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Umm the seed bomb part wasn't a attack per se. Read a few reviews above and you will see what I mean. Like one suggested water sport for gardevoir. Seed Bomb basically has too do with when slash cums on gardevoir.

Umm the seed bomb part wasn't a attack per se. Read a few reviews above and you will see what I mean. Like one suggested water sport for gardevoir. Seed Bomb basically has too do with when slash cums on gardevoir.

Bret 2008-02-06 id # 3000046853
Umm the seed bomb part wasn't a attack per se. Read a few reviews above and you will see what I mean. Like one suggested water sport for gardevoir. Seed Bomb basically has too do with when slash cums on gardevoir.


GenoLiger 2008-02-06 id # 3000046854
Umm the seed bomb part wasn't a attack per se. Read a few reviews above and you will see what I mean. Like one suggested water sport for gardevoir. Seed Bomb basically has too do with when slash cums on gardevoir.

Oh ho ho, this is interesting. Bret and GenoLiger's posts are identical... I wonder what this means....

But just to prevent this from being spam; does anyone have an idea when Chapter 20 is supposed to come out? Slash never even gave us a general deadline, that I know of at least....

Well on one note, I don't really recall Slash ever giving specific deadlines...>_>

However, he said in the e-mail he sent out that he's juuust not quite finished with chapter 20, but he's getting to work on a Valentine's Day oneshot. :)

Bret, what would be the point of Psymakio learning Focus Blast or Healing Wish? While I could see Healing Wish possibly being useful, Recover would be much more effective, and Focus Blast is hardly an intuitive choice. And even working within solely 'statistical' parameters, Focus Blast suffers a lack of STAB, a pathetic accuracy, and a low range of viable targets compared to the much more efficient and potent psychic attacks Psymakio can wield.

As for Slash learning Pokemon attacks... He's a human. Last I checked humans have one huge advantage over Pokemon anyway - humans can make their own weapons and defenses. Such as, say, Pokeballs? The only reason Slash would possibly want a Pokemon attack for is to deal with humans - and it's better to just learn how to use a knife and shiv them instead, or pick up a martial art or two and crack some skulls together. Don't even get me started on guns...

Originally I was going to post it after you posted the new chapter or the one shot but I got impatient so I put it up right now.

I got bored and decided to re-read everything in a lot of the early chapters you apologized for taking so long to update and yet you still take forever and I agree with you the early chapters aren�ft quit as good as some of the newer stuff but their still some of the best written things on the site oh and by going back I�fve realized a few things plot wise that I overlooked before small foreshadows that only recently started to make sense I�fm beginning to understand more about what Kiako meant when he said that Gardevoir could be what they need.

Not a whole lot to say about the first few chapters other than what I started with but the thing with the Aqua grunts was intense it helped to show just how ruthless Kiako really is and the conversation with Birney also really drove home how much darker the story is than the games or anime that the teams are willing to kill hundreds of people just for there goals.

As for the Birds and the Bees chapter I think that Kirlia asking it seemed very believable I can understand it after all for her that was a teenage stage in her life and that�fs typical when an individual gets curious about it.

The night where Kirlia was looking in the magazine was so cute and funny I loved how Growlithe surprised her I�fm sure that if Slash had caught her the story would have ended right than because she would have died of embarrassment.

During the battle with Maxie I couldn�ft help but think about the phrase The needs of the many out way the needs of the few. I still really wonder which one of them started the dream or if it was either one some greater force might have sparked it and their own desires took over afterwards.

And I love how with each evolution Gardevoir got more mature especially her final stage where she became so adult and funny I loved how she teased Slash when he first woke up. And I completely agree with everything that Slash said about rape it�fs one of the worst acts that can be done there is no excuse for it ever I just loved how real made the emotions in that conversation.

And the part where they talked about the mating process I could feel all of Gardevoir�fs worries and concerns whenever love someone it�fs always tough to think about what would happen if they left you no matter how close you get there will always be a least some fear of rejection. But the thing that got to me the most was the fact that without the improved bond that her lifespan would only be twenty years at most to only be with the one you love for such a short time would be unfair especially since they have to keep it so secret.

When Watson first showed up I had no idea how deep of a past he would have the Burning of the beach was just so horrible it�fs easy to understand why he would leave after being involved in something so awful I�fm sure that his wife would have never wanted him to join Magma if there had been any inkling that they would do something that terrible. But aside form that Watson was just plain great there were so many funny moment with him from figuring out what they�fd down while he was shopping to offering advice and of course his littlie present for Gardevoir at the hotel I hope that Flannery adds at least a fraction of the plot that the old man did.

The scene where Slash was teaching Gardevoir to read had to one of the cutest fucking things I�fve ever thought of and when she corrected his grammar I laughed out loud the next cutest thing is the thought of her growling at every girl who gets near him I would love to have a Gardevoir doll that growls when you push a button I�fd carry it every where and sleep with it in my arms whenever I went to bed just like Slash and his Teddiursa.

One thing that still amazes me is how long it took for the actual sex scene to happen sure there was some rubbing and Gardevoir getting the lollipop treatment but still no real penetration for the longest time I mean here on Aff just about everything is sex or sex after a few chapters but you waited a very long time and I gotta say it was well worth it it took a long time and there wasn�ft as much as there could have been but still it was some of the best sex I ever read and as good as it was I�fm actually willing to wait for it in-between plot development chapters which I just can�ft wait for.

Just a littlie something else to say even though the anal scene was as hot as it was loving it wasn�ft really all that submissive writing loving S&M isn�ft easy but it can be done being rough and forceful but and the same time letting the sub know that it�fs done out of love do some research and you might be able to make something that truly shows a master slave relationship. Also just as a note the lube he used made me think of something I once said to a friend was a joke it was �gYou smell like strawberries and butt sex.�h

And as for who the interloper is I have some new theories all of which point to the prophecy I�fm not saying anything more because I�fm still working it out in my mind as to just what it is but the fact the Gardevoir could read the tablet with no prior knowledge of how to read just goes to show the she has some king of connection with it as does Slash even if he doesn�ft believe in a God there�fs no denying that something is guiding his fate as well as that of everyone he meets.

As for the Thunderbolt TM that Slash gave her I think that was a great choice just to bad for him the attack Miracle Eye wasn�ft available it renders Dark types vulnerable to Psychic type moves which would be great.

The Song makes a lot more sense no that I�fve read everything over again I have a far greater understanding than I once did but still there�fs a lot I don�ft get jus yet oh and One winged Angel is a great song for most of this story

Now on to the dream Kiako had or should I say nightmare I wonder just how much more frightening his power would be if whatever it was that had be done to him had never been done I�fm sure that if he ever finds out that Giovanni was the one who commissioned those horrible experiments and tortures than all traces of loyalty will be gone as if the never existed in the first place. I hope that whatever their plan is for Gardevoir that it�fs nothing nearly so terrible.

The part with Rayquaza was so awesome the intensity of the Man with Demon eyes and his Gyarados going up against the lord of the sky was just beyond cool I can�ft wait to find out exactly what ended up happening I know there�fs no way that any of them died but with so many powerful attacks being exchanged there must have be a few serious wounds.

Looking back on Slash�fs original plan I think Watson would have beat his ass big time for one thing Growlithe would have been taken down in no time at all same for Graveler.
And his second thoughts about the plan he was having just before the match made sense right before a battle as important as that it�fs easy to understand why he might have been rather nervous but it�fs a good thing that he went with the team that he did.
And as for the strategy if pokemon were real and I saw someone try something like that I�fd think they were a complete idiot and loser but as it turns out rather than being stupid he was a genius you�fd have to be to come up with something so insane and actually pull it of.

When he used Mud Sport I nearly shit a brick I never use moves like that in the game because it�fs pretty much useless same goes for most moves like that but I suppose that in a real battle like the kinds that you have in this story I bet that those moves really could make the difference between victory and defeat.

When Lanturn got healed due to it�fs Volt Absorb ability I thought for sure that Slash was in serious trouble but he managed to turn it around in his favor and when the first half of the match but to no avail.

When Rotom came out I was surprised that just pain cool I think that a lot of what allowed it to win was the physiological factor it�fs power was a big part in it�fs victory but Gardevoir and Slash had never seen anything like it and all the unusual things that it was doing and saying it�fs easy to understand how anyone could get freaked out by it. And one thing that was pretty foretelling was when Rotom said �gI CAN END THIS BATTLE WITH A SINGLE SWIPE OF MY HANDS.�h he wasn�ft kidding his Shadow Claw was way to strong and with the type advantage there was no hope.

The fact that Watson had a bond with Rotom was interesting a lot weaker than Slash and Gardevoir but still I�fm sure that only very special people and very strong pokemon are capable of doing something like that like Kiako and Gyarados but he�fs not any ordinary person to begin with.

And the after battle that was just so sweet and cute I felt so bad that Slash lost but what hurt the most was how badly hurt Gardevoir was as almost bad as if I�fd gotten hurt myself I hated that that she was injured but it makes sense no one can go up against such a powerful opponent and get away unscratched.
Just one thing that bothered me a bit in retrospect relating to gym matches was in Dewford gym there was no mention of any of the protective measures. I know that it was a smaller gym but still there should have been a least something about it. And about the Xatu sitting on the judges shoulder I think that might look a bit strange because it weighs 33.1 lbs and it stands at about 4��11 so it would be kind of awkward to hold something like that up.

One thing that I wonder about is since Dark types are so hated what about Sidney of the Elite Four he�fs got nothing but dark types. And as a side note I believe I know who both the King and the Shadow but if I�fm write about the Shadow it would explain in part why the Jirachians hate Dark types so much.

Well that�fs it for Sinners proper next I�fll review the one-shot How Many Licks Does It Take...

The opening was really�cSweet�cPardon the pun but a bit risky even if the were hiding kissing with so many people around was dangerous but I can�ft blame them. I can understand why Gardevoir would have liked to join up with a pirate crew than the could be a littlie bit safer they wouldn�ft have to worry about being found out just because of small things like kisses on the cheek or holding hands.

The fairy costume was wearing was so adorable I�fd love to see a picture of that if anyone could draw it very good I�fm sure that everyone else here would be very pleased. A good scene to draw would be her standing in the doorway with her bag open Gardevoir is just so cute and like Slash said she�fs like a adult woman some times but at other times she�fs no different than a littlie girl I suppose it�fs mostly because even though her body and mind are fully mature she�fs still very young in terms of age.

It�fs really a good thing that Gardevoir didn�ft eat all that candy or she would have been in no shape for the battle because she would have been sick to her stomach and probably had a tooth ache and the thought of her sitting in the dentist office is cute I�fd hate for her to be in pain.

The part where Psymakio complained about her feet hurting really got my hopes up of a foot rub for her after all I have a big time foot fetish maybe later on you can fit something like that into either the main story or another one-shot.

When Gardevoir started sucking on the lollipop I could tell just how Slash felt if I had a beautiful girlfriend doing something like that I highly doubt I would have been able to hold myself back at all.

And the part where she offered to share it with him there�fs no way that I would have been able to turn down an offer like that I already love blueberry and I�fm sure that it would taste even better if it was shared with someone as sexy as Gardevoir is.
After it fell down her front it only made sense for him to want to clean her with his tongue after all on their first date he said he wanted to do just that when she got a bit of ketchup on her face. Plus any excuse to lick her is a good one.

Oh and about actually doing that kind of the thing with a lollipop it�fs very doable I�fve seen a lot of porn where that sort of thing was done and once when I got bored I shoved a sucker up my own ass it was a bit itchy and sticky but there were no problems.

Last thing to say about the story is that it is without a doubt one of the hottest sexiest stories on the entire site and even better it had some very funny moments such as Slash saying that everything might have just been a plan to steal the candy. And of course where she pointed out that she gave him a treat and he pointed out that he still owed him but the funniest part was without question when Watson asked about what happened and Gardevoir teleported of leaving poor Slash all alone. And I thought up a new and better answer as to where the rest of the team was they could have been helping Watson out with whatever it was he was doing.

Now on to all the Ash bashing some direct some more subtle in Sinners anyway but in Liek, use thundershock okay it was the most blatant and open bit of out right hate toward a character that I�fve ever seen.

Now with as and Pikachu something you said in this story got me to thinking. I once read a fan fic where Oak said he�fd made a drug that would make a pokemon stronger when you sodomize them I believe Ash must have used some of that and because of it his Pikachu is strong enough to violate the laws of nature either that or the other pokemon feels so sorry for the poor littlie thing having such a stupid trainer that they just act like they lost.

Now that I�fve got that out of the way on to the violent rape�cThat didn�ft sound so awful when I first thought of I but I digress. First of all I�fm not a big yaoi fan but for some odd reason this kind of turned me on just a littlie I don�ft know why I guess it�fs mostly because your such a good author that no matter what just so long as you wrote it�fs going to be good.

One thing I kind of missed was the quote about Ash trying to think of Pokemon metaphors for the experience most of which I must say were pretty clever if a bit disturbing.

When Team Rocket burst in a cracked up I�fd forgotten just how funny that was it took like five minutes for me to stop laughing I don�ft blame them for running away if I saw something like that I�fd have been long gone the second that I saw something like that.

I think that unlike Ash I would have been a bit more worried about the giant rock snake fucking me than having something put in my mouth that just came out my ass.

The line about an orgy of Grimers was one of the worst images I�fve ever gotten which is strange hat out of every thing ing this story that�fs what bothered me the most.

Just one thing I�fm kind of curios about and at the same time disgusted by at the same time is what would Onix's cum look like would it be the normal color or more gray and since it�fs made of stone would there be gravel if so than that would mean it had chunky cum which would have made things even worse.

A few more questions and I�fm done Where did Onix get the cigarette and where can I get Poke-Porn 1 trough 7?

Okay now for the very last things I�fm going to say I now have two Kaishakunin one of theme is a Blissey that I raised from an egg and the other is a Roserade that I caught as a
Budew.

Another attack that Gardevoir could learn is Mud Bomb (For those who don�ft get it that�fs a scat joke.)

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae

Oh for attacks you could've had her learn Focus Blast. It's a fighting SPECIAL type move. Oh and did you know she can learn Healing wish? oh and there's a attack slash can learn even though he's a human Seed Bomb.

Valentines day. Slash, both the writer and the charecter should make Gardevoir very happy for this occasion.

Oh, and I have succesfully bred and hatched Rotom. It's not a legendary. Well it's cool if it is in the story, I just wanted to check that.

As Slash has told me, he's not very familiar with the 4th-Gen Pokemon, moves, or battle-style (though the battle-style isn't as important in this case). So, take anything mentioned that doesn't quite fit but could be workable about 4th-Gen Pokemon as artistic license.

Besides, the accuracy isn't as important as the story-telling, and you have to admit it makes for a more tense and exciting battle to think about Psymakio pitting her wits against a legendary Pokemon, a spark of the Thunder Gods, as opposed to just a high-level opposing Pokemon. :P

I love it!!!! and I'll hate when it ends. :-(