemon characters.
Probably safe to say it's not Silver. Or is it?
As for the voice in the desert, there's only one possibility in my mind, and that's a certain legendary Pokemon made of rock. 'Course, I could be wrong - but as it is now, my assumptions tie in pretty well with my best guess to past history of the world of Sinners.
Assuming Gardie survives the desert (well, it'd be pretty fucking depressing if she didn't, and she's a big character in the story, so we'll just say she does) are you going to say anything about the TM Slash bought for her earlier on? And on a related note, how do they work in the Sinners world?
Thanks for a good read, and keep writing.